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Kisara Momochi

PostPosted: Tue May 19, 2009 1:16 pm


Hello everyone. This is one of the stories I am working on currently. Please comment and tell me what you think. It would be greatly appreciated. Thank you

Authors note: To cut down on confusion i want to add, that the bold italic writing is a vision that the person is getting. Like a movie that plays itself in their head. Do not worry. every thing will be explained as the story progresses. Please just sit back and enjoy the ride


Prologue:


Who I was and where I was at escaped my mind as I stared at the empty street. Dull, continuous, throbs of pain reverberated throughout my entire back as I looked to my left, right and back again. I took a step forward, wincing with pain, but I pushed that from my mind.

The street was eerily quite, the deathly kind of quite that could send shivers up and down your spine. The street itself, was worn down, the concrete a dull creamy gray color, and there was not a single object near it. The left, bare. The right, bare. Just a flat expanse of fields, nice short grass flowing in the wind. In the back of my mind, something screamed at me that I wasn't safe, that I should flee, but my body kept my legs from moving. My body told me to just turn around. And that’s what I did.

Even though the street was bare, what was behind, me was huge. It was a building. No, a series of buildings, connected by walkways and hallways. There were no windows, leaving the walls of these builds flat and undeviating. There were few doors, but the doors that were present, were shiny, and made of steel, with pad locks, and alarm systems beside each handle. The series of buildings ranged in sizes and floors, some looking as small as only one room, while others as large as apartment buildings. The first building, closest to me, was the biggest by far and probably served as the main building. About three stories tall, it cast a creepy shadow on the ground. I took a step now, towards the front door, and into that eerie shadow. One word danced into my mind, like the stepping forward had given me some creepy interference.

“Jocelyn”

My name? I didn‘t know. Something, though, about Jocelyn sounded familiar, sickeningly familiar, like I have heard it over and over throughout my years, but I could not pinpoint why. I pushed it from my mind and walked up to the door. I stood there for a moment, pondering over what I was doing. My mind was still screaming for me to run, still screaming for me to get as far away from this place as possible, but it didn’t budge me resolve. I was going to look inside these buildings, see where I was. Maybe the people were in here. Maybe I would find out who I was since I had no remembrance.

The doors opened, silently swinging inward. I glanced down at my hands; they were still hanging loosely at my side. I glanced inside the building, looking to see who had let me in. It was well lit, showing only white walls, with white cream colored tiles. Everything looked all sanitary, like a hospital. But there was no one. No one to open the door, and definitely no one to come and greet me as I took this first step in.

I closed the door slowly and began to investigate. Like the outside, this building was too quite, way to quite to even hint at the thought of any human activity. I started down the too clean hallway, my foot steps sending hollow echoes dancing around my head. There was a door, coming up on my right, another one of those stainless steal doors with a padlock and an alarm system. I dared not even to try and open it in case the alarms were working, and instead continued on.

Every door that came up, same thing. Same padlock and alarm, and I did the same thing with each, ignored it and continued walking. With every second passing, every footstep pounding its way into my ears, and every pulse of pain tin my back, I got closer to the end of the hallway. I saw a dead end up ahead. I decided to continue on though, until I reached it, just in case I missed something, and I was glad I did. Because when I did reach the end, I saw another door, to the immediate left, this one open, and waiting for me to venture through it.

It was a smaller, darker, unlighted room. A small staircase was the only inhabitant in this enclosure and so I made my way up. Instead of hollow noisy footsteps that had became familiar, I was met with nothing. My footsteps were silenced now, and instead the whole weight of the emptiness pushed down on me. I made my way to the stairs, deciding quickly that I would walk up them. As I reached the landed a scene played itself in my mind.

“Hurry up Jocelyn! You’ll be late for you first day!”

A man voice yelled to me, trying to make my small petite legs move faster. I had just reached the top of the stairs landing and was huffing and puffing like the wolf in that story about the three little pigs. The man, my father, was glancing back at me, his expression hard, telling me that I was going to be in trouble if I didn’t make haste.

Today WAS the big day. I was a special girl, or so my father told me. I was going to be very special and I would be learning how to fly like that angel on top of our Christmas tree. And when I learned how to fly, I could see momma again. Momma had died not to long ago. She had been sick, but now, since I would be able o fly, I would be able to see her whenever I wanted to.

