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Fanfic- Half an Agent

The Plays The Thing
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Posted: Mon Aug 10, 2009 8:08 am

Here is my story!

Please read and comment! Be nice though, its my first one.

Posted: Sat Nov 21, 2009 3:23 pm

I didn't like it very much.
I wanna say that I'm not being mean when I say this but;
You rely too much off the show, and you don't take it into your own hands enough.
Like the over use of "gibbslap" and "whattaya got abbs."
it needs more originality.
And, the fact that gibbs is running everywhere twice doesn't seem very likely.
In all,, you need a better plot and orginization.

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The Plays The Thing
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Posted: Sat Nov 21, 2009 6:54 pm

yeah... that one's really bad. im writing a better one called the first gibbsslap. i only have one chapter so far, but its pretty good.

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