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PostPosted: Wed May 06, 2009 9:15 pm


i feel wetness at the corner of my eye
when i blink i start to cry
as a tear rolls down the side of my cheek
my feelings get deeper
every time i see you or think of you
it is just every moment i want to die
i love you but i dont know if you feel the same way
whenever i see you i try to build up the
courage to ask you at least be my friend
but i just wind up shedding a tear
i hope in the future we could be friends
maybe so or maybe not.........
PostPosted: Wed May 20, 2009 3:45 am


Also very good, but the rhythm is a little choppy. Work on the rhyme some, and it'd be really good. ^_^ 4/5 rating.

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