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PostPosted: Fri Nov 25, 2005 7:28 pm


I'm just gonna post what I have in here, all together like...
ribbed for your pleasure...




To My Son, Who Grows Too Quickly

It's come to my attention
that, despite my most earnest desire,
you've decided to betray your childhood.
It was your own mouth, whispering bloody messages
on you pillowcase while you slept,
that gave you away.

I wish you'd quit losing your teeth.
Inflation and Chinese Industrial growth
have severely decreased their market value.
Not to mention, the poor Fairies will soon
be constitutionally phased out.

However, since God Himself,
who ages not yet demands we do so,
has willed that your innocent lips be bloodied,
please try to keep it to a minimum.
In this way it should be possible:

Avoid those things which would leave
your mouth impure or corroded.
May I never see smoke curl from your
cherry tongue - neither
from tightly rolled carcinogen peer pressure,
nor from the smoldering devastation
of F-bombs.

These things keep close to your heart.
But whatever you do,
don't forget to floss.
PostPosted: Sat Nov 26, 2005 2:48 pm


Iloveyou! Iloveit! Ilovetypingwithoutspaces!
*ahem* Sorry. No, I don't like typing without spaces, but what're you going to do? You're going to publish that poem, that's what. O< I, the great and mercifull trap of Rodents command you!


Please write more.
tGaMToR.
AKA
RT

wAtFoRd


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PostPosted: Sun Nov 27, 2005 8:29 pm


Thanks very much! sweatdrop

Ein Feel Teh Luff... heart
PostPosted: Mon Nov 28, 2005 9:57 am


Follow My Lied
To My Son, Who Grows Too Quickly

It's come to my attention
that, despite my most earnest desire, <-- Remove the comma after "that".
you've decided to betray your childhood.
It was your own mouth, whispering bloody messages
on you pillowcase while you slept,
that gave you away.

I wish you'd quit losing your teeth. <-- I love this line, and the way it trails after the last stanza. Like. Perfectly.
Inflation and Chinese Industrial growth
have severely decreased their market value.
Not to mention, the poor Fairies will soon
be constitutionally phased out. <-- Eh, "phased out" really isn't great. I don't like it. I do, however, like the "constitutionally"... try to work that in without using the "phased out"? Maybe?

However, since God Himself, <-- Forget the comma at the end.
who ages not yet demands we do so, <-- This line needs to be in parenthesis. The commas just aren't working, and clutter it up. It would work better to say "(who ages not, yet demands we do so). You don't need any punctuation after the end parentheses, and you DO need a comma after "not".
has willed that your innocent lips be bloodied,
please try to keep it to a minimum.
In this way it should be possible:

Avoid those things which would leave
your mouth impure or corroded.
May I never see smoke curl from your
cherry tongue - neither
from tightly rolled carcinogen peer pressure,
nor from the smoldering devastation
of F-bombs. <-- Nice way of capturing the "bomb". lol. At first, I read it and thought of it as stupid, but then I reread it, and it actually suits it well, since it's a father speaking to his son.

These things keep close to your heart.
But whatever you do,
don't forget to floss. <-- You have an unnecessary space before "don't". I like to nitpick.

Kjralon
Captain


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PostPosted: Mon Nov 28, 2005 6:14 pm


A New England Sunset

His blazing casket was extinguished
as it stretched slowly into the yawning,
disinterested grave. Nothing
but an atmospheric illusion.

As I joined my closest family and friends in
wiping the sudden flash from our minds,
I caught a glimpse of his dearly beloved,
for whom we were really gathered there that day;

her tears in profile were lustrous gold,
cascading profoundly from a grievous and molten spring.
They burned a path down the shadowed valley
of her sunken eyes, illuminating the beautiful
wreckage of her once supple cheek.

Scattering them quietly across the lawn,
as thickly and as quickly as embers escape
a collapsing fire, never once did she reach up
to collect them or keep them in.

As I regained my focus,
hers was off in the distance,
perhaps carried off
on the sails of a northbound ship.

Her fingers remained folded,
loosely clutching a dry handkerchief;
her pain now unabashedly emblazoned
upon her brightly stained complexion.

