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Lexis Mindarti Vice Captain
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 Posted: Sun Aug 09, 2009 2:01 pm
come in and ask questions about how to RP...those of us who have more experience will lend a hand and show you the skills you need to be like us!!! If you know how to rp and just want to perfect it...we will help with that too...all of the mods here are highly skilled in rping... (edited)
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Posted: Sun Aug 09, 2009 3:35 pm
First i don't got questions D: i just wanna know how to make each of my post during RPing. so darn long D: i mean i mean. i feel like i sound dumb or boring whyle typing u.u
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Lexis Mindarti Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Aug 09, 2009 5:39 pm
lets do a mock rp so i can see what advice i can give you...
Morte walks down the street...her hair flowing in the gentle breeze...her clothes tattered and torn from a long night from hunting...her skin had lost some of it's luster and shine...her make-up had faded...she thought about the long few days to come...she was a hunter by night and a business woman by day...she looked at the empty streets and closed shops...wishing she were home in her warm cozy bed, fresh out of a shower....she continued walking down the long lonely street headed home...
jump in so i can see how you rp
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Posted: Sun Aug 09, 2009 5:52 pm
Silently stares the woman from the sealing of one of those closed shops. I try to stay calm for my best, but it's such a cold pretty night and I want her soul now. -jumps from sealing and starts following her - . I notice you have heard me following you so I hide behind a big trash can trying to avoid the crowds and people ruining my plans.
I sneak behind the trash can to see if my hideout had worked. As I thought, the woman kept walking, scared, but kept walking. Slowly I keep following her. Every second I wanted her soul more and more. "What does that woman have that I desire so much?" - I asked myself in my mind. I was just about to kill her when something unexpected suddenly happened.
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Lexis Mindarti Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Aug 09, 2009 6:21 pm
mk well that is good...but when rping you need to keep it in the third person...it confuses people to if you are speaking or doing actions...you need she does this and that not just:
"Silently stares the woman from the sealing of one of those closed shops."
it should be:
"She silently stares at the woman from the ceiling of one of the closed shops on the empty street"
it is a long post, but it need better detail...
you need to start a new paragraph when you talk, think or do an action...
for example...
she walked down the street...she noticed an old friend...she walked up to her and looked at her old friend...
hi Sara how are you...
She waited for sara's reply...
i don't use punctuation, because i use different colors to differentiate actions, speaking and etc...
but since you use punctuation...try to use the correct punctuation.
over all good content...just use better structure, full sentences, a bit more detailed words and structure it nicer...that is about it...
also notice i stated there were no ppl and such...you cannot say i noticed you, unless i did, and if i stated noone was around...their would be no crowds...you cannot state someone's person does something for them unless they gave you permission and you cannot add ppl in that were stated to not be there...you have to let it flow...and you also can't state someone character's emotions w/o them doing so...i did not say she was scared...i said she was tired, thus she is only tired...and ending something in unexpectedly happened is useless, in rps nothing is expected...
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