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Mr.Tooshie

PostPosted: Wed Nov 23, 2005 5:42 pm


Ok, so far I've only written a few things in English...

But here they are, subject to open eyes and criticism...

Care to leave a comment or two? A bitter thorn or a sweet devotion? Any other randomness this 'writings' reminded you of?

Post them here!
PostPosted: Wed Nov 23, 2005 5:53 pm


1 of many...

What happened to me?
He, he, he. nothing. I'm just fine.
Keep the cool.

Or at least pretend to.
It's so easy. yes...
So easy to fake,
to be someone else.

But the emotions never disappear.
If you shut them down they charge harder.
And its making me crazy.
More... If possible...

Now and then I take a peek to "the dwell"
and to me, it seems like opening
Pandora's box.
Too many things.

Bottled. For my sake.
And yours too.
I'm always thnking about you.

Whenever you are.
Wherever you are.
Whomever you are.
Or feel like being
at your very least.

That's why we met.
We are the same.
But not like each other.
Our curse. Our nutriment.

Tell me, have you ever
been afraid of me?
Have you ever gone insane,
worried that I would find you?

No my dear. You can be certain.
The more I want you, the more I run away.
For being close to you
makes me stare to the infinity
of your eyes.

And see myself.
Staring back at me.

Drenching in emotions.
Soaking in voices.
Drowning in my dwell.

So beautiful.
He, he, he.

And all is fine again.

Mr.Tooshie


Mr.Tooshie

PostPosted: Wed Nov 23, 2005 6:06 pm


2nd in a row...

I made a mistake by letting you inside myself one more time.
One last time, I said, how much can it hurt?
And yet, it doesn't.

What hurts is letting you out, ripping my skin.
Emptying me. To my last drop.
One more time. One too many times.

But my way of remembering is not through pictures,
words, thoughts. I lick my wounds, I heal my core
and feel my scars. Across my mind.
Through my own. Still breathing of you.

Your smell. My perfume.
Wicked sins of the living.
Those who think they cannot die.
Those who teach others how to live.
Those who know how to bleed.

But you my dear, you are a leech.
My teacher. And I love you for that.
For every essence you purge out of me.
As if I had so many to give.

How? How did I found you?
Or, did you found me?
It seems like we found each other.
Hungry of each other.
Again and again.

My last wish however, is to purge my sins.
To let you loose. And chain myself.
Dream of another place.
Worse. It should be worse tha that.
It has to be worse than that.

But just one more.
There's always time for more.
Before we go home.
Before we ende like lovers
and we cannot stand each other.
Before...

Mais, une autre chose mon cherie.
I was never yours.
So as you were never mine.
And that remains the same.
Forever.

No matter how much you beg.
No matter how full I am.
We'll never belong.
Who whould have thought?
Too much for so little.
A very profitable deal.

That, between me and you.
So you remember.
The pain you caused.
The scars you left.
The wuenching of your thirst.
Its all yours now.
Because of me.
Keep it. Close.
Very close.
It's me.
PostPosted: Wed Nov 23, 2005 6:07 pm


that's it for tonight.... i'll post some more later...

in the meantime... comments? hehe

Mr.Tooshie


Liway
Captain

PostPosted: Sat Nov 26, 2005 6:16 am


wasn't sure if it was ok to publicly flag my opinion.. but, here it goes:

I wondered who they were about but you said they were for no one... and yet, I can't help but think that they have to have been written with someone you felt deeply in mind... there's a lot of feelings in there, specially the second poem...
PostPosted: Sat Nov 26, 2005 10:14 pm


I like your style, they defenitly have emotion, as if your writing from expeirince.
It's very creative, and refreshing. Practice makes perfect, so keep up the writing.