I honestly believed that its light would be sustained
long after its source sank
traditionally
into the western sea.
PostPosted: Mon Nov 28, 2005 6:18 pm


Aural Sex

She likes to watch.
Large groups especially,
in starched shirts and sequined satin
on a warm Sunday evening.

Fingers grasping, groping,
pressing firm for a suspended instant,
then passing coyly to the next anxious tone.
She takes her pleasure aurally.

She could watch me tickle my ivory
for hours on end, or fondle my fretboard
up and down, back and forth.
But it's groups that get her metronome ticking.

The innocent giggle of violin foreplay
lifting - sweetly exploring the curve of her cheek.
A Prelude to the evening's excitement:
a thoughtfully planned schedule of climax and refraction.

Now commanded by the lyrical cadence
of a beating, tight-stretched timpani skin,
the ecstatic cries of a softly fingered flute are answered
by the shivering bravado moans of horns and bassoons.

And as the master grasps his baton tighter,
furiously pummeling her with sharps, flats, and semitones,
he forces her to a melody laced euphoria;
sense and sensibility giving way to rapturous rhythm.

Staccato...

An eternal gap fills a second's void
between a theme's final thrust and her ejaculate eruption.
Screams and shouts demand more! MORE!
ENCORE!!!

Needless to say, it's quite an eargasm-
unprocessed notes escaping, dripping,
falling thickly to an echo's death
on the fresh marble floor.

A deep, satisfying symphony.
A quick waltz after lunch.
She really likes to watch.
Large groups especially.

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Follow My Lied

PostPosted: Mon Nov 28, 2005 6:21 pm


I Hate Politics


A pompous despot
muses over his Christmas fire
stoked with the latest opinion polls.
Cheers to another landslide victory!
(and a population buried.)

His steel valor once stabbed lushly
into jell-o battlefields,
(the path of least resistance)
turning mothers into martyrs.
Of course, someone forgot to tell the children,
"There's no crying in war!"

But numbers, despite their best efforts, cannot lie.

His greatest pleasure his greatest strategy:
"The way to a man's heart is through his stomach."
To receive the world on a silver platter,
he was glad to extend his own plate -
conspicuously full.

Winning hearts and minds,
one distended belly at a time.





...and here's an older one, done as a creative final for a British Lit. class,
based on
The Rubyiat of Omar Kayaam



Omar's Wisdom Gleaned


O WAKE! And drink the sun's reviving rays!
Imbibe the river sweetly as it plays
across the monoliths of glass and stone
that mortal man has made to call his home:
reflection's caught so quickly in the eye.

Let light dance soft across my lover's face
and fill her eyes upon our next embrace.
But Love! shine clearer still and dull this sun,
that, when life's hard fought toil's finally won,
I might follow her to higher planes.

The garden path she walks upon is warm.
The signs she sees within the world affirm
that beauty springs created from within,
not prone to be destroyed by death or sin;
that vanity's bewailed the most in hell.

For Lucifer does surely rent his face,
appalled indeed by what it has replaced.
The Morning Star stamped out in Righteous Wrath!
no longer knows a rose along his path,
for beauty in his house can take no hold.

So try he must! to turn our Eve to Night,
to sow the seeds of Silence, Sin, and Spite,
to rob the earth of what he sees as good,
to tear apart our human brotherhood,
and plunge the world, through chaos, into war.

So, often Aries' storm sweeps 'cross the plain
To drown the fertile fields in bloody rain
He'll plant his human seed deep in the earth
To grow his shrines of memory and hurt,
the Cross that always signals sacrifice.

For Vanity! his vicious hands employ
in agony, to deconstruct our joy.
Within the Kingdom of a loving God,
Poor Mephisto, forever to be trod
down by what he still has the pride to scoff!


The distant drum is pounding louder still!
The time will come when men have had their fill
of corporal lust and carnal opiate;
Eternal Truth is soon to propagate
amongst the quick and quite amongst the dead.

But Love! Entwine your branches 'round my heart!
Please keep my soul and body far apart!
For when I cease to feel the Winter's sting
I will drink deep the endless light of Spring
and know your touch so absent from the world!

Across the flowing waters I'll be borne
and reach behind the flowing curtain torn.
With love I'll see the souls of humans cured
And through the Gates my soul shall be returned
To Thy Kingdom, coming from above.

