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 Posted: Sun Nov 20, 2005 2:00 pm
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Posted: Sun Nov 20, 2005 2:40 pm
Oh God, horrible. Disgusting. <******** brilliant, but just ugly.
I don't really get the end, though:
He straightened his back and felt a snap; the weak threads finally succ**bed to their illness. All went black.
It was kind of abrupt and without reason.
But you call this just 'okay?' You're nuts, you are!
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Posted: Sun Nov 20, 2005 3:40 pm
His underwear was a metaphor for his health. When the threads snapped, it basically meant that he died. 3nodding
The piece is hardly brilliant though. xp
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Posted: Mon Nov 21, 2005 2:49 pm
I think it is, but then I don't have all that much exposure to prose.
But I like it.
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Posted: Tue Nov 22, 2005 5:48 pm
Very much a badass story.
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