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 Posted: Fri Aug 28, 2009 3:58 pm
Character's name:Trace TazukaAliases/Nicknames:Age: 95/10Occupation: StudentReiatsu color:Icy BlueAppearance: Trace is 4'4 and is not very muscular.Trace is a short and very small student.He stands out because of his short and kid features.His hair is spiky and silver.His eyes is a light blue color.His eyebrows match the color of his hair,silver.His has no teenage bumps.He also has no mustache.He sticks to the academy uniform.Because of his small body,the uniform tends to be a bit baggy. Trace TazukaAccessories:N/A Personality: Trace is a very quiet person. He never really talks to anyone. Its like he is always in his own little world. Trace never really plays with anyone. Due to his liking of soccer,he does have a chance of talking to someone who shares the same interests. For the people who doesn't share the interests he would become friends with them only if they were in the group and develops a bond with them. Trace is also a very polite person. He respects higher authority and does what they say without question unless he thinks there would be a better way to handle the situation.Bio/History: Trace was a elementary student in the world of the Living. He was very smart and talented. There was a heated rivalry and some gangs and they had a shootout. Just as Trace was coming back from the park,a bullet missed its target and hit Trace. About a month later, Trace began to get chased by hollows. He was about to get eaten but a shinigami came a rescued him. He was then sent to the Soul Society. Trace lived in a bad part of Rukongai. There was a lot of crimes going on there. Trace was one of those kids who runs over to a place and searches for answers. A robber was still there and knock him out. Once he awoke,he was at home on the couch. Just then,a figure told him that he should go to the shinigami academy and learn how to fight hand to hand rather than fighting with a weapon all the time.. Months later,he enrolled to the shinigami academy to learn. Kidou:N/AAbilities:N/ASkills: hand-to-hand-below average
swordsmanship-talented
kidou-average
Accomplished classes:N/APending classes: Favorite Subject:Disliked Subject:Favorite teacher:Disliked teacher:Expectations: Trace expects to grow up into a stronger shinigami.He also hopes to become as strong as a captain.
optional: Likes:Cold foods and snacks
friends
Sleeping
Dislikes:bullies
hollowTheme song:Hobbies:Soccer Quirks:
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Posted: Fri Aug 28, 2009 11:58 pm
First of all, please make a space between the full stops and the start of the next sentence. Please.
Then, as to the content of your profile; I would like you to expand mostly personality and history, you could also describe how he died.
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Posted: Sat Aug 29, 2009 10:41 am
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Posted: Sat Aug 29, 2009 11:40 am
All in all a lot better, I'd just like you to delete the last sentence in your history/bio. He couldn't have already learned how to fight, considering the Academy hasn't started yet.
After you've done that:
Accepted.
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