So Beauty! held within my lover's smile,
please dwell with me for just a little while.
For God and Time have yet to reconcile,
I'll wait with peace for Love to end its trial.

In all things I have yet to see -
Beginning, End: they're both in me.
PostPosted: Mon Nov 28, 2005 7:21 pm


An American Prayer



O Shapeless, Nameless,Offensive Lord(s) on high!

Force not upon me thine lables, brands, ways, or wonts,
lest I in turn should offend my brothers unprincipled,
insecure, rebellious, or most greviously logical.

But please, in Thine ambiguous mercy,
"bless" the great states which, sovereign all,
unite in noblest field of fairest shining star!

We beseech Thee, O G(g)od(ess)([e]s) to secure these
our rights to life, liberty, and property - which Thou
(perhaps) hast bestowed so generously upon us;

that to secure these rights, Thou who are (likely) most
high would condescend from Thine glorious throne
and deliver us from evil.

May our spacious skies be just compensation for our
great economic prosperity!
May our amber waves splash generously on foreign shores-
that all might taste freedom and know that it is good!

May our purple mountains achieve a more neutral shade of brown,
so as not to so flagrantly endorse homosexuality,
(which [may] be offensive in your eyes, but just gives us the wiggins.)
Likewise, may out "fruited" plains be "vegetated".

And Thou, O Lord(s), who (might) knowest all things
that have been, are, and are yet to be; allow us to know
Your full will, that we may finally cease to
hate, main, and kill our brothers every time we hazard a guess.

Amen.

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Follow My Lied

PostPosted: Tue Nov 29, 2005 12:43 pm


Reminds Me of My Mother

Comfort-coated cookies
have no problem-solving sensibility.
No life lesson's gleaned
from a shame-laced lasagna
or chicken a la care.

More dessert to cover his bare, bone-white
plate of shortcomings? Please.
His cup runneth over
with empty glances and
full stomachs.

Margarine was never quite good enough.
Why must he be everything
but her
butter?
PostPosted: Tue Dec 06, 2005 2:50 pm


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PostPosted: Sun Dec 18, 2005 12:26 pm


I was starting to miss my beloved iambic pentameter rofl

Ode to a Sheet of Paper


I dare to strike my graphite plow to pulp
and render atoms ordered, that my thoughts
might tear the tender tundra and take root
before the stream of consciousness is stopped.

Such risk for conquest is the cost of art!
A million fields fall fallow to the heap
when impotence lays claim to fertile tracts
and words become a worm embedded deep

within a promised land, leaving it old
by leeching life and sucking soil cold.
A single supple sheet that cannot yield
must face the fire with prospects unrevealed.

I take a risk, yet know plain where I go -
a beaten path before me leads my hand,
for I am not the first to rend a sheet
or stare across this vacant loose-leaf land.







How Presumptuous, I!


I'll take my evening stroll,
certain that air will part -
generously allowing me to pass.
(No miracle required)

So sure am I that
solid ground will never
let one molecule of me
slip through its porous padding
to be absorbed by some
upward-reaching root.

I'd never dream that water,
wrought with cupped hand,
might sift through my spinning skin
like a colander, leaving
but a moist palm to lick
as it drips backward from my knuckles.

But why should some Great Arbiter
not loose my walls, tear my membranes,
or close the rippling air?

Cannot He who lights the sun snuff it between His fingers?
Cannot the Editor of History turn His pen and justify?
Cannot He who etched Universal Law in stone also see it smashed -
scattered into the primordial mix from whence it once surely came?

I'll take my evening stroll. Certain.
How presumptous, I!
PostPosted: Sun Dec 25, 2005 7:30 pm


I've Stalked Through Caves

I've stalked through caves
like ransacked graves
and touched the art of war.
But formal fights
in city lights
cut deeper to my core.

I've felt such bright
drops singe the night,
and burn points through the dark;
but choose instead
to dull my tread
through lamp posts in the park.

I've heard the soft
notes slowly waft
from rain-clad afternoons
and drank the strumm-
ing of the sun
as echoes from the moon.

