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Hibou et loup

PostPosted: Sun Jun 28, 2009 1:33 pm


Alrighty, so, I've had this idea in my head for what has been months now. It started off as an apocalyptic tale based off of the Book of Revelation in the bible. I had a basic Idea in my mind about that, but then I got another Idea Involving controversy and the Church and Subatomic, elementary particles. And I think I've found a way to incorporate that into the story. It takes place in modern Times and The characters Start off as Teenagers in Highschool, but They Grow up into their Late Forties in age. This is a simple background, the formulated and more detailed outline is below.


John
All good things must come to an end, the perfect day, an amazing party, and even the current time of man. The Christian faith States That the end will be marked by Four Horsemen, Then Seven Seals, Then Seven Trumpets, each sending wave upon wave of turmoil to the land of man. The pure shall be Raptured away, taken to heaven. What better way than Death. Thousands shall be massacred and taken to Heaven to make way for the evils of the earth to walk free and punish the unclean. For a period of Time, there shall be a political power that shall use the First and Second Horsemen of Conquest and War to seize control of the World. Leading to the Third Horseman of Economic Failure, and Ending with the Fourth Pale Horse of Death. When the Wicked have suffered, The Messiah shall return and with words from his mouth subdue the evil and send it away. There shall be a golden Time where heaven and earth shall merge and man will be pure and pain shall not exist.
What a Load of Bologna.
Scripture is almost entirely metaphorical, And None of this shall actually happen in the way it is told. We must look between the lines and uncover what is truly going to happen. But in such a time of Scientific discovery who has the time for that?
Man is obsessed with where things come from, what they're made of. That's how our brains are wired and what gives us the evolutionary edge. We dig and dig until we find a way to get ahead. And this habit burned into our skulls coupled with a surge in technological development has given us something wonderful, The Soul Particle, the God Spark, The Supernotron (temporary name). When two atoms are smashed together, we find elementary particles called Quarks, When they are broken down, we get Neutrinos, and smaller and smaller until we find these infinitesimal orbs. Scientists were at a loss as to what these were or what they did. They could hardly tell they existed, they needed special microscopic cameras to even "see" them. But what was strange had nothing to do with the Supernotrons themselves, but rather what they affected. The Metal lining of the Particle Accelerator, which as we all know is a mineral and not living in any way, shape, or form, Changed. On a Routine maintenance run of the outer shell, the worker noticed something, odd near the impact area, where the Supernotrons were created. The metal had changed texture, it was rough, almost like scales. And when the lights were focused on it, it would move, ever so slightly, as if filled with energy. Others came to look and eventually it spread to the higher-up scientists. But they were completely confounded. They put a sample under the lens and nearly fell back out of their chairs. The Metal's molecular structure had changed. It formed long chains of Proteins and Lipids, they were forming Cells.
Other Areas of the Collider were checked for this, but they were all normal. It seemed that only sections exposed to Supernotrons had been altered. Something about the way they reacted individually with Larger Matter gave it life.
The scientists decided to look at bacteria under the special camera that was used to photograph the God Spark (as it was nicknamed), The bacteria were surrounded and penetrated and completely engulfed in the particles. So they moved higher up in the evolutionary scale, fungi, plants animals, All showed increasingly more and more concentrations of these Soul Particles. And when they photographed a scientist, he was almost entirely blocked out as compared to a mouse. It seemed the more complex something was, the more Supernotrons it had, or needed. These would explain that Missing Spark that separated life from death. It answered why corpses didn't look alive. When something's cells stop working, they stop attracting the spark that gave them life.
Now, if these Things clustered around life, then anything attracting them could be considered alive. But also, these things make up the parts that make up Atoms which make up nearly everything in the universe. So, everything in the universe, big and small, has the potential for life. Everything Has a Soul. You, you're pet cat, your lawn, even tiny pebbles have their own personal set of Supernotrons, they're own soul.
But no, that's not the end of the Mystery of God Spark.
These particles seemed to cluster around more and more complex organisms. It seemed that the more intelligent something was, the more clustering there was. It was slight inside a species, a four year old child would attract less than Steven Hawking. So another p reposed theory, what if these things could follow lines of thought? So one scientist focused every ounce of his brainpower onto a mechanical pencil that was photographed with the special camera, and sure enough a small amount, enough to count on your fingers, started popping up around it.
The test was done with several different scientists, and even some of the staff. But in one of the lowest area of work, one man was told to focus all of his attention on the non organic pencil. He was not aware of what he was doing, he was a paid job. But when it was photographed, thousands, if not millions of the particles were being drawn to the pencil, and were working on it's molecular structure. The man was entirely unaware of what he had just done. He was brought back for another test, but the same results popped up. The only thing to find out why this was happening was to go to DNA. In this man's genome, there is a gene that changes, very slightly, the way a person's brain is wired. It closes the gap between a few pairs of synapses. What this must do is give the individual an increased ability to control Supernotrons. That man didn't know of this ability, and was never told. The scientists guessed that this was extremely rare gene, they guessed that one in every couple billion people could have it, and the chances of them knowing that they had it had even steeper odds. but what they didn't know, was that this man married a woman with that gene, and that they had a son.
This family wasn't rich, but it wasn't dirt poor. They were more or less average. But due to their strange genome, weird things tend to happen. The son can see spirits, which are the left over Supernotrons of a deceased person. They sometimes coagulate after the cells stop functioning and result in what we so commonly call a haunting. He's always been able to see these specters, but recently in his seventeen year old life, even weirder things have occurred. Sometimes in class he'll look at a pencil and it might squirm. Or He'll kick a ball and it will go farther than expected. He chalks this down to hallucination, but because of his special gene, he can focus the God Spark with enough force so that he can make things come briefly to life.
But as these things start happening more and more out of his control, Others start noticing. One group in particular, not really the best crowd. They each had troubled pasts. Four of them would be the lower "lackeys" the muscle. Another two are higher up, but still serve the leader or the group who has a rich family and many connections. These represent the Four horsemen, the Dragon, the False Prophet and the Best or Antichrist. They befriend the Main character for his abilities to manipulate the world. He quickly becomes popular and misuses his abilities. The group leads him further into a Sinful life until they graduate from Highschool. The Main character continues to misuse his power until he was arrested and spent time in prison. There he repents and get paroled after 20 years. By then, his old friend had become a Senator, and was on his way to becoming president of the United States.



Sorry to leave such a cliffhanger, there is more to the story, But I don't want to give too much away, I need a few secrets to myself. Feel free to critique on what is here, and please help me think of a name for the particle, Supernotron for those who don't know is something along the lines of God Particle in Latin, but I kind of don't like it. Help with a name would be amazing.

Thankies!
PostPosted: Sun Jul 05, 2009 4:54 pm


Hey buddy!! I like it! One technical thing that I want to point out; there are random capitals where their shouldn't be. Well maybe you put it that way on purpose but I see some that are not needed.

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Hibou et loup

PostPosted: Wed Jul 08, 2009 10:26 pm


Oh thankies for the feedback, the first one I've gotten . . . ever! -claps for Frankie- If You don't mind me asking a favor, is there anything in the plot that you would change?

And abotu the whole capitals thing. I have a tendancy to type the way I talk, but because I talk with my hands a lot, I think I capitalize words that I would have done some sort of motion for, it's weird I know, but that's the only reason I can come up with, other than I'm shift happy heheh.
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