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i've been randomly writing this book about fairies and i have no idea what it is called!! nor do i know where it is going but oh well thats a panic for an other day.

the general gist of the story is that a nature-does-you-no-good girl's child of nature brother is kidanapped by "Them" as well as a few others. the girl goes after him where the fairies live and discovers that her logical brain is slowly being destroyed and that she has a conection with the blizzard

heres the prologue:

Prologue

Mist curled at her bare feet as she marched doggedly towards the clearing. Silvery threads of music and laughter caressed her ears. Soft light and colours soothed her distressed eyes. Spells of confusion tugged at her already fraying mind, but she jerked her head from side to side to loosen their hold. Suddenly she was at the edge of the clearing. An almost physical wave of euphoria threatened to the black flood of grief away from the vast metropolis of her mind. A world – no! A universe – of contrasts lay before her.

Children in pretty frocks and flowery headbands play with tea sets and teddies while couples of varying ages wrapped themselves around each other next to the tea parties, shamelessly crying out their pleasure. Creatures twisted and gnarled with evil, stabbed at the snowy breasts of swans as ethereal elves swirled around to the birds’ first and last song.

She quelled the fear that attempted to paralyse her and she stepped over two entwined women. Their panicked expressions identified them as humans enchanted for the faes’ entertainment. Casting her red rimmed eyes around, she found what she sought. The Queen: an ebony fairy grasping a dripping knife. The King: a porcelain elf shrouded in a starry glow. The contents of her stomach curdled when the Queen turned her eyes, dark abysses, on her and a cruel smile flittered on the King’s shining face. Slender fingers enticed her towards them.

“Child, why are you here?”

Silence.

“Tell us child, why are you here?” This time impatience cracked the King’s ivory mask.

She just smiled.

The sun finished setting and the tide of darkness flooded her mind.

i need title ideas!!!!!!!! thanks biggrin

I don't knnow exactly, titles aren't my strong point, but how about 'Fae Queen' or 'Ivory Queen'? Maybe 'Pureheart', since she goes after them. No, that sounds stupid.

titles are not my stong point. the story gist was sort of confusing to me but your writing is pretty good. Good luck on this!

Hmm... let's see... with what was given.... You said she had a connection with the blizzard, so perhaps "Winter's Mist"? I can't really think of anything else without more information about the story.

Many writers say that the title doesn't come to them until later on in the story.

When the right title comes to you, you'll know it. Until then, just keep writing.

Also, planning makes a big difference in how your story will turn out. I used to do alot of the kind of writing you're doing above ("Here's a cool character and situation, let's see how it turns out...") but it only works for short stories no more than a few scenes long. If you're going to write a full book (which certainly isn't a better or worse thing to do than writing a short story), then you should plan out your characters and plot carefully, and expect to revise alot.

Hi Tsuki. I agree with waiting to pick a title. You could just set it as the girl's name for the time being until you find a suitable title. Heck, you can change it as many time as you want until you settle on a title you like permanently.

Another thing. I don't know how much you've written already, but there's a few things I noticed in the prologue.



I just really don't get this sentence. I have no idea what it means.



I like this ending but you didn't mention the sun setting at the beginning of the prologue. I think this would have more impact if you mentioned the sun setting and drew a contrast between it and the darkness that floods the character's mind.

Otherwise, I really liked what you have so far. It's interesting so far. Write more! Quit worrying about the title and just write more.

here is the prologue complete with amendments suggested by glorybaby. many thanks glorybaby!! blaugh

Prologue

The mist curled around her ankles, striped by the copper sun that shone through the slender trees that surrounded her. Silvery threads of music and laughter caressed her ears. Soft light and colours soothed her distressed eyes. Spells of confusion tugged at her already fraying mind, but she jerked her head from side to side to loosen their hold. Suddenly she was at the edge of the clearing. Her eyes panned across the erroneous scene that played out before her.

Children in pretty frocks and flowery headbands play with tea sets and teddies while couples of varying ages wrapped themselves around each other next to the tea parties, shamelessly crying out their pleasure. Creatures twisted and gnarled with evil, stabbed at the snowy breasts of swans as ethereal elves swirled around to the birds’ first and last song.

She quelled the fear that sought to paralyse her and she stepped over two entwined women. Their panicked expressions identified them as humans enchanted for the faes’ entertainment. Casting her red rimmed eyes around, she found what she sought. The Queen: an ebony fairy grasping a dripping knife. The King: a porcelain elf shrouded in a starry glow. The contents of her stomach curdled when the Queen turned her eyes, dark abysses, on her and a cruel smile flittered on the King’s shining face. Slender fingers enticed her towards them.

“Child, why are you here?”

Silence.

“Tell us child, why are you here?” This time impatience cracked the King’s ivory mask.

She just smiled.

The sun finished setting and the tide of darkness flooded her mind.

Thanks!! 4laugh