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The Lyrics and Poetry Elite

A poetry and lyrics guild to sell, buy, post, critique, compete, and more with poems!

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Poetry and Lyrics! Awesome!

fire i wrote it when i was really tired its stupid

Xxr and sXx

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Posted: Wed Apr 29, 2009 6:07 pm

as i watch the fire go higher and higher
i believe in those who favor fire
i might be stupid
oh yea i forgot ,yes i do believe in cupid

Posted: Thu Apr 30, 2009 10:00 am

As kindly as I can say this, I do believe this needs a little bit of work before being presented as a poem. I recommend making it twice as long and working on the rhythm. Other than that it's not too bad. I'd give it a 3/5 in the arenas. Keep trying, though!

cooll666725
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Poetry and Lyrics! Awesome!

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