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 Posted: Tue Apr 21, 2009 4:40 pm
(It's an old English class assignment^^)
You are what wakes me in the morning.
You are the reason for my existence.
You stole away my heart with no warning.
If I hurt you, I'll beg for forgiveness.
Your pain leaves me feeling such great sorrow.
I will ache to see your beautiful smile.
I’ll have you laughing again by tomorrow,
And our truest of love will grow all the while.
You say that you are nothing but trouble.
The pain in your heart is in way too deep.
If I try to help you, the pain will double.
You say this and leave me alone to weep.
Your love for me is real, and that's a fact.
I know that, and one day you will come back.
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Posted: Tue Apr 21, 2009 5:31 pm
I would assume you got great marks for this piece of work.
It has a cute feeling to it, even though it may be quite short.
The simplicity mixed with such a deeper meaning makes a great mix.
I love this piece of work, :]
I hope to read more of your work in the future.
-Yai.
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Posted: Wed Apr 22, 2009 1:45 pm
Beyond The Bounds I would assume you got great marks for this piece of work.
It has a cute feeling to it, even though it may be quite short.
The simplicity mixed with such a deeper meaning makes a great mix.
I love this piece of work, :]
I hope to read more of your work in the future.
-Yai. Yeah, I usually prefer longer poetry, but we had to follow the rules of a sonnet. Thank you very much! I'm glad you like it.^^
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Posted: Sat Apr 25, 2009 7:48 am
I really like the poem too, you actually managed to rhyme without it sounding tacky or childlike biggrin
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Posted: Sun Apr 26, 2009 2:09 pm
ash-nite I really like the poem too, you actually managed to rhyme without it sounding tacky or childlike biggrin lol thanks, but I must admit that was a challenge xd
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