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 Posted: Thu Jul 09, 2009 1:23 pm
Such pain inside...
I feel so confused
Fire and ice seem to explode within me
My heart feels heavy
And my mind is distraught
Such emptiness surrounds me
A tiredness full of bitter resentment conquers my soul
Agony seeps from my bosom
And spite leaps from bloodied lips
Uncertainty racks my emotions
As I try to pull out the words from the depths inside me.
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Posted: Sat Aug 08, 2009 9:25 am
hm....... I don't really get what this is about, but it was still good
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Posted: Mon Aug 10, 2009 10:11 pm
This poem is basically about swallowing your pride... and the pain involved in doing so.... in order to admit that you were wrong and apologize.
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Posted: Wed Aug 12, 2009 6:06 pm
Despite some cliche (not bothering to accent that) phrases, it is refreshing in its absence of that dreadful songlike-quality much modern poets seem to have. By songlike, I feel the need to explain, I mean the directness. The fault of many modern poets is their directness. If a writer wanted to say something plainly, I feel, they would do it by some other means than poetry. Modern poets lose entirely that artful metaphor, by which one really needs to think of what each mentioned object or action is associated with to gather the meaning.
Essentially, kudos.
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Posted: Tue Aug 18, 2009 7:33 am
Thank you for saying that! I don't really care for a lot of "modern" poetry either. For me, I've always written my poems the way I'd speak them... I believe poetry isn't meant to be read, but to be listened to. A lot of the times my poems may be slightly confusing, but, in all honesty, my poetry tends to be like a journal entry. ^_^
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Posted: Sat Feb 27, 2010 6:28 pm
Ahhh, swallowing pride. What a challenging thing. I think your poem truly expresses the inner challenge one faces when trying to overcome one's pride. As I have said in previous poems of yours which I have commented on, your descriptive language is beautiful on all counts, and is something I could only dream of achieving.
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Posted: Sat Feb 27, 2010 6:48 pm
Thank you for your feedback once again!
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