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Posted: Thu May 21, 2009 1:50 pm
This is my first serious book which I have started to write recently. I'm not quite sure what to call it, so if you have any ideas, please post. Constructive criticism is welcome and of course appreciated, but please don't flame, it's my first book! I will put the chapters in separate posts. Enjoy. [Edit]: I apologize that there are no indents to show new paragraphs.
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Posted: Thu May 21, 2009 1:51 pm
Chapter One A small sliver of moonlight shone through the peaks of the treetops. There was a deep mist in the air. All was silent. Tirtza stood alert. The woods of Nightbrook had always been a peaceful place at night, but never as silent as it was now. She sensed something was wrong. Her wolf, Akiko, stood beside her and sniffed the air. A sudden movement aroused her, and she bolted. Tirtza followed close behind. A broad shadow rustled in the trees. She cautiously pulled her bow out and readied an arrow. The shadow disappeared. She slowly set down her bow. The slight smell of smoke touched her nose. She whipped her head around and stared in terror at the burning village before her. Her village, her home, her very place of birth, was burning to the ground. Instinctively, Akiko grasped Tirtza’s hand softly in her mouth. Knowing Tirtza would be in danger if she didn’t move, Akiko pulled as hard as she could without hurting her. Akiko had been given to Tirtza when she was little, just learning to work with animals, as a guardian. Since then Akiko had been faithful in protecting her. That was eight years ago. She was sixteen now. Tirtza was numb. She couldn’t move. She suddenly became aware that she could not feel Akiko’s mouth grasping her hand. Slowly, her senses started to fade. Within a few minutes she could not feel, hear, smell, or see anything, but she knew she had fallen to the ground, letting the toxic fumes consume her. She lay there for what seemed like hours. She woke up sweating. In her own room. “Tirtza!” said a familiar voice as the door swung open, proceeding to hit the wall. “You were tossing and turning all night. Are you okay?” It was David. Her room mate, and her biggest crush ever since she was 10. He was a tall elf with a lean build, like she was. He had soft brown hair with slight curls and deep blue eyes the shape of almonds. It was his duty as well to protect her since her father died in the terrible war years ago. She sat up, in a daze, confused at what had happened. That dream! She realized. I’ve been having it for the past month now! What does it mean?! “Y-yeah, I’m okay.” She finally replied. David cautiously said, “A-anyways...We’re going to training today, You’d better get up.” Damn! I totally forgot! She thought. “What time is it?!” She fretted. “Almost 8. Training starts at 8:30.” With that, Tirtza dashed out of the room, Akiko following close behind. Shadowmist village was a small and peaceful place, just like the surrounding woods of Nightbrook, located in Northern Azshera, in their territory. Alleris, the High Elf leader, ruled in the capital, Sererion, located also in Northern Azshera. The population mostly consisted of the tranquil forest elves, only attacked when provoked. The elves of Azshera worshipped The Tree of Life, a sacred tree just on the outskirts of Shadowmist. The tree supported all life to the elves, and if it was ever to be broken, the elves would suffer terrible hardships. Shadowmist was a very old village. It had survived many wars against the opposing Orc faction. They were heavy set, barbaric orcs; their territory in Southern and Eastern Azshera. Their capital was in the Southern area, in Dustshard Valley, a desolate and hot desert, ideal for the barbaric race to live. Their leader was a cold, heartless orc, Theruhn. Tirtza walked alongside David and Akiko, her long legs unsteady. She was a tall elf, like David, with mysterious brown eyes and waist-length charcoal hair. Her lean build made it easy for her to stealth through the forest and run quickly. She was a very mysterious person, and did not reveal much about herself to people that she didn’t know. Her strong compassion for animals got her into the top hunter training class, to train and befriend the strongest of beasts. They finally got to the training grounds, and met up with Taura, her trainer. Shooting targets were all around the area, making her certain that she would be practicing archery today. “Ah, Tirtza, good to see you.” Taura said serenely. Tirtza looked up to Taura as her mentor. She was about 12 years her senior, and was the top hunter in Shadowmist. She had deep tanned skin tone and short, bobbed, brown hair. Her wardrobe consisted of mostly leather from animals they needed to kill during the depression a few years ago during the war. They didn’t ideally kill beasts much, as they were one of their greatest allies against the Orcs. “Good Morning, Taura.” She bowed respectfully. Taura replied, “Are you ready for training today? We’re doing archery today. You brought your bow, right?” “Of course. It’s right--” Tirtza paused. She could’ve sworn she picked up her bow when she left home. She looked frantically to David, who shrugged, then Akiko, who looked down guiltily, whined, and lied down. She sighed, smiled wryly, and bent down to pet Akiko gently. She knew what had happened. Akiko had a bad habit of chewing up Eucalyptus, which is why Tirtza preferred an Oak bow instead. The Eucalyptus bow was a makeshift one; as her old one broke in battle, and they did not have enough supplies to fix or make another. Taura snickered and handed Tirtza a new bow, smiling. “Er...Thanks. Sorry for the trouble.” She said, apologetically. “No problem, we’re always prepared for that. You don’t know how many times it’s happened before.” Taura said, laughing. “Shall we get started?”
