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Rules:
~ No posting in a test thread unless it's your test.
~ Limited to 4 posts. You can use less.
~ You have 2 weeks to finish your rp.
~ Must use the battle field type assigned to you.
~ You create a monster of your choice, unless a different rule is specified for that test.
~ Have fun!

1~Ice- Pretty simple with this one. The floor becomes solid ice. There are random chunks of ice protruding from the floor. And of course, you have little to no traction.

2~Desert- Pretty much nothing but massive sand dunes. You sink down into the sand, which slows you down a LOT. If the wind blows, the sand gets kicked up, which obscures vision.

3~Open Field- A plain grassy field with nothing on it.

4~Ocean- A mini ocean about 40 feet deep. There are five floating platforms for battlers to stand on. The plat forms bob around and it's really hard to keep your balance on them.

5~Dense Forest- The arena is packed from wall to wall with dense, tropical trees. As in any tropical jungle, there are lots of vines and other such things to get tangled up in.

6~Land of Fire- Parts of the arena floor sink away, leaving behind pits of lava. Also, pillars of fire erupt from the floor periodically.

7~Concrete- A plain concrete floor.

8~The Abyss- Near complete darkness engulfs the arena. Dark energy is abundant in this field.

9~The Sanctuary- Opposite of the Abyss. Light energy fills the arena. Its very bright!

10~No floor- The floor drops away leaving a pit filled with spikes. There are levitating platforms at varying heights, going all the way to the top of the arena. It's hard to jump from platform to platform, and trust me, you don't want to fall.

"Familiar!" Togiretogire walked into the room and saw fire. His room was filled with fire and his eyes lit up a bit. He had to release some of his dragon abilities. As a dragon he had little fear of fire. Magma would be unpleasant but nothing to dangerous for him. Yet the effect on this body that he had now he didn't know. Well his aura accustomed pretty quickly to the scenery. He saw a group of knights ahead of him. At a distance they looked like ordinary eyes for the eye that didn't know to see the details. Togiretogire knew what their armor was partly of. The extra detail of dragon teeth, claws and scales. This was odd. How had they found him? Did they know who he was, did the school now know? Did he have to escape?

The leader of the five walked as Togiretogire just stood there. "I'm Dokuro Clive, your cousin. I and the other four volunteered to be your test. We had to play a bit with the master though. I felt you in the forest and knew where you was hiding." Togiretogire just shook his head slowly. That was a lie, about his name. The man knew it but it most likely meant that the school didn't know of his identity. "There is no other Dokuro, but me. Yet, you all know who I am and I can't allow any of you to escape this place alive." There was a silence for a moment. The scenery would prove far more use full for Togiretogire then the knights. Yet he couldn't reveal himself so it would still be dangers around here. A pillar of fire erupted from a hole. The seconds later steel against steel could be heard as all six men drew their weapons. The knights stood there waiting, they seemed to wait for Togiretogire to show himself, but that would not happen.

"Fools are you all to come to me and expect to take me down. Dragon knights hunting a human like me. What a shame. I was born a bit different and then you must hunt me. For dragons you can't take!" Togiretogire jumped over a deep hole with great control and landed in front of a knight that begun to speak. "You are a..." That was all that the man could say. Togiretogire had thrust the blade through the mans armored throat and blood ran down the steel. "I'm nothing to you!" Togiretogire's eyes turned darker into a crimson red. The knights head flew of as Togiretogire pulled out the sword and then cut the head of with a single swing. Steel was no guard against a man like Togiretogire. He wielded his sword for a reason.

This place was hell and Togireotigre was no prey among fire or knights, they where to few for him. He was just to much, yet he desperation attempt to shutr the knight had been bad for his boasting and attempt to scare the other four had failed. Togiretogire dodged three blades by jumping backwards and landed dangerously close to a pit. Blood ran down his left shoulder. It was a very black blood. "See, he can bleed like that!" Togiretogire knew that if it turned bad, then he always had his ace card.

The pain came directly, even having his scales out didn't help much. Well those teeth on the halberd went through his scales like it was nothing. Togiretogire rolled forward. Now bleeding from his back as well. He had waited for long and he would be in constant danger. The knights had moved into a triangle formation and Togiretogire knew that he had get rid of one of the supporter knights first or he would die here. That was the dark and ugly truth. He felt the blood coloring his shirt black. He felt a bit weak and that only made sense for in this form, the blood he spilled was meant for this body and not his dragon form. If he transformed now he would be as weak in his dragon form, as he is in the human form. Well he still had strength to go on and waited for the knights this time. He had gotten rid of the mosquitoes, now it was time for the bees. He knew how these techniques worked. They wouldn't attack at the same time. First one supporter, the other supporter would cut of Togiretogire's escape routes but one and there would the leader stand to try and kill him. Yet that worked best on normal dragons or humans that had sided with dragons. Togiretogire was so much more then that.

