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Posted: Mon Aug 31, 2009 7:39 pm

Help me out!

What needs fixed the most? How could it be Awesome-er? What doesn't fit?

My current plan is to redraw the figure in the foreground, draw the background, and those obnoxious bricks in the foreground >: . Those 3 marks around the table will be knives and silverware.

Posted: Tue Sep 01, 2009 12:39 am

hmm always hard to critique something that looks overal really good

but lets give it a go biggrin .

I actaully dont mind the bricks in the front. You could even throw in some more definision here and there, because normaly stuff in the forground of a drawing is more detailed in the front than the back. With that said i actaully think the bricks futher in the back should be more random with areas faded out etc. So that its more subjective than it is now.

You could try and blur the far back of the background .. that might give a new feeling to it smile .

and the only other thing thats really sticks out is the change in level of detail here and there. like what i think is supposed to be a flame from the cannon and the lady being eaten/taken away by the monster. they are kinda really low on detail considering the other stuff drawn next to them ^^. and the lady seems unaffected by enviorment lightning .. as bright as a star ;D

but yah thats kinda my 10 cents

ow and flames normaly give off a glow so you might wanna add some extra color to the leg of the robot and maybe the ground thats infront of the cannon

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Posted: Wed Sep 02, 2009 8:43 pm

Tanks alot for your analysis and response Goshujin Sama!

If anyone else wants to critique, please do! I'm not complement fishing; I want to know how you see my illustration, because I can only see it through my impartial perspective.

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The background needs alot of fixing, but I want to redesign it a little before I redraw it. I'm not very happy with it at all either.

The woman held by the robot definitely needs to be darker, and also have some reason to be getting light. I'm considering putting headlights on the robot.

I put the reflection from the fire on the front leg and it looks much better!

I still want to make the women sexier (a silly decision, but one I stand by). The woman in the back is fairly sexy and easy to sexy-up. The woman in the front though confuses me. I gave her a ripped dress and exposed panties, but it doesn't feel sexy, it just feels matter-of-fact.

Why is that? I can't figure it out.

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Posted: Thu Sep 03, 2009 1:43 am

The girl at the bottom of the art piece...
Either it's part of her clothing like I dunno what they call it.
Or I dunno, but her right leg looks funny

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Posted: Thu Sep 03, 2009 8:20 am

well awesome just showing panties is never sexy when they are just thrown in your face ;D.

atleast i always find things sexy in art when its done really subtle and flow nice into the figure.

here like this artist has some sexy a** art http://plusnine.deviantart.com/art/15082009-133440359 like even tough her a** is thrown in your face her panties really flow into the figure and are done somewhat subtle

my fav pic of him is this one http://plusnine.deviantart.com/art/Trey-01-104303642 the one to the right is just perfect !!

so yah what you can do is might add some left over strings of thread over her leg covering up her panties more. making her breast cleavage pop out more might work too. More skin is always big points ;D

but the biggest problem is probably her expression is to serious.

---- anyways this what i had in mind, but it will be alot of repainting for you xD

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Posted: Fri Sep 04, 2009 1:37 pm

Wow! Thanks alot for your input guys. That really helps. (I knew if I was going to ask anyone about sexy ladies from digital art it should be Goshujin Sama.)

Do you have any other good sexy illustration refs? I was looking for them last night and drew a blank. I want to start my next piece and flood it with sexy ladies, but wanted to look at some references.

I'll post an updated version of this work as soon as I get around to drawing the background.

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Posted: Fri Sep 04, 2009 3:16 pm

http://ongaro.deviantart.com/

http://ionen.deviantart.com/

http://wakkawa.deviantart.com/

http://warrenlouw.deviantart.com/

http://cellar-fcp.deviantart.com/

http://kinggainer.deviantart.com/

http://saejinoh.deviantart.com/

these peeps make some sexy a** art

Posted: Wed Sep 16, 2009 11:14 am

I like it. I think it looks good bro. Since the illustration is a bit bizarre, I think things look fine the way they are. One thing that really sticks out to me is the small blur on the Carriage(?). Since it's not 100% complete I can't say too much about it yet. Nice work so far. =)

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