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Freaksrus

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PostPosted: Mon Mar 02, 2009 6:42 am


Name: Dawn
Age: 13
Sex: Female
Craft: Harper
Rank: Apprentice
Physical Description:Height: 5'
Weight: 120lbs
Hairstyle: Long to her midback
Hair Color: Black
Eyes: Brown
Skin Tone: Slightly Tan
Build: She is tall and skinny. She moves gracefully, but can run the legs off a Runner Beast.

Personality: She is shy and very giving. She loves to wander outside and sing to her flits. She is a free spirit. She learns fairly well, and gets along with others. She doesn't like to made fun of, but can endure it. She talks to her flits often about her problems, in secret of course. She tends to forget others when she's involved in music.

History: She has lived in Fort Hold all her life and dreams of becoming a Harper. Her parents are very busy and tend not to be around much, so she has been pretty much left alone.
She has many friends and likes to spend her free time outdoors. Her mother works in the kitchens, and her father in the stables.
She spent her free time often hiding in the Harper Hall learning the songs and musical instruments. Which meant less time in learning social skills. That's why she tends to be shy around others.
She used skills to entertain her friends at times. She entered the Harper Hall and has made great progress.
Her expertise is with the drums. She would spend her free time and nights at the drums.
She would listen and learn the messages and what each beat stood for. She has started to make up songs as well.
Her songs aren't the greatest, but they are coming along.
She helps the hold by going out and looking for Flitt eggs in her spare time. Her two flitts are a reward for this work.


Pets: Michel & Ruein
Other/Talents: Sings and runs well.

Will this character be a candidate? No

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PostPosted: Tue Mar 03, 2009 5:02 pm


This could use more detail all around- especially in personality and history.

Also, I'm not sure how realistic the situation of giving fire lizards is to a young girl, given the very sexual nature of fire lizards. What does she do/what would she do when they rise? I think if you could expand more in general and sort of give a good reason for that, I would appreciate it. ^^

Teh_Sil


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PostPosted: Sun Mar 08, 2009 12:11 pm


I'm still worried that she's a little bit too perfect. I think her personality and her faults still need to be built up a bit. Otherwise, this is getting a lot better. Good job!
PostPosted: Sun Mar 08, 2009 12:53 pm


lol She's not perfect at all. Hmm. Oh and she is shy and tends to forget others when she's involved in music. lol

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