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Posted: Tue Nov 22, 2005 9:20 am
Awright! I'm not even going to bother writing a whole new collection of new poems. So...Feel free to flame my old poems. Yesh, my fellow gaians, I, Rodent trap, though it may not seem so, am a poet. Cool.
No title...Yet Kill the man who defiled you Let him think of what he's done. Let his mind wander, before his blood doth run. Watch the red spill down the blade, add colour to your soul. Free yourself of feelings, and in that jagged hole will forever rest your hatred which made you oh, so cold.
My cat is a psychologist You graced my lips with yours, and I melted in your mouth. Until one day you spat me out like some sick and disgusting trout that made me want to shriek and shout: "Good LORD! I feel like-" "Honey, please let Whiskers out," My mother, understanding, wary, like some sick and twisted fairy. Well Whiskers, it's just you and me. And while I know you need to pee, before I let you out, my pet, I've got emotions and regret that here inside me soul feel too cramped. And my heart is like outside: Damp. "Prown?" you ask me, impatient, Like the cat you are, complacent. Suddenly the room's less dark And at my bedroom window: Hark! Your voice, your lips, your deep, dark eyes, you couldn't stay long in disguise, you love me, yes- And I love you. Mental note as I tie my shoe: Yes, I know I'm not some trout, but: Forgot to let Whiskers out.
Point of view 1 The future is bleak and my wrists are red "Don't talk to strangers," That's what momma said.
I'm tied up tight in a foreign bed, "Don't talk to strangers," echoing in my head.
One pair of eyes filled up with fright. "Don't talk to strangers,'' I scream with all my might.
One pair of eyes counting all the tears shed "Don't talk to strangers," That's what momma said...
Point of view 2 The future is bleak and my wrists are red "Don't talk to strangers," That's what momma said.
I'm tied up tight in a foreign bed, "Don't talk to strangers," echoing in my head.
One pair of eyes filled up with fright. "Don't talk to strangers,'' I scream with all my might.
One pair of eyes counting all the tears shed "Don't talk to strangers," That's what momma said...
Point of view 2She looked so fine with her eyes so wide, her licorice lips pressed against mine
She looked so good with her face so pale Brave as a lion but as feeble as shale
She looked so great with her gaze full of fright kicking and screaming with all her might.
She looked so swell with her head bowed low, cheeks so wet and breaths so slow...
Beneath our mother's glare The glass hits the pavement like our heads against the air.
Whizzing by the fireflies beneath our mother's glare.
You reach out, I take your hand,
wrecking footprints in the sand,
dashing dreams, or so it seems,
a world with you to share...
I close my eyes and count to five, beneath our mother's glare.
Fin.
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Posted: Sat Nov 26, 2005 2:43 pm
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Posted: Mon Nov 28, 2005 10:02 am
Rodent trap My cat is a psychologistYou graced my lips with yours, and I melted in your mouth. <-- It sounds like the narrator made out with the cat. xd Until one day you spat me out like some sick and disgusting trout <-- Eh, I don't like "trout".that made me want to shriek and shout: <-- Don't like "shriek"."Good LORD! I feel like-" "Honey, please let Whiskers out," My mother, understanding, wary, like some sick and twisted fairy. Well Whiskers, it's just you and me. And while I know you need to pee, before I let you out, my pet, I've got emotions and regret that here inside me soul feel too cramped. And my heart is like outside: Damp. <-- Add a syllable to this line."Prown?" you ask me, <-- AW. KITTY! [attacks kitty, and snuggles accordingly]impatient, Like the cat you are, complacent. Suddenly the room's less dark And at my bedroom window: Hark! Your voice, your lips, your deep, dark eyes, you couldn't stay long in disguise, you love me, yes- And I love you. Mental note as I tie my shoe: Yes, I know I'm not some trout, <-- Eh. "Trout" again.but: Forgot to let Whiskers out. xd I liked it. It's cute, and you're doing well with rhyming.
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Posted: Mon Nov 28, 2005 5:17 pm
Yeah, I didn't like trout, either. I was just trying to go the farthest I could with 'out'.
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Posted: Sat Dec 24, 2005 10:46 am
Hers It's not surprising, it's her only fear, for there is no light where her feet doth tread and her life is hanging by a thread which withers and wanes with each passing year.
The embers die softly on the hearth And as her world turns violent red Your eyes and mouth fill up with dread She prepares to leave this very earth.
It's not surprising, it was her only fear, for there's no room for life in the face of death and she whispers upon her very last breath a desperate plea that none will hear.
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Posted: Sun Jan 15, 2006 1:04 pm
Rodent trap No title...YetKill the man who defiled you Let him think of what he's done. Let his mind wander, before his blood doth run. Watch the red spill down the blade, add colour to your soul. Free yourself of feelings, and in that jagged hole will forever rest your hatred which made you oh, so cold. Mmm, overall, this is cliche. If you go check in the OP/L subforum, you'll find at least one poem on the first page that sounds almost exactly like this. As much as I loved the one you wrote called my cat is a psychologist, I disliked this one.
I like the use of "doth", though! surprised No one ever uses that sort of language anymore, and I lurves it. whee
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Posted: Sun Jan 22, 2006 8:43 am
Kjralon Rodent trap No title...YetKill the man who defiled you Let him think of what he's done. Let his mind wander, before his blood doth run. Watch the red spill down the blade, add colour to your soul. Free yourself of feelings, and in that jagged hole will forever rest your hatred which made you oh, so cold. Mmm, overall, this is cliche. If you go check in the OP/L subforum, you'll find at least one poem on the first page that sounds almost exactly like this. As much as I loved the one you wrote called my cat is a psychologist, I disliked this one.
I like the use of "doth", though! surprised No one ever uses that sort of language anymore, and I lurves it. whee Oog. I know. I didn't even mean to put that up on the internetz. I must have been smoking something. Or maybe, when I was walking the dog, I walked past some marijuana smokers and had a good whiff of second-hand pot. X3
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Posted: Sun Jan 22, 2006 8:53 am
And yet... 24 hours: Dawn: Quickly, Quickly! Stifle that yawn! The stage is not availiable yet, And yes, we're still readying the set, But we're fast approaching dawn!
Ready everyone, and one-two-three: Please count right in every measure, this is pink and violet treasure, for our early-birds' viewing pleasure! *EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEP*-
Late morning: The time is difficult to tell As the hours dawdle t'ward lunch, And my insides are in a bunch, Awaiting the merciful bell. Something tells me that my tummy is the Harbinger of doom. What's worse than being rumbly in a quiet classroom?
Afternoon: The shadows are causing such a commotion! With every hour, they grow long. It's as annoying as can be! *.s.i.g.h.* Ignore them. They're not worth your devotion. And while the sun may not be strong, Ignore them. They're just being contrary.
Sunset: The curtains rise before our eyes. She streaks the set with vibrant red, All the famed critics agree: It's too bad tonight's performance is free.
Evening: Are you as ready as you feel? For this evening will reveal sharpened claws and glistening maws Eyes tinged with a crimson hue, waiting to DEVOUR YOU...
Night: The lovely twilight fading away Marks the ending of the day, And if the stars twinkle like fairy lights Like they have all previous nights, And if we keep nightmares at bay, The world will live another day.
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