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 Posted: Sun Aug 09, 2009 10:41 am
*pop*
spatters of soap
hit the porch
of the old country house
down the road
and to the right
where the little boy sits
and wonders why
bubbles *pop*
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Posted: Tue Aug 18, 2009 7:47 am
I haven't seen a poem like this in a long while. I never was a fan of this style, but you really did a great job, in my opinion. I actually like it! ^_^ What you did with the noise aspect was genius. Keep it up!
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Posted: Thu Aug 20, 2009 1:59 pm
redface
OMG thank you so much!
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Posted: Fri Aug 21, 2009 6:35 am
I have to agree with Wolf on this one, it's very simplistic, but in a good way. It's really cute too. Just one suggestion on the formatting, you should put the *pop's* in italic, instead of with these **.
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Posted: Thu Oct 01, 2009 6:44 pm
I second Stelle's opinion that you should use italics instead of asterisks on the pop part. It's very cute though. I like it!
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Posted: Sun Oct 04, 2009 10:11 am
It IS cute~!! :] Keep writing. And I third (does this work? O.o) Stelle's opinion! :3
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Posted: Mon Oct 05, 2009 7:10 pm
I hate to keep a trend going, but I FOURTH Stelles opinion.
I love it anyway though. Keep it up!
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Posted: Wed Oct 07, 2009 12:40 pm
Thank you guys soooo much! Next time I will put the pops in italics. smile
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Posted: Wed Oct 07, 2009 7:05 pm
Omg I have to be different... put it in bold!!! um actually dont... it is supposed to be italiised... if I spelt that right... kathy_chan_waterspirit I hate to keep a trend going, but I FOURTH Stelles opinion.
I love it anyway though. Keep it up!
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