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Posted: Sat Aug 01, 2009 1:09 pm
Um.....Hi everyone ^^; Juee here. I really love writing poetry and i think im kinda good but see. I never get feedback when i post it and if i post in one of the shared ones im kinda afraid that'll keep happening. So forgive me if im being selfish and taking a whole subforum for my works and feedback. >< Hope you enjoy what i share.
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Posted: Sat Aug 01, 2009 1:14 pm
Old Man Winter
Why do you howl old man winter? Why do your winds blow so hard? What has angered you old man winter? And disturbed you in your wintery yard? Is it because the child of spring is coming? Is it because your reign is almost done? Is it because oh mighty lord winter. In your frozen heart you know she brings with her the sun? You blow against the house and shake the trees. The the windows shake, the house moans. White and silver all the eye sees. Yet you grow quiet old man winter As the clock ticks on Are you giving up old man winter? Have you finally finished your wintery song? Are you retiring old man winter? Will you disappear with the morn? Shall the skies weep for you old man winter? As you leave so forlorn? Or is it old man winter... You simply wished to show your power in One. Last. Winter. Storm.
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Posted: Sat Aug 01, 2009 2:04 pm
Your love...
Being in love with you is like a rose Theres two parts to it as everyone knows And as i stand here my heart tattered and torn They see that she got the flower and I got the thorn
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Posted: Sat Aug 01, 2009 2:05 pm
Rain Dancer
The rain pours down on the street It comes down making a unique beat It pounds relentlessly on the ground An unseen drum beating out its sound Bare feet slap at the wet ground Spraying water all around Thunder and lightning over her head Dancing ever so lightly even with the wet weighing like lead Her skirt flowing like the rain around her Droplets flying from her long hair as it whips around her Little rivers running down her skin and face A content expression on her face as she dances all over the place A wind ripples through the air As she dances without a care And in the garden where she danced Moving fluidly almost like in a trance The raindrops glistening on the flowers Shining with the sunlight that peaks through making the thunder cower And as the storm finally ends and the clouds clear away The rain dancer does not stay And if your quick you'll catch a glimpse of her retreating form But don't worry...she'll be back for the next storm
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Posted: Sat Aug 01, 2009 9:50 pm
idk what feedback is but damn your great! i love "your love" please read my stories?
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Posted: Sun Aug 02, 2009 6:10 am
Lol Feedback is what you just gave me!! Thank you! (huggles) I shall read them immediately!!!
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Posted: Sun Aug 02, 2009 10:08 am
Mountain
Standing strong through the wind and cold Tall and silent yet so many stories unfold Beautiful to look at but dangerous to climb But the right to say i have is mine Rocks, loose soil, and roots everywhere you step No human could climb that mountain without breaking a sweat Many times i wanted to quit And just say "This is it" To say "Enough! I want to stop" But deep down i know i want to reach the top So i climb and climb till my legs are sore But everyone tells me "Just a little bit more" I slip and fall again and again Who on earth said nature was your friend Heart racing, legs shaking, my heart felt like it stopped When someone said to me "You've reached the top" The view was beautiful, so worth the climb and the right to say i did it is mine But now as i sit here and think with a frown it hits me... I still have to climb all the way back down
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Posted: Sun Aug 02, 2009 10:09 am
Goodbye
A friend will help you through any pain, With a true friend you can always gain.
A friend has always got your back, Caring for you is something they don't lack.
I had a friend like that, She always had my back.
My friends name was Kate, She was my best mate.
She had her doors open wide, I was always welcome inside.
We'd play games do sleepovers for years this went on, I had thought we'd always be together......i was wrong.
I had been playing at katie's and was called over and i went like that, I looked up at my parents and found out i'd never be going back.
My parents said "Julia a truck will be coming to take all our stuff, were moving to Massachusetts, this must be very tough"
I told Katie that day, I was moving away
We cried, we screamed, We kept saying it was only a bad dream
But it was real and i really had to go, Even though we'd been through rain, sleet and snow
And so now I'm here and that's that, And i know now, I'm never going back
She's changed......So have i I just never thought we'd ever have to say "goodbye"
And so that's how i lost Katie D., The friend i thought would always be with me
......Thank you......
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Posted: Sun Aug 02, 2009 10:10 am
Summer Memories
Flowers falling on my face As i stare into space Laughing falling having fun As i dance in the sun The sun that felt so warm on me That felt so good sleeping under a tree But now fall has come with the cold Along with school and books to hold The days are short but feel so long Just waiting for the bell to dong And the books so heavy my arms so sore I feel as if i can't take much more Only one thing keeps me going thats a fact That keeps me with this education pact
You see the thing is while this books weight a ton i remember...the sun
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Posted: Sun Aug 02, 2009 8:46 pm
What do you do...
What do you do What do you do when you feel like an empty shell What do you do when you can't figure out why you get up every morning What do you do when you know you need something but you don't know why What do you do when your completely numb to everything around you What do you do when your world crumbles down around you What do you do when your tired of the fighting and the yelling What do you do when you've sealed yourself up and you can't trust people and let them in What do you do when no matter how hard you try the tears won't come What do you do when you don't know who you are anymore What do you do when you feel like your falling and no one can catch you
What do you do when you just want to end it all
What do you do...What can you do
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Posted: Tue Aug 04, 2009 7:05 am
I LOVE the ending to "Old Man Winter" with all the periods. You are a BRILLIANT poet~!!! biggrin
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Posted: Thu Aug 06, 2009 1:04 pm
^/////^;;;
Thank you, very kind of you to say.
I just like showing what i see in my mind with the rest of the world.
I'll probably post more soon.
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Posted: Fri Aug 07, 2009 4:33 pm
Ok peoples~
These next two I came up with today after hearing stuff on Brain damage and drinking and driving.
Kinda hits home for me personally as I know what the families are going through but i'll stop chatting and just give them too you
Oh and I dont know if their more rants than poems.
No rhyme scheme what.so.ever.
enjoy.
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