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PostPosted: Sun Feb 22, 2009 4:28 pm


Who doesn't like having a seemingly crazy performer/bartender running around?
PostPosted: Sun Feb 22, 2009 4:29 pm


PART I. PHYSICAL


Full name:: Etzelfourth Rannin Pheasantry
Reasons for the name(s):: Something his mother liked. He really has no clue what it means, but he likes it well enough.
Date of Birth/Apparent Age/Approximate Age:: A bit past 23, but he looks 28.
If he/she was alive during the massacres, was he/she bonded? To whom? Etz wasn’t around during the massacres.
Rank:: Uuthli.
If a Daewl, what is his/her one power?:: N/A.
Skin Tone:: Pale, but a smidge coppery.
Height:: Around 6’2”.
Weight/Body Build:: Thin-looking. He may look a bit like a twig, but he’s not as weak as he seems. A bit on the bony side and sort of scrawny for his height, but not overall emaciated.
Hair:: A sort of golden orange, on the coppery side of things. About mid-length, just barely touches the bottom of his jaw.
Eyes:: Deep, warm orange. Like pumpkin color,, but darker and more rich.
Wing colours/markings:: Sort of a dusty brown, with some paler bands on the flight feathers. Also have an amber eyespots a bit to the side of the bands.
Ear colours/markings:: Dark brown, with some coppery touches here and there, especially on the tips.
Tail colours/markings:: Dark brown like his tail, with the same copper markings. These are in bands down his tail, however, and completely engulf the tip.
Peculiar Physical Traits:: His wings are a bit unusual in the fact that they have a sort of eye spot marking on the feathers. It’s about mid size, and forms an amber colored eye. His horn is also a coppery color.
Distinguishing Marks:: He’s got a small vertical diamond about a quarter of an inch underneath his left eye, and one just like it above his right eye. The one on the left’s a dark chestnut, and the one on the right’s a creamy pale color.
Health:: He tends to get sick a lot, but overall, pretty good.
Senses:: His hearing is good, smell is a bit sub par, sight is ok. Touch is good, too. Taste is his best sense, though.
Voice:: Etz actually has a really nice voice. Smooth. He’d make a good announcer for something, maybe.
Mannerisms:: He tends to sometimes launch off into riddles, which can confuse almost anybody. Etz also has a habit of twiddling a bit of his hair around one of his fingers whenever he’s bored.
Clothes/shoes/accessories:: A sort of turtlenecked tunic, constructed of many thin chestnut brown ropes sewn onto a hide. This tunic goes down to a little past his waist, and is held in place by crossing hide belts. His pants are made like his tunic, being made of hide with the same thin ropes as well. Etz wears tough leather boots that go up to the middle of his shins. He has a small copper pendant that’s a fleur-de-lis that he is never seen without, and fingerless gauntlets constructed out of dark brown leather that go up to his elbow.
Eating habits/mannerisms/tastes:: Etz eats a lot of things, but he refuses to eat mushrooms. He also likes cleaning his food almost obsessively before he eats it, and sometimes it can take him at least an hour to just clean what he’s going to eat. Plus, when he gets ready to eat it, it always -has- to be in nice, separated portions.

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PostPosted: Sun Feb 22, 2009 4:31 pm


PART II. GENERAL


Occupation/Social Status in Rank:: Etz is a bartender on the off days when he's not called to serve in the tavern. He also helps out on the patrols every now and then, too.
Views on Rank responsibilities:: Etz is alright with his job. He likes what he does, and knows that he’s at least entertaining others when he falls over serving people, as well as helping them sort of forget their troubles with his drinks.
Education/ Intelligence:: He’s self-taught in many things. Etz knows how to read and write from his mother, who learned what she taught Etz from her bond. He also is surprisingly smart, though he doesn’t tell half of what he knows most times.
Marital Status:: Single and proud of it!
Political Thoughts/ Views of Ranks and Vhaid:: Seriously, Etzelfourth could care less on the political status. Just so long as they don’t come in and start trying to make him do stuff he doesn’t want to do, it’s all cool.
Beliefs/ Values/ Strength of Beliefs:: He doesn't really have much stock in gods and primeval forces, or anything of the sort.
What is his/her usual disposition?:: Etz is rather happy-go-lucky, but more than a little contradictory sometimes. He loves chasing the ladies, but tends to say the wrong things at the right time. He tends to just sort of hang back, but can actually do a lot of things that normally wouldn't be expected of him with the right motivation.
Optimist/ Pessimist? :: Optimist! The glass is always half-full, even when there’s no water left.
Confident/Self-conscious? :: He’s pretty confident.
How does he/she feel about his/her appearance? :: Well. Etz likes how he looks, but he’s a bit nervous about his eyespots. They tend to scare things off, and he doesn’t really like them. But hey, what can you do?
Most important possession:: His most important possession is the fleur-de-lis pendant he always wears. It was a gift from his mother, and she got it from her bond. So it’s sort of an heirloom.
Talents :: Etz is good at putting on plays, and he’s not too bad at hunting and fishing. Plus, he can mix drinks that taste really good, not to mention not being too bad of a waiter. He can also hold his liquor like a beast, so it's best not to take him up on a drinking game.
(Smidge of performing info: Etz basically takes an idea and whips it into a play. He puts on one-man shows, yeah, but he performs all the roles adequately. He loves doing it because it's one thing he absolutely knows he's good at, and something he enjoys because it was something his mother and him used to do together. She'd play the fair maiden in distress, and Etz'd be the knight, coming to rescue her. The day his mother died, he tried to go into her room wearing his knight costume, insisting that he was going to fight off the 'fell dragon' that held his 'fair maiden' captive. As a result, he doesn't play the knight anymore, and is asked to, will flat-out refuse. Usually with some sort of look that says 'don't ask again'.)
What is a normal day like for this Jivvin?:: Just your average day either serving drinks or making them in the tavern. He takes walks a bit, and can sometimes be found entertaining a squirrel or some other small animal with one of his plays, acting out all the parts himself—and what’s a bit odd is that he plays them all well.
What is a normal rainy day like for this Jivvin?:: It tends to be a bit boring at the tavern on most rainy days, so he generally sits around and maybe mixes a few drinks here and there.
Greatest Fear:: Etz’s greatest fear is that he’ll grow to love somebody, and then they’ll reject him. He loves being with others and tends to keep the same circle of friends, so having that other person knowing that he likes them would basically put him at their mercy.
What does he/she want most?:: He wants to become a performer, as well as get better at hunting so he can help out more. Oh, and a girlfriend. Etz’d like one of those.