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Posted: Thu May 21, 2009 1:52 pm
Chapter 2
“We’ll start by shooting still targets.” Taura said, looking over at the new target boards before her. “Remember to keep your head up, and facing straight at the target.” “Ready?” Tirtza readied her bow. “Aim...” She aimed as best as she could at the target. “Fire!” Tirtza shot her arrow straight at the target, almost hitting the middle. “Good job.” Taura applauded. David sat quietly on a tree stump, watching her. She turned around to make sure he was still there. The moment her head moved in his direction, he immediately pretended to do something else. Once her head was faced toward the target, he resumed watching her once more. Soon after training was afternoon, and then came dusk. The reddish sun had begun to set, and Tirtza realized she had not eaten much all day. Her stomach groaned with pangs of hunger. “David, you hungry? Want to go to the tavern for something?” David nodded tacitly, with a sheepish grin spreading across his face. They walked together into the nicely lit tavern and sat down at the nearest table. The tavern was busy at this time of night. Dusk was the main time of evening meals in Shadowmist. There were not many people in the village, so everyone knew each other. A heavy set, plump-built lady came up to their table. “What’ll it be?” She said, beaming a smile. “Two green teas, please.” David said. Tea was a customary drink in Azshera, mostly to the Elves. The heavy set lady came back a few minutes later with a porcelain tray with two ceramic cups of tea placed on it. “Thanks.” David smiled, handing her the amount he owed. David and Tirtza drank their tea, making light conversation when they could. The conversations that they had were slightly awkward and they often found themselves blushing at each other. Akiko was sniffing around the tavern trying to find dropped food under the tables and making toddlers laugh when they purposely dropped food on the dusty floor to her. Dusk soon turned to night, and a light rain had started to fall. Tirtza, David and Akiko headed out of the slowly emptying tavern. The fire in the center of the village started to burn out in the light rainfall. Tirtza and David retired to their small cabin. By midnight the rain started to come down harder. Tirtza woke up, and drowsily looked out her window. She sat up in her bed and wondered if David was awake. She crept out of her petite room and slowly pushed his door open. It was dark. She assumed he was asleep. “Tirtza...?” A drowsy voice came from the corner of the dark room. “Uh...I’m going for a walk...I’ll be back later.” She said. David looked out the window. “It’s raining, though. And dark.” “I’ll be fine, I’m taking Akiko with me, and a lantern.” “C...Can I come with you...? I mean uh...I’m kind of...Worried...” Tirtza’s heart raced. He’s worried about me? She thought. “Sure...I mean...If you want to...” She stammered. Tirtza loved walks in the rain at night. It was always peaceful, no one around to hear her walking. They walked together silently, with the occasional shake from Akiko trying to get water off her coat. They found a dry spot in the underbrush of Nightbrook. “This spot is so pretty at night. Especially when it’s raining.” David sighed. “That’s why I love coming here.” “Tirtza...I--” David was broken off by a loud crash of thunder. The village was a ways away, so they found a cover under some dense undergrowth to hide under. The thunder continued out through the night. Tirtza woke up early, while it was still raining, but a lighter rainfall this time. She noticed that David was right next to her, still asleep. It was a chilly and brisk morning, like most in Northern Azshera. Tirtza shook David to wake him up. Akiko stirred, noticing Tirtza was awake. She stretched, yawned, and shook herself dry. David woke up. “Morning Tirtza.” He said, rubbing his eyes. “Hey, morning. We should probably head home pretty soon, it’s supposed to rain all day and for the rest of the week, and I heard it was even supposed to snow.” “Alright, where’s Akiko?” David said wearily. Tirtza looked around. Akiko was no where to be seen. “Ah--I’m sure she was just here.!...I just saw her, turned around, and then she was gone.” Tirtza was frozen with fear. Her sensitive ears picked up a desperate howl. “Akiko!” She called. She heard it again. Tirtza whirled her head around in the direction she heard it from. There was Akiko, in distress, sitting by the sacred forest, containing the Tree of Life. And it was on fire.