Well the attack came from the supporter at the top left. Togiretogire dodged the horizontal swing. It would have been lethal to be hit by such force. Yet to wear so thick armor a knight had to be strong. All four men here had once killed a dragon and Togiretogire wondered who was the dangerous one here. Well the second attack came not by the book. He had missed it by a second and he felt the panic upon him. The halberd came for his neck and now Togiretogire's scales wouldn't help him. This was seniors indeed. A rookie would have followed the book. Togiretogire seemed to be the rookie here. He seemed to be the weakest of them all. HOw could that be? These where mere humans, he was a glorious dragon. He was so much more then this filth. Well Togiretogire jumped straight at the top right knight. The man who's helmet seemed to be based of a dragons upper jaw. The entire helmet had dragon teeth around it. With some imagination it could look like a dragon was just to bite the head of. Well TOgiretogire had jumped into the air and bent his knees. A dropkick with full force. Leaving TOgiretogire a bit open but the knights tumbled back and rolled backwards before he stopped. The knight fell into the pits of hell, a hole in the floor. For but a second his screams could be heard before the magma got to his belly and the third knight died. This boosted Togiretogire and he got a bit more calm. His own sword had just stopped a swing form the leader knight and the knights sword.

There Togiretogire was, on his back and stopped a difficult attack with one hand and his sword. Yet then in the corner of his eye he saw a movement. He had forgotten the other knight. The he where to move, but could not. The knights sword technique was not of strength. Togiretogire could move his sword and inch, he begun to sweat for now he begun to see fear and why dragons knight where to be feared. These humans where almost inhuman. He knew that they died but it came to his mind that this may be the first time he ever met knights of this rank. Well by moving his entire body sideways he evaded the halberd and he placed his hand upon it. Now everything stood still, silence arose. The roars from rising fire pillars and the heavy breathing of all three could be heard. Togiretogire felt a kick onto the side and upon his weak body. The pain was extreme, he cursed his weak body but felt how the hold of his sword got weaker. The fools had taken a chance. Togiretogire got his sword loose and found an opening. He used his hand on the halberd to get behind the second supporter. By turning 180 in the air he could place the blade into the neck of the knight. Yet as the knight fell forward Togiretogire dropped his sword. The leader reacted quickly. He cornered Togiretogire, who now had a pit of lava behind him and a knight ahead of him. "You leave me no choice!" Togiretogire told the knight. THe knight stood still and spoke back. "You killed my mother and father in a raid. I swore to become the best knight to kill you." Togiretogire thought for a second before he spoke once more. "Are you the best?" A laugh came from the helmet and the knight spoke once again. "I'm not even top fifty and if more comes then I can gladly die knowing they will one day get to you. Black Bloody Night!" Togiretogire hadn't heard that nickname for a long time but a smile came upon his lips. His eyes turned pitch black, his dragon eyes had never been turned and Togiretogire had gotten pissed. This man could have ruined his hole stay at this place. The right hand turned to bone and then it reformed into a human dragon hybrid from of a front leg. Togiretgoire launched forward.

Togiretogire had felt his hatred and blood lust over him, he wanted to feed upon this knight, he wanted the gore. The knight had no chance now. The man stabbed Togiretogire into the shoulder but that did not stop Togiretogire the tore up the back of the armor and into the skin. It wasn't lethal but the knight spun around and took a few steps back. The man dropped to his knees and the helmet came of. A white pale man could be seen, his eyes trembled with fear, Togiretogire had released his aura. The room filled with hate, disgust, blood lust and if one would look close Togiretogire he was no human no more. His form may be but there stood a dragon now. The man tried to turn tail and escape but Togiretogire was upon him and jumped at his back and pinned him. He bent down to whisper in his ear. "When the others come I will be so much stronger then this. I'll find your entire family and I'll toy with them, you have woken me and you will know fear. In your next life, for this will end." With that Togiretogire sank his teeth into the exposed neck of the man and took a bite, which he swallowed. He stood up and looked around, it was done. His test seemed to be over. As he begun to walk away he stopped and took hold of al the knights, then he dropped them into a pit of lava and watched them until they sank into oblivion.

Togiretogire was now yet again the boy with strange eyes just. He raised his voice and shouted out. "Was this the test? I'm done! I'm leaving!" With that Togiretogire went for the very door that he had entered from.

Scoring:
A- 85 credits
B- 75 credits
C- 65 credits
D- 45 credits
F- 20 credits

Length and Pacing: Your last post was so much longer than the first and there was really no pacing to it. You just dove right in and it was over in a snap.

General grammar rules: I'm gonna grade you as if you're a native english speaker since you want no special treatment. While you had a very few snappy phrases and decent sentences, the majority was a complete mess. I had a really hard time staying focused on what your character was actually doing. Some of the mistakes, like switching letters I understand because I do that, but you had far TOO many spelling mistakes. Of and Off are completely different words. OFF is what you meant most of the time. Same thing with to and too. Too is when you are playing up a word, like WHERE I capitalized it in this grading. You confused were with where as well. Also, you need to pick whether or not you're going to roleplay in the third person or first person because you switched back and forth constantly. Well was used way too much and your sentences needed to be complete and not so choppy.

Personality: I can see you tried to throw in personality so I give you credit there. I would have liked to see more.

Use of Environment: This was somewhat minimal. I agree with Ginseku when it comes to the beginning of your test. I liked the whole loving the fire and magma thing, but it got lost along the way.

Details: You had tons of detail on the fighting part so good job there.

Unfortunately, I must give you 30. Better luck next time.