Major Goals::
1. Get better at performing.
2. Find a girl!
3. Work on finding out more drinks to make at the tavern.
PostPosted: Sun Feb 22, 2009 4:39 pm


PART III. RELATIONSHIPS


Significant Other/Relationship:: No significant other.
Who does he/she live with?:: He lives alone right now.
Who does he/she spend the most time with?:: Himself, actually.
Father/Relationship with him/Rank/Current Status:: Autren Pheasantry. Etz’s father left his mother when he was just a kid, and he doesn’t know what happened. He doesn’t hate him, but probably wouldn’t be heading the welcome wagon if he came back. He was a Sargtlin.
Mother/Relationship with her/Rank/Current Status:: Ellesa, now deceased. Taken by an unknown illness. She was an Uuthli. Ellesa and Etz were very close, and he loved her dearly.
Siblings/Ranks/Current Status:: No siblings. At least, none that he knows of.
Best Friend/Rank/Current Status:: He tends to be a bit solitary, and as a result, hasn't had much time to get to know many people.
Feelings toward animals:: He likes animals well enough. Now, if they only liked him!
How does he/she view his/her family?:: Etz held his family in very high regard, until his father ran off on him and his mother died.
How does he/she view his/her friends?:: Well. He sees them as okay enough people. Sometimes they can get on his nerves, but they're alright.
How does his/her family view him/her?:: Etz isn't too sure about what his father thought of him, but in his opinion, he must have either been terrified of having a kid, or just didn't care. From what he gathers, him mom thought of him as a treasure, something to be cherished and protected. He didn't know the full extent of it all until he found her journal after she died.
How does his/her friends view them?:: His tavern buddies see him as a joker sort of guy, usually happy and almost always up for a drinking game. He does have his off days, but those drinking buddies often just ignore them.
Who is his/her hero?:: He doesn’t really know too much of these things, but his mother is his hero.

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PostPosted: Sun Feb 22, 2009 5:25 pm


^_^ heart

~ He might have no idea how old he is, but could you give an estimate anyway?

~ 6'8" .... you are aware that that is TALL, right? I mean... REALLY tall... Not that that's a bad thing... but that's TALL XDDD and at only 145 pounds thats TALL and THIN ... XD all caps because we're talking TALL...and THIN XD Humans are considered towering at 6'3" ...

~ About his job... as a Uuthli, I believe he would be expected to participate in Uuthli patrols because that's a part of his rank... but he would also be expected to have another job, so it wouldn't be difficult for him to be a performer if that's what he really wanted... mind you that would most likely be small performances, like music, song and dance, and these could be done in taverns and such for small pay. Think medieval bard... that kind of thing. Singing at festivals, playing at wedings... you get the drift. Also, I wouldn't be surprised to learn that the taverns and Inns(?) had a sort of 'open mic night'. Not that they'd have microphones, but that they'd open small performance areas to whoever wanted a chance to get laughed at... ^_^ he'd have plenty of chances to practice.

~ His mother ran off on her bond? Her human bond? or her Husband? Either is a difficult thing in any case... a bond is just that... glue of the brain per say. She could run, but they'd always know where and how to find her because they're attatched by thoughts. They can't read each other's minds, but they can get feelings and such. Also if it was her human, the human would have to have been the one to release the bond, and that's the only way she could run... but since you say Etz isn't that old, I suspect you mean husband... A husband/wife bond that is undertaken by two jivvins is something that takes years and years to form. It's also something that is EXTREMELY Hard to break once it is formed, because it's kind of the equivalent of true love. 99.9% of bonded jivvins would never even choose to break that bond or run from it. That's not to say it can't be done, just that it's near impossible with the circumstances surrounding it. She might very well have run off on her boyfriend though... O.o .. if they were only dating and happened to have a kid.

~ I like that he's smart and doesn't boast about it . ^_^

~ I don't understand the part about him thinking that there's something strange living in the woods... If you're refering to the Barra Ssan, or the Valz'hins, then he would know all about them because they're common knowledge to everyone, including the center jivvins *and they're pretty naieve XD*

~ Putting on plays. There's a subject close to my heart, personally. I like it... but I wonder, where is he getting his scripts from? It wouldn't be terribly uncommon for there to be a few classics in the village library, but probably not a lot of hard hitting drama stuff... and comedies would have nigh on little purpose.... You've intrigued me here, and I guess I'm just speculating now... I want to know more about this. What kind of things he likes to perform, what might go over well in a medieval society, where he gets his material... where he performs, what about performance makