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 Posted: Sat Mar 07, 2009 9:19 am
SO I personaly love to write poetry and stuff like that and I was wondering if anyone else does. Also if anyone else does would they be willing to share thier christian poetry.
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Posted: Sat Mar 07, 2009 10:20 am
I wrote this a while ago. I'm not as happy with it anymore, but meh.
-CRUSADER-
Among the shining light
a young man stands to fight
for what he truly believes in
for he hath known no treason.
To his one and only God,
who guides his path of glory,
he prays for true forgiveness
from the One Most High and Holy.
And while his path was full of shame,
he knows he was the one to blame,
for he hath played this wicked game,
but now his life is not the same.
Because he found Him and His Word,
his life is no longer absurd.
He now knows that his life has meaning
because of his faithful believing.
Just because he isn't grown
doesn't mean that he's alone.
For the LORD thy God is with this man
and Hell surely cannot withstand
this young Crusader's mighty sword
when with the power of the LORD.
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Posted: Sat Mar 07, 2009 10:57 am
@Spike: It's pretty good. smile
@Katty: Yes. I'm about to go have tea now, but I'll post some when I get back.
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Posted: Sat Mar 07, 2009 11:30 am
Anyway, here's my favourite. I wrote it quite a while ago, so it might not be that good. It's not as bad as some of them. But Can They Hear Me?
But can they hear me Lord, when I cry out so loud?
I feel You moving in me; I try to make You proud.
Will they ever listen; it's causing so much pain,
I know You really love them, please let me try again.
We talk of You, and all I do is laugh,
I'm filled with good intentions but it's not on Your behalf,
You gave Your life for me, I haven't done a thing,
I need to crown You again, to crown You as King.
So please Lord, come to me I pray,
and help me through each dark and lonely day.
They need You so much, how can I ever see,
The way You love them as much as You love me.
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Posted: Sun Mar 08, 2009 4:52 pm
@Voldemort: That was really good. I had a rythym in my head when I read it and it sounds like you could really turn that poem into a song!!
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Posted: Sun Mar 08, 2009 5:19 pm
Okay, I decided to post a couple of my poems sweatdrop .... Just so you know, I have a system for writing music. [] means yell/shout and {} means scream (as in hardcore ninja ) Quote: The Condemnation Of Civilization Adam Bruce Echolocation, Radar Emission, Heat detection, And vis’ual perception. Use ‘em to find ‘em, To find your salvation And spread to the nation The news of corruption, Deterioration, And total destruction; It’s just like suffocation. It’s time to make the transaction Of justification. To meet at the junction of media production— A proclamation Of unworthy redemption. Go now and make the deadening declaration. The one full of life sav’un Through holy salvation. Please, for this forsaken location. Spread the condemnation of civilization, We, the combatants of earthly deception. Take your stand against ‘em. We stand to oppress ‘em. Rise against ‘em, But don’t forget the mission, A black operation Into the chasm of our opposition. I was going to use this in the poetry jam this year at my school, but nobody told me what day it was until it had already begun crying Quote: You Just Keep Asking Yourself That Question Adam Bruce I {Why does it always have to be this way!? /---------} ….*Fast guitar and drums*…. ….*slow down and start verse*…. V1 I wake up to another day. Same old story, the same old way: We’re born, we eat, we sleep and die. There’s gotta’ be more to this worthless lie. PC1 I gotta’ stop this endless cycle. [I gotta’ find a]{way out!} C It’s time to ask yourself the question of Why?----------------------- You live this life? Why?---------------------------- You walk this way? Why keep going, wasting your life----------- do you keep on going, wasting your life away? [Why!? Do we do what we do!?] [Why!?]{Must it always end, with, you!?} ….*hold last chord, go in slow for verse*…. V2 Put one foot in front o/ the other. Gotta’ keep up with the upbeat pace. (They) call-it-life, this endless cycle of why. There’s gotta’ be more to this [pitiful] life. -Chorus- PC2 It’s time to break the cycle. x3 *base kick/stop* {It’s time to break the cycle----------------------------} [It’s the]{only way out!} -Chorus- -Outro- This one is a song that I wrote, but don't have music to.... Quote: Follow your heart, follow your soul, keep goin' as far as it goes. Follow your calling, I'm falling I'm crawling; keep going, don't ever let go! I can't keep losing, I can't keep fighting, or live-the-way I do. It's so confusing, I'm tired of losing, I give it up to You! Yeah, it's short. 3nodding Quote: Let It Out Adam Bruce For BLS V1: Wanting, trying....to let my true feelings free. Striving, desiring....to be all that I can be (for you....) PC1: So let it out, there is no use.... Chorus: There has to be a better way! To show how I feel for you; To show just how I love you. There has to be a way to change! To le-et it all out; And le-et it be found. V2: Working, making....myself to be better for you. Wishing, missing....a chance to be with you. PC2: So let it out, there's no excuse.... Chorus: There has to be a better way! To show how I feel for you; To show just how I love you. There has to be a way to change! To le-et it all out; And le-et it be found. V1: Wanting, trying....to let my true feelings free. Striving, desiring....to be all that I can be (for you....) Chorus: There has to be a better way! To show how I feel for you; To show I love you. There has to be a way to change! To le-et it all out; And to le-et it be found. E: So let it out, I....love....you.... Another song that I wrote for my girlfriend. I have more, but most of my other stuff is just partial stuff. I'm not putting some of my stuff up because I want to keep them secret dramallama
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Posted: Wed Mar 11, 2009 2:56 pm
@ all who have posted I like what was posted here is some of my stuff The Stillness
The stillness all around me,
The calm, the peace, the silence.