Gwyndara


Mr.Tooshie

PostPosted: Mon Nov 28, 2005 3:23 pm


well.... second one was written to my ex-ex... the french woman... but then you already new that Liway... you just forgot

thanks Gwyn!
PostPosted: Mon Nov 28, 2005 3:34 pm


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Mr.Tooshie


Mr.Tooshie

PostPosted: Mon Nov 28, 2005 3:45 pm


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PostPosted: Mon Nov 28, 2005 3:56 pm


something different...

My mistake, has always been the gift of impertinence, not giving enough time to react neither space to breathe.

My whole nature makes me stand in front of what I want, surrounding it, protecting it from morbid eyes. But encircling it and restraining it to the point of sweet delirium.

Oh yes, sweet as it is, fear it if you want to, but it will come to you if I desire you. For I am the carrier. And you, my darling, the receptacle of my love for myself, of my influence.

But I want you so badly to let you fade away. And I press you against my soul, in a savage way.

No matter what, always looking, peeking, testing. Subjecting yourself into my love, my attraction.

That, if I love you. For I cannot get enough. Worst if I hate you. For I can never forget. Entangling my mind with yours. And the memories.

And just one result can come from that: Me and You.
Lost in each other. Forever. Nice dreams.

Mr.Tooshie


Mr.Tooshie

PostPosted: Mon Nov 28, 2005 4:02 pm


one of my last...

Loneliness creeps in me. It is not a new feeling, but certainly a new way of feeling it. A different cause. Being lonely when you have someone. Feeling lonely for not having her close.

But when it creeps within, I do not despair. Oh, no. I am almost grateful for having her inside me. Almost. For it reminds me of how much I love you.

And in my convalescence I agree in keeping you loose, yet still grasping at my heart. For it is what I want. For it is my price.

But you, my love. What will you do? Will you stare at me like a stray dog? Will you redeem my soul with your warmth? Will you clean my mind of restless thoughts? Or will you purge my being from your scent?

Do not abdicate, for then, I shall despair. And then, my loneliness shall be no more. No more, but a misconception. A void to lose myself into. An empty space, once a memory.
PostPosted: Mon Nov 28, 2005 4:06 pm


well, that's it... short of writing my unfinished novel that pretty much it.

of course I have some more... but when I re-read them I thought: nah... don't even attempt to put them there...

so I won't... believe me... it's for the best...

any way... I shall continue writing... hopefully sometime soon... and hopefully as well I will continue the "novel" (which so far is only a chapter long) and maybe I'll post it here too...

hehehe

how that will be too much...

to big of a thread...

anyway... we'll see...

and don't forget your comments!!!

Mr.Tooshie


Liway
Captain

PostPosted: Thu Dec 01, 2005 5:09 am


You said you hoped I'll know which one was for me when I read it... I know which one it is. heart
PostPosted: Sun Dec 18, 2005 8:37 pm


You write beautifully, der Herr. The style in which you write drawed me in and made me wonder about your past loves. And your present. (Liway wink )
I like how you didn't bother to rhyme everything, but when you did, it was subtle, and was only made apparent after you finished that line. You wrote honest, every-day words. Which I think is what did it. It made everything sound sincere.
I also especially liked the third poem and the fifth one. There was a lot of imagry in those.

And thanks for leaving comments for me too!

Lesperence


Mr.Tooshie

PostPosted: Mon Dec 19, 2005 2:03 am


Well, Thank You too!! (for the comments and everything) biggrin

In a sort of way... yes... it was that 'everydayness' that made me write... specially when I was down with those 'past loves' as you put it... damn dark days... but not without the good shiny ones... so no complains... at least not out loud!! Hehehe

Anyway... for some reason my writing does not come to me when I'm ok, so since I've gone out with Liway heart I haven't written much... (that and Uni...) either way... I rather have a pleasant love life than having a sh*tt* one just so I can write!!

I'm glad you liked the non-rhytmic style... can't do rhymes... I suck at it and makes me sounds silly...

And the imagery... well... sometimes whe I write I feel like I'm staring a a painting by Salvador Dali for some reason... hence the twisted 'shapes' going on... rofl
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