When daddy told me this, I was ecstatic. I had hurriedly dressed in my finest clothing, my favorite Sunday dress, and followed daddy outside into the small car, and drove a long ways from our house. I had fallen asleep in the car but that was ok, or so daddy told me. We had arrived at this building. And boy was it huge. The hallway was a long one, really bright, but I was bouncing in excitement. Daddy told me on the walk down the hallway, that I would meet new people. And while I was learning to fly, I had to stay with these people. He assured me these people would be nice and kind to me and I readily believed him. While we walked down the hallway though, he started getting anxious. I thought we were going to be late and so I tried to hurry on. When we reached the end and walked into the dark room with the stairs, he practically ran up them. My legs weren’t that big, being only six, and so it took me longer to get up them.

But now I ran after daddy, along another hallway, almost to our destination.

Almost to mommy.


I blinked, and blinked, and then blinked again. The scene looked so real, felt so real. I looked up seeing for a moment, this same hallway, through the eyes of that six year old. Jocelyn, her name, and her mind was so carefree, like a six years old should be. But I knew that it would end soon. I just knew that her world, of flying to see her dead mother would crash and she would realize that reality was never that happy. I mean come on, humans cannot fly, and they especially cannot see their dead mothers.

I walked on now, retracing the small steps of the girl, going down this hallway where she had ran, following her daddy. The hallway was shorter, with more doors. These doors, however, didn’t have an alarm system. The padlocks were there, along with a metal plate on the door, like those types you see on classroom doors, or office buildings to tell you what room your standing in front of. I stopped at one, and read the name.


Experiment # 2353


I paled. Experiment? My mind immediately went to the girl. Was she in one of these rooms? Was she being experimented on? Did her dad know this when he lead her here and if he did, why? The stark white hallway and the cleanliness of this building made me realize with horror that this place could very well be a scientific laboratory. Yet why would they need a little girl. Her dad had told her would be able fly if she came here.

I continued on. Door after door I read a number. 5769, 1872, 4702. One after another I continued on. Each door was padlocked and the hallway remained quite. Maybe I was over reacting. Maybe they were just science experiments, like trying to stop a disease, or cure the common cold. But the thought kept entering my mind, why would a little girl be needed here. I stopped at one door. Experiment # 3213. This door was not padlocked. It was set slightly ajar.


To Be Continued...
PostPosted: Wed May 27, 2009 7:14 pm


this is good mrgreen
i hope the story continues and i like ur style of writing

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Kisara Momochi

PostPosted: Sun Jun 07, 2009 10:40 am


“This way sweetie, go in this room and wait for the nice men in the white jackets to come in here and show you what you need to do. Be nice to them. They’re doing us a big favor.” I smiled up at him, a big closed eyes type of smile.

“Thank you daddy, I love you.”

“I love you too sweetie.”


I gently pushed the door open. It was pitch black. I felt the wall beside the door, my hand flittering around like a butterfly, searching for that light switch. The walls were rough, concrete and cold. I finally found that switch. I had to reach to turn it on, one hand still holding on to the door frame. The lights flared up, making my eyes squint in the sudden flare.

I heard a sound. A whimper and then a small shuffle echoed around. I looked now into the room and was taken back. It was small. Too small to be considered a bed room. It had a mat on one side, and a bucket on the other. From the smell, I could almost guarantee that it held urine and other foul items.

“Daddy? Daddy where are you?”

There was a person huddled on top of the mat, a blanket draped entirely over the figure. It was a good size, too big to be the little girl in my visions, and yet it was too small to be considered adult. It was shaking, shuddering and whimpering moans could be heard. I ran to the person now, kneeling in front of them

“I’m here; I’m going to help you.”

I started pulling the covers away now, trying to be careful incase this person had been injured. Of course the moment they fell away, exposing the female that lay underneath them I gasped. She was curled up, her stringy red hair, dirty and disheveled, surrounded her closed eyes and pale lips. Her body showed bruises where the flimsy white hospital gown weren’t covering. But that wasn’t the most astonishing discovery, no, not in the least. It was in fact, the pair of wings, attached into her back.

The wings drooped down from her back limp, as if she had not the energy to lift them. The feathers themselves were dull, shabby, but you could tell that if they had been taken proper care of, then they would have shown a brilliant white.

"DADDY!!!" The I was crying, tears spilling over my cheeks and hitting the floor. I was in the room, the one daddy had told me to go into, but it was pitch black. The door had closed and I had heard the snap of a lock going into place. And now I couldn’t get out, no matter how much I had tried to open it. I started looking for a light switch, anything to get me out of the darkness. Monster always lurked in the darkness and only me night light could battle them away.

I stretched, looking for anything to show any indication of the light switch. I was up on my tip toes, when I felt the bottom of the plastic part brush against my fingers and smiled. I tried jumping, to reach the actual switch and it worked. Light flooded out the shadows and I turned slowly around, and my eyes widened. This room was half the size of my room at home. It was more like mommy and daddy’s walk in closest, with one small mattress up against one wall, and a bucket in the other. This room looked bared, the walls were cement, and cold. I shivered, sitting down on the floor, bringing my arms around myself.

It all will be better soon. Those men will come and help me fly. All will be good.


"Can you speak?" I asked the girl, my voice soft. Her eyes opened and she looked at me. They were lifeless, a grayish shade of blue, and they showed no recognition when she looked at me. "What is your name?"

"Jocelyn." Her voice was hoarse, her lips cracked, and she spoke even softer then I did. "My name is Jocelyn. My family call me Jojo though."

I nodded one to many times as I stared at her. I did not know what to do.

"Can you walk?" I asked. She shook her head, the paused, then nodded, then paused again.

"I'm not sure."

"Ok ok, its ok, here, take my hand, I'll help you up." She unfolded herself from the position she had been in, and reached out one shaky hand to me. I grabbed it, pulling her up slowly, my other hand going to her body to help you gain her balance.

I jumped as the door swung open. I had been sitting there, arms around myself for hours upon hours. I had grown hungry, had even gone as far as to use the bucket as a toilet. Until finally, someone opened the door. A man stepped in revealing his knee length white coat. I jumped up smiling.

"Hiya mister! Are you the man daddy told me about?"

"Mmm I presume so young lady. Here come with me. Are you hungry?" His voice as rough but not unkind. I found my self nodded and he smiled a little. "Well come on now, well get you some food."

The man held out his hand and I reached for it eagerly.


She stumbled as she got straight and I caught her before she fell foreword. I probably could have carried her if she didn’t have wings. She looked starved, skinny from the lack of food. As I looked at her back, I saw the wings more clearly. The skin around them puckered out around them like they had pushed themselves out from her body; as if she had grown them.

"Are they're others?" She got her bearings and stood straight up. She took in a deep breath and shook her head.

"Last one." She pointed to herself, and i needed solemnly. I started walking, holding her hand just in case she started to fall. We made it to the doorway and i looked out. It was still quiet. I lead her out of the room. I debated, should i continue on down he hallway, walking further into the building, or should i turn around, go back the why i came, down the stairs, through the other hallway, and back unto the empty road. I opted to continue on. Maybe i would be able to find food for the girl, or maybe there was more people here. I started walking foreword, pulling her gently with me.

The room he led me in was filled with other people. A couple dozen children lined the wall, all wearing different styles of clothing and all with different skin tones. He led me to this wall and told me to stand in between this girl with curly long brown hair, and this boy with brown fluffy hair. They looked at me, curious big eyes and i looked back, nearly as curious as them.

Hustle and bustle moved around us, bringing my attention back to the entire room. There was table upon tables with tubes and wires and weird items I have never seen before. Men and women, all in white coats hurried from one table to the next, then back again, all doing odd little jobs to prepare for whatever was happening. I couldn’t even see the man that had lead me here.

Then all at once the room was quite. The people stopped moving, their jobs finished, and all their attention turned to us.

I heard one little girl start crying.
PostPosted: Thu Jun 18, 2009 6:33 pm


bump sweatdrop sweatdrop

Kisara Momochi


Kisara Momochi

PostPosted: Tue Jun 23, 2009 8:37 am


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