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 Posted: Tue Jun 30, 2009 10:22 pm
Please PLEASE PLEASE critique me to your best.
♥
(Read both. In whatever order you choose. It doesn't matter)
There's Always Two Sides to One Story.
MARCUSMARY(For this guild going to the beginning will not bring you back to the guild.)
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Posted: Wed Jul 01, 2009 9:45 am
Oh... that's kinda creepy.
Well written, but still, morbid.
In the beginning of Marcus's story, the POV confused me, you should start with I, then move to she, and then back to I again, if that makes sense.
I think it could be longer for Mary's part, but it was still well written.
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Posted: Thu Jul 02, 2009 12:39 pm
Yeah... I started with Mary and wasn't quite sure how to do Marcus...
But thank you so much =]
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Posted: Sat Jul 04, 2009 1:06 am
Really good and yes very well writen. do you mine if i spread the word or reposted it useing your name of coures??
<3 Ava
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Posted: Sat Jul 04, 2009 1:03 pm
Ava850 Really good and yes very well writen. do you mine if i spread the word or reposted it useing your name of coures?? <3 Ava I wouldn't mind if you linked people to it, as long as you do give me credit. But please don't repost it anywhere, because we don't wanna clog up the gaia threads with multiples of the same story. =] Glad you liked it though. ♥
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Posted: Sat Jul 04, 2009 9:53 pm
Birth Of Originality Ava850 Really good and yes very well writen. do you mine if i spread the word or reposted it useing your name of coures?? <3 Ava I wouldn't mind if you linked people to it, as long as you do give me credit. But please don't repost it anywhere, because we don't wanna clog up the gaia threads with multiples of the same story. =] Glad you liked it though. ♥ Will do and of course I will give you all the credit.
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Posted: Sat Jul 04, 2009 9:58 pm
Ava850 Birth Of Originality Ava850 Really good and yes very well writen. do you mine if i spread the word or reposted it useing your name of coures?? <3 Ava I wouldn't mind if you linked people to it, as long as you do give me credit. But please don't repost it anywhere, because we don't wanna clog up the gaia threads with multiples of the same story. =] Glad you liked it though. ♥ Will do and of course I will give you all the credit. Awesomeness =] Thanks
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Posted: Sat Jul 04, 2009 10:19 pm
what do you think......  I no the refection didnt work out that well lol i can make another one if you want <3 Ava
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Posted: Sun Jul 05, 2009 12:56 am
Or I can use this one....  It's up to you <3 Ava
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Posted: Sun Jul 05, 2009 7:26 pm
I really rather like the first one. If you want, I can make an actual text reflection on that if you have the original image....
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Posted: Sun Jul 05, 2009 7:50 pm
 Or you can go with yours. Whatever you want =] ♥
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Posted: Sun Jul 05, 2009 11:30 pm
Birth Of Originality Or you can go with yours. Whatever you want =] ♥ I like this one i think what you should do is change the colors... black to white and white to black..... that way you can see it better....And how did you get the writing like that??
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Posted: Mon Jul 06, 2009 2:50 pm
Wow, you guys are having fun with banners! ^_^
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Posted: Mon Jul 06, 2009 2:56 pm
And about the story -- I love it! biggrin I love how it's the same story, but in two points of views. I like the dark themes, and the way you told the story.
*applauds*
You are a really talented author~!
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Posted: Mon Jul 06, 2009 6:16 pm
Otulissa And about the story -- I love it! biggrin I love how it's the same story, but in two points of views. I like the dark themes, and the way you told the story. *applauds* You are a really talented author~! Thank you very much =]
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