But let me choose
some jazz or blues
to give my soul a bend.
For these will be,
at least for me,
the first to meet the end.

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PostPosted: Tue Dec 27, 2005 9:32 am


Upon Witnessing a Condom Being Ejected from a School Bus

It flapped - snagged
on a window clip
rusted since "bussing"
was a threat rather than
a mode of transportation.
("White flight" kicked my funny bone
as I set my windshield wippers on "kill".)

I suppose it was a "rebel banner"-
a thin red middle finger
(ribbed for her pleasure)
wetly wagged at the world
before splashing down
to meet concrete reality
and much harder rubber.
(At least they were still teaching sex
education.)

How like bird s**t (which, of the two,
had more right to be determined "waste")
it hit the curve of my streak-free shine.
(Always right after you get a wash!)
As I swept it aside in tight angles,
I couldn't help but consider myself
"the farmer who cast seed upon the rocks".
(Blashpemey was still learned
outside of the classroom.)

As their flag rode the ridge of my tire,
the kids just sat, stoic - thinking about...
what?
Sure their little wheels were spinning,
but where were they being driven?
(The way of Soddom, Gommorah, Thelma and Louise.)


When I got home,
I sold my stock in "tomorrow"
to some upstart convienience store,
from which I'll probably buy porn later on.
That way, I'll have help
as I habitually fossilze
future generations
upon my bathroom wall.



Chess Lessons From My Father



From the foggy banks of my memory,
a weathered hand still emerges sagely,
landing delicately on the back row of a civil war;
one that underwent
weekly reconstruction
upon a white-black-white-black battlefield.

"See, son, how they used to keep their women?
Always according to her own color
and always next to her man."

In the beginning, wives were to submit to their husbands;
that is, until checks, threats, and advances broke (as they always do)
the wish-sewn strings of domestication.
If anything, a lesson learned early is a lesson learned well.

"Sure you want to move your Queen out, Dad?"
"I got a woman I can depend on!"
"But the King's unprotected..."

Pawns fell like the days and months from
his dime store calendar,
but did he feel them pass?
A woman to depend on...
how could she abandon him there
to stand alone in his back row?

Checkmate.
Father and son in their proper places.
Some things I had yet to learn,
but again my world made sense.
The two lessons I learned that day:
sometimes people have to leave,
and sometimes there's nowhere left to go.
PostPosted: Sat Dec 31, 2005 3:56 pm


I Am The King of Rome

It was clear that my hair was the only casualty
of that ill-conceived chemical warfare.
I'd always dreamt of a growth spurt,
but woke instead to the nightmare of one inside.
So, I told her to take me to Sears.
Nobody ever died at Sears.
Guess she'd heard that one before.

She asked me what I was thinking;
I asked her if she wasn't already
tired of second opinions.

Traffic slowed, the flow stemmed
by some massive clot - or a single
shopping cart. One well-placed speck
can waste a lot of time.
She passed up Sears with a cough -
I would have to work on my timing.

She asked me how I could sleep;
I asked her if she'd ever lost
any up-hill battles.

My casket laid on the coffee table,
buried under bills, dishes,
permission slips, and dirty laundry.
Always ready to help, honey.
Give me all of it, I'll take it
with me when I go.

She asked me if I was ready;
I reminded her she wasn't coming along.



Tourist Trap


Sun-salted, stubbled coals
begin again to burn
and bake the scent of life
into the breaking bread of dawn.
It spreads and flattens,
as tradition commands,
without yeast.

A sacred sign sprays
soft, misty shadow;
snuffing the stygian sands.
It leans, arms outstretched and untired -
offering embrace to pilgrims on trek
through coarse Jerusalem sunfall.

Righteousness rides again
at the right hand
of religious recidivists -
the left is left
to drag their newly-shorn
sin through temple dirt,
animal entrails, and
a steadily mounting morning.

A wall waits yet for weeping,
and wailing winds kiss cracks
that drip with prayers passed
and past. Bricks caked and breaking
under years of tears and anger
collect their crumbs; reflect there, dumb
and stoic under a cycle sure to be
shortly renewed.

And here stand I (map in hand)
before one of a thousand
empty tombs!, learning the
last lesson Jesus taught:
"Early to bed, early to rise".

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