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Posted: Thu May 21, 2009 1:54 pm
Chapter 3
“We have to do something!” David yelled through the swelling flames. Tirtza was not listening. She was staring in bewilderment at the burning tree, the tree that contained the power to decide between their life, and a terrible suffering death. She hyperventilated, unsure of what to do. Petrified with fear, she didn’t dare move. She began to feel dizzy. David stared for a minute, and then swept her off her feet to carry her back to the village. Akiko followed, whining. Tirtza found her voice. “T-the Orcs...!” She choked. The smoke was constricting her throat, making it even harder to talk. David opened his mouth to say something, but was interrupted by a loud crackle coming from behind them. He whipped his head around to see a tree falling right on them. He had no time to even think before someone pushed them out of the way. “Taura!” David shouted. She had saved them, but only temporarily. “I heard about you guys going missing. We need to get back to the village.” He had no time to thank her. They sprinted to the village. Tirtza could hear David and Taura conversing. “How did you guys get here?” Taura inquired. “Tirtza went for a midnight walk...It was raining, so I wanted to go with her. We got pretty far, but the rain began to fall harder, so we stayed in a dense underbrush during the night. When we were about to leave, Akiko had gone missing, but Tirtza heard her howling. She ran over to there, and there was the Tree of Life...On fire.” By the time they had reached the village, it was too late. It was up in flames, the villagers fleeing. Some had collapsed, dying on the ground. The madness had already begun. Tirtza came to her senses. She realized that the dream she had been having for so many months had come true, right in front of her own eyes. David asked if she was okay, and when she nodded, he set her down. She looked down to see Taura, her mentor, her hero, on the ground, suffering. “G-go to Sererion...” She coughed through the flames. “Alleris will know what to do...” “But...What about you?” Tirtza choked, tears welling up in her eyes. “I’ll be okay. Trust me.” She smiled weakly. “Get out of here, save yourselves. You may be our only hope.” Tirtza realized that David’s arm was on her shoulder. “Come on. Let’s get out of here.” He said. She nodded, motioned for Akiko to come, and they ran out through the smoldering village together. Sererion was a ways away from the woods of Nightbrook. If they were to reach it in time, they would have to run most of the way. Once you passed Nightbrook, one would have to go through a series of complicated paths through Duskshallow Marsh, which was Orc territory. The territories were scattered around Azshera, but mostly close to their capitals. The Elves and Orcs were hostile toward each other; There were no exceptions to be friendly with one another. It would be difficult to get there, being that the flight master of Nightbrook, controlling where the Elves would go through giant owl travel, was killed in the fire. Neither Tirtza, nor David had a way of getting there on their own other than foot. It would be quite awhile until they reached it. Possibly even two days. The awkward trio hastily made their way through Nightbrook, and halted at the border of Duskshallow. Tirtza could make out the faint outline of Orcish guards. She pondered what to do for awhile, and turned to David. He looked determined to find a way to get through. He suddenly grabbed her wrist and started to sprint. “David, what are you doing?!” Tirtza whispered sharply. “Don’t worry. We’ll be okay.” “But the Orcs-” “Shh-You don’t want them to hear you.” David was naturally a fast runner. Tirtza was as well, but not nearly as fast as him. She somehow managed to keep up with him, though, especially because of the peril they would be in if she slowed down at all. They were half past the guards. Tirtza tripped while trying to run. “Dammit...” She said. “Tirtza. Are you okay?” David held out his hand to help her up, when a guard grunted loudly, triggering another guard to turn around, and another one, and so on. Before they could turn to flee, a large group of guards was standing before them, bloodthirsty and ready to kill. Tirtza struggled desperately to get to her feet, but fell once more. David helped her up, but as soon as she got to her feet, she collapsed again. She trembled to face her enemies. Their eyes were piercing with hatred toward them. They obviously hated the elves far more than the elves hated them. Akiko leaped in front of Tirtza, snarling angrily. The burly orc in the front shouted something in a different language, not understandable to elves. They began to charge. Akiko was quick to react. She sprang onto the arm of what seemed to be the leader. She took him down effortlessly, but as soon as she did, another orc appeared to lead the group. Tirtza decided it wasn’t worth Akiko’s life. She whistled to her, and Akiko reluctantly retreated back to Tirtza. The orcs glared at them and stalked away, as if they, too, did not think it was worth it to fight. David attempted once more to help Tirtza up, but it was no use. “I think my ankle is sprained...” She looked up at David. “It’ll be okay. I’ll carry you to a safe place.” David looked down at her, and Tirtza’s heart raced once more. By the time they had gotten to a safe site, it was dusk already. David gingerly set Tirtza down in a bed of leaves. He was a master at first aid, so Tirtza didn’t worry. A light rain had again begun to fall down on the marsh. She hoped there would be no storm tonight. David looked at her ankle, and felt around it to check for sprains. Tirtza winced. “It’s sprained, alright.” He sighed. “I’ll find a tourniquet of some sort and wrap it up.” Tirtza lay in the bed of leaves for a few minutes before David returned. When he returned, he was holding a bolt of linen cloth in his right hand. Tirtza silently questioned where he got it from. “I found it in a backpack.” He explained. “It’s in surprisingly good shape. I think it was from an orc that got lost.” He gently wrapped her ankle up with the linen and tied it in a tight knot. She couldn’t help but realize that he was blushing again. “Get some rest. We’ve got a long journey ahead of us.”
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Posted: Thu May 21, 2009 1:55 pm
Chapter 4 By morning the rain had stopped. Tirtza woke up early, and David was already up. Akiko had come to her sometime during the night, her wet fur brushing against her the next morning. She looked around her. The leaves were still wet with rain drops from the night before, and the ground was damp. It rained a lot in the marsh, and like the adjacent woods, was sunny almost next to never, one of the many reasons Tirtza enjoyed it so much. David had not realized she was up yet and was attempting to cook breakfast. Tirtza smiled. David was not naturally a cook and had not much practice with it. He usually ended up burning the food, but Tirtza didn’t mind. A sudden pain in her ankle reminded her of the night before. It was not as bad as last night, but still slightly painful. David turned around as he heard her stirring. “Morning Tirtza.” David smiled at her. “Morning. You’re up early.” “As are you. How’s your ankle?” “It uh, it still hurts...But it’s better. I think we’ll be able to keep moving today.” “That’s good. I made-Uh, well attempted to make breakfast...Do you want any?” “Oh, no thanks. I think we should get going soon.” “You just don’t want to try my food.” David teased. Tirtza laughed. “No. That’s not the reason-Alright, fine. I’ll have some.” Tirtza smiled. After they ate, they set off for the rest of their journey to Sererion. Tirtza’s ankle was manageable to walk on, though it still hurt. She figured it was better just to keep moving. The marsh was still damp from the night before. Tirtza figured it must’ve rained pretty hard, but it was still early; There hadn’t been much of a chance for the droplets to evaporate, anyways. They had been tacit almost the whole time they had been moving since they got up. A sudden noise startled both of them, and they saw a dark shadow looming over them. Tirtza was to frightened to look up, so David did instead. What he saw was nothing like Tirtza had expected. “A giant owl!” David exclaimed. She finally mustered up the courage to look up. Trembling, she saw that David’s exclamation was true. She sighed heavily. “Poor thing, must’ve come all this way from the fire.” Tirtza said sympathetically. She gently touched the majestic owl’s right wing, then it’s left, checking for wounds. “She seems okay.” Tirtza shrugged. “I wonder if she came here for a reason.” “She probably fled from the fire...Probably the last one left from Nightbrook. If she’s okay, she should be able to fly us to Sererion, or at least somewhere close. You can do that, right Tirtza?” David looked to her hopefully. “Yes, she seems to be okay to fly, but we’ll see when we mount up.” With that, Tirtza, David, and Akiko mounted up on the owl’s back. She was a little shaky at first. Tirtza hadn’t ridden an owl for quite awhile, as she mostly stayed to train and protect her village, but she still maintained control. She gave it a quick pat to the back, and they were Sererion-bound. The wind brushed through Tirtza’s soft hair and whipped her face. She smiled contently. She looked down and saw the whole marsh, the guards, the village, the place they stayed the night, everything. They finally reached the barriers of the marsh, and entered Secretstone Valley. Secretstone was a lush grassy valley, of which a greater portion belonged to the elves. At the very bottom was a large lake and a flatland. The valley was not very steep, making it easy to get down. Tirtza enjoyed coming here in the Summer with Akiko and occasionally David, when he could. It had the greenest rolling hills in all of Azshera. making it a great spot during Summer. It was warm all year round, maintaining a constant temperature of around 80 degrees Fahrenheit. But it was early Winter now. The grass was still there, but not as abundant as it was in the Spring or Summer. [Edit]: Apologies that I have not yet finished the 4th chapter, I've been having writer's block a lot, lately. So if you have any ideas, please post! Thanks!
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