It surrounds me,
It astounds me,
I know that you are here.
The stillness all around me,
The calm, the peace, the silence.
The birds are not singing,
And my phone’s not ringing,
Cause God doesn’t need a phone to call me home.
The stillness all around me,
The calm, the peace, the silence.
I’m amazed that you would smile upon me.
That You would love me a lowly child.
That You would hear and speak to a sinner like me.
That You would be everything I needed and more.
Lord You make me say WOW and stand in wonder. No hiding Turn up the music Drown out the world But I can't avoid You Turn down the lights Fall back asleep But there is no escape No changing whats been done No ignoring the facts The truth shines through it all No changing who You are No ignoring what You've done Your light shines through it all There is no place to hide No running from the truth No hiding from the light Your love shines through it all
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Posted: Wed Mar 11, 2009 3:28 pm
You guys have talent, nice work.
I think I overdid this one on the repitition, but whatever:
-It Only Takes One-
It only takes one promise to become a liability.
It only takes one puff to become a smoker.
It only takes one throw of the dice to become a gambler.
It only takes one sniff to become an addict.
It only takes one trick to become a deciever.
It only takes one look to become an adulterer.
It only takes one mistake to become a corpse.
It only takes one lie to become a liar.
It only takes one theft to become a theif.
It only takes one murder to become a murderer.
It only takes one sin to become a sinner...
..and it only takes One's love to wash it all away.
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Posted: Wed Mar 11, 2009 7:40 pm
I think we should have a music/poetry sub-forum 3nodding
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Posted: Thu Mar 12, 2009 9:12 am
@Spike: That's really good. There was a little too much repetition, maybe you could expand on the points, like:
"It only takes one promise to become a liability
It only takes one puff to become a smoker
"
... just an idea. But I think it's really good.
@Katty: Wow. That's pretty awesome. You have a lot of talent.
@Haven: Thanks. Yours are awesome too. Although, we only really need one thread for poetry, and too many subforums kill guilds. If it's a subforum, people won't look in it unless they're posting. Plus it costs. xD
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Posted: Thu Mar 12, 2009 11:47 am
Honestly, I abandoned the poem because I got out of the "poet" mood recently, so I doubt I'll do anything with it.
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Posted: Thu Mar 12, 2009 3:39 pm
I have a few, though most of my poetry tends to take more of a dark and depressing nature. Here's a couple of them. What matters?
It's so warm, a swirl of colors around you.
Smiling faces greet you, dancing around, twirling,
In a circle. So warm, so sweet. Nothing can replace
This feeling of light around you, shining, whirling.
Everything in everlasting, or so you thought.
Holes appear in the glow of tints and shades
Darker, bolder, dimming the warmth...
Your focus sways, as those who once stood there fades.
Only a fond memory, once solid, but nevermore.
Only shimmering, transparent... cold, brittle, and slow.
The bright colors still swirl in their continuous circle,
But now unnoticed, as the small empty patches grow.
Breaking the chain of light, you follow the deep gashes
In the walls, peering further and further... trying to figure out
Their cause. Turning back, the light that once surrounded you
Has faded too, you're lost, confused, you wave and shout!
As you stare at the dwelling hole, you hear no answer to your plea,
But turning toward the other side you glipse at the flickering flame
In the distance, barely an echo in reply. Blindly you follow, as it is
The only way you can return to your true self, hoping you'll be the same.
Twas a long journey, but well worth the time, returning
To the light that once surounded you before. Out of sheer
Joy you look around at those familiar smile, welcoming you back
Realizing that those dark holes are gone, there's nothing more to fear.
Forbidden
The icy touch of a warm breeze, caresses the body
As it slowly fades into a relaxed state.
Enjoying the tingle that prickles the skin, like
The gentle fingers stroking, feeling, acting like bait.
Oh, sweet temptation! Why should one long for
What can only hurt them later? Like the bitter-sweet
Taste of chocolate, lust is a demon that one cannot
Easily ignore though we try to dim the heat.
Why would you wish, like many, to be a thief of hearts
And souls when you could be the knight that protects me?
To burden oneself with the heavy chains of what wasn't real love
You have chosen to seek pleasure, when I choose purity.
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Posted: Thu Mar 12, 2009 10:02 pm
@Spike awesome and the repition is not too much. I have poems that are set up in a similar style. I think that the style fits perfectly with your poem.
@Rin I liked your poems they were good
@Voldemort thank you. your not too bad at writing either
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Posted: Fri Mar 13, 2009 12:03 am
@Rin: Wow, they're awesome!
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Posted: Fri Mar 13, 2009 9:50 am
@ Voldemort & Katty: redface Well, thank you. I appreciate the compliments.
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