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 Posted: Wed May 20, 2009 12:56 pm
Name: Kastina
Age: 16 turns
Sex: Female
Sexual Orientation: Bisexual
Craft: Former Apprentice Weaver
Rank: Candidate
Physical Description: Tall, slender, but fresh-faced, Relina looks far younger than her turns. With her full lips, rather elongated nose, and donwcast dark green eyes, her face has a permanently un-noticable look. Her hair is chin-length, and ringlets naturally, the strawberry-blond accenting her pale skin colour. She is very clumsy, but adequately nimble with her fingers - when walking, she often trips over gravel and uneven surfaces.
Personality: Shy, and very inconspicuous, she has no friends, nor enemies - more like a figure-without a face in the background when at the Hall. She hates her crippling shyness, and sees herself as a wallflower, wishing she could be courageous enough to talk to the other apprentices, knowing she could, but wishing just one person understood her enough to help her.. and glum when the other apprentices interpreted her expressionlessness as haughtiness. Her biggest flaw is not being close to anyone - no-one knows anything about her, but no-one cares to find out, due to her monosyllabic, red-faced conversations.
History: All through her childhood, Kastina loved bright things - colors, personalities, songs, dances; she craved creative things like that. She has always been an emotional girl, but always keeps her feelings inside her. She sees her life as unimportant, wondering if she'll ever get to be herself, but though a strong person is buried under her self-consciousness, she still never had been outgoing or offered her own opinion - her father always wondered if his daughter was slow. This thought is ever-present at the Weaver Crafthall, where Kastina's father sent her in a vain and exasperated attempt to make her more ladylike. Though her father loves her, his work at the Smith Crafthall stops him from visiting, and like everyone else, he views Kastina with a sort of 'out-of-site, out-of-mind' thought.
At ten turns, she saw her first dragon, bowing respectfully as she told the green-rider where to find her father - her voice had squeaked and her face had burned mercilessly with shame. She would look with wide-eyes from an indiscreet window as the rider took off though, trying to forget her embarrassment in the graceful wings of the dragon.
At 13 Kastina talked for the first time to an apprentice in the hall, but after meriting a half-disdainful reply, she tried to will herself to be more friendly - but she had picked the sharpest, most spiteful apprentice, who considered herself far over Kastina, and unforgiving for the past years of silence, had bestowed a painful pinch from her friends. Kastina decided not to be welcoming again until someone showed interest to her first.
Then when the dragonrider came up to her and asked to see her father at one of the rare times she was with her father at their small cothold, she never guessed what it was about, and stayed out of the way. When she heard them talking, her eyes grew rounder and rounder, and though her father is proud to see her as a candidate, he doubts whether his unpopular, vacant-eyes daughter will impress.
He gets ready to console her if she doesn't impress, and though Kastina can hear in his tone his doubt, she is even more determined to succeed, knowing her promise to herself, and determined to return a dragonet's friendship.
Pets: N/A
Other/Talents: Strong-willed
Will this character be a candidate? Yes please!
Picture: N/A
[Have tried to edit as you suggested, and thank you for pointing out those flaws.]
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Posted: Wed May 20, 2009 2:34 pm
Unfortunately, there are a few problems.
Relina is a character from Gundam Wing. Try to come up with something creative. If you simply must copy something, take it from something completely obscure.
If she looks that thin and that young, they probably wouldn't take her on as a candidate because she looked...well, sickly. They want healthy girls and boys.
The personality needs to be expanded upon, I'm afraid. I don't know anything about her at all...except that she's, well, good at everything, which is not exactly possible. Pick a few things for her to be good at, expand a little, and try to give her a few flaws too. The more we know about her, the better the match will be to her dragon.
Her smithcraft apprentice-ship also doesn't make sense. If she's so frail and young-looking, she simply could not do something physical like smithery. She just couldn't. And being clumsy with red hot metal? Disaster. Speaking of clumsy. She is, or she is not. Pick one.
As for her history, dragons rarely speak to people other than their riders. Ever. EVER. So chances are, they never spoke to her. That aside...I don't know anything that happened to her. All I got was that she has journeyman parents, she has issues with her mother and everyone thinks she will fail. Which, again, isn't terribly deep. I'm not asking for a novel, but I'd like if you could expand upon what she did, what she tried, things like that. We just want to know more about her.
Good luck!
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Posted: Sat May 23, 2009 5:36 am
Better with the name, right on!
I'm still not sure why she looks far younger than she is. If she's sixteen and looks far younger, she's gonna look ten or eleven. As long as you're aware of this...
She looks alright, now. I'm going to approve you, but just as a friendly warning, you might find it hard to RP someone so shy. :] Having done so in the past, there are only so many things a shy person can do. Of course, character development can cure that issue and if that's what you plan to do, be my guest! Just as long as you know, you're all set.
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