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 Posted: Thu May 14, 2009 11:55 pm
I found a friend a friend today
she didn't have alot to say
I wondered if she wanted to play?
but she just wandered away.
I saw I saw her after school
Me and my friends thought she was school
Unfortunatly she thought we were fools
but she just wandered away.
I saw her again at the mall,
I saw her by a wall.
The wall was gray and black and blue,
But she just wandered away as I tied my shoe.
She wandered she wandered, all the time.
She never stayed and talked and she never chimed.
But then oh then she said to us,
"Oh hello hello! I see you guys on the bus!"
From that day on we became good friends
A friendship that will never end.
And now you know what she does?
She stays and hangs out with us.
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Posted: Wed May 20, 2009 10:15 pm
The rhyming was scary o_O
I found it very awkward...
Good for little kids though =D
Not meant for an older audience like 10+
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Posted: Thu May 21, 2009 3:10 pm
it was ok,
in the 2nd Stanza did u purposly put the word "school" at the end of the 1st 2 lines? cuz it seems misplaced in the 2nd line
"I saw I saw her after school
Me and my friends thought she was school"
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Posted: Mon May 09, 2011 6:10 pm
Yeah, you need to edit your poem but you know...it's reaaally cute. 4laugh I like this 'quiet' girl you mention and I'm glad she had a happy ending. I wonder why she wouldn't be friends with them at first.
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