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Samurai Rhythm

PostPosted: Sun Aug 02, 2009 9:48 am


Lucky
Lucky Lucifer
6 bars.

Every verse you drop is spam. Luckys providing flow for thought.
You'll always be under Lucifer, even if you call yourself Overlord.
Tryna be an Afro Samurai, ending up like Ninja Ninja
And practising with his masters "Kendo" gave him awful finger splinters
Inteligence ain't a handicap but your overly formal
I think he's pretending, and this is his last hope to be normal
Must of bought a big dictionary to over compensate
when the ExtenZe pills are delivered, he'll go back to "lol's and m8"...
No more dickriders now he's looking for a c**k to impail
his next alias will be 'Postman Mak'. Begging to get lost in the mail/male
Called himself Samurai I'm slayin him when he see's these bars
Beats bang and lucky stomps on rhythm like asains kids on DDR...


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Mak

I am the hov to your demons, force child to blame Hades' wrongs
After basing his name off of lame Jay-Z songs

He identifies hell as a home, like Dante I never say die,
but in fetal position his thoughts of suicide prove that a Devil May Cry

I see no improvement, you're just empty - tryin to reload, but
You've got a battle record with more scratches in it than a Preemo cut.

You're my seed, leaked beyond rubber - but, hey, I cut the cable
'cuz like LG you made a home of my nuts like my sack was your cradle

I'll penetrate your devil worship, thrust inside with a hard drive,
have your beliefs do a 360 after you scream out with a Far Cry

It's even more pathetic when you consider English is your native speak,
So I used your own tongue to lick you, old news 'cuz victory is native to me.*

*Uh..you're from London, right? lol. Just making sure.
There's some extra word play and s**t in there but I'm not feeling like ******** italicizing and all that bullshit.
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6 bars.
Standard rules applied.
VOTE!!
PostPosted: Sun Aug 02, 2009 5:01 pm


Lucky Lucifer
Every verse you drop is spam. Luckys providing flow for thought.
You'll always be under Lucifer, even if you call yourself Overlord.
(You could have made a more exciting opener than that, my dude. Your second line was nice, but could have been way better if the first line helped it out more, you know?)
Tryna be an Afro Samurai, ending up like Ninja Ninja
And practising with his masters "Kendo" gave him awful finger splinters
(Decent)
Inteligence ain't a handicap but your overly formal
I think he's pretending, and this is his last hope to be normal
(Meh)
Must of bought a big dictionary to over compensate
when the ExtenZe pills are delivered, he'll go back to "lol's and m8"...
(You started off in a way that looked like you were about to slap the s**t out of him, but seems you fell over something before you could strike.)
No more dickriders now he's looking for a c**k to impail
his next alias will be 'Postman Mak'. Begging to get lost in the mail/male
(You started off on a good concept, but couldn't keep it up. But it was ok.)
Called himself Samurai I'm slayin him when he see's these bars
Beats bang and lucky stomps on rhythm like asains kids on DDR...
(Best line in this whole verse. Strong finish, but it may be a bit too late though.)


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Makairo


I am the hov to your demons, force child to blame Hades' wrongs
After basing his name off of lame Jay-Z songs
(Meh...)
He identifies hell as a home, like Dante I never say die,
but in fetal position his thoughts of suicide prove that a Devil May Cry
(Bittersweet. Sweet because this was dope. But bitter because this sounds like something I'd come up with, yet haven't yet. stare You b*****d. Lol.)
I see no improvement, you're just empty - tryin to reload, but
You've got a battle record with more scratches in it than a Preemo cut.
(Nice)
You're my seed, leaked beyond rubber - but, hey, I cut the cable
'cuz like LG you made a home of my nuts like my sack was your cradle
(Losing momentum here, but this is ok.)
I'll penetrate your devil worship, thrust inside with a hard drive,
have your beliefs do a 360 after you scream out with a Far Cry
(Decent concept to play on. Executed decently.)
It's even more pathetic when you consider English is your native speak,
So I used your own tongue to lick you, old news 'cuz victory is native to me
(Meh. You could have finished better...)


Over all, I'm going to have to give this to Mak. I must say, I'm disappointed by Lucky's performance. You did better when matched against Ceaz, you did better when matched against Phoenix(and that team battle against Phoenix and Ace), and other battles. But you didn't seem to care too much here.

Mak's verse wasn't phenominal, but it was nice. It would be shameful as ******** if it weren't at LEAST decent considering all of the time you had to work on it. neutral Maybe it was an unfair advantage. Either way, Lucky's no newcomer to this s**t, so he should have known to come stronger anyway.

I'm going to have to give this battle to Mak. With that said, I'm going to Chris Brown you whenever I start caring about text battles again. You're getting too many easy wins here, *****. evil

Jaiden Stryker
Vice Captain


Ariana baa chan
Crew

PostPosted: Sun Aug 02, 2009 6:08 pm


hahaha i suck (i didnt finish my sentence and i can tell this is gonna be used against me xd ) anyway i suck too much to see anything wrong. I like both of your raps a lot and wish i had that kinda of lyrical talent.

for lucky i liked
~ the postman mak part
~ asians on ddr (ive yet to play it so i wont say anything)


for mak he seemed to have all his stuff directed towards you a bit more than you did to him.
i liked:
~ preEMO cut
~the jay z part
~ and the nut sac and cradle testicle bit xd

in all id have to say afro samurai won
PostPosted: Sun Aug 02, 2009 6:25 pm


2-0, me.

Jaiden, not that I object to any of your statements..but in all honesty, I didn't spend all that time writing the verse. xD In fact, I sent it to Lucky today when I wrote it. So I don't want you thinking that I took 3456 days to write a 6 bar verse for a text battle.

I responded faster to our battle and came twice as hard.
Oh yes, my wordplay is sexual. lol

Samurai Rhythm


Lucky Lucifer
Vice Captain

PostPosted: Thu Aug 06, 2009 4:40 am


Hmmm vote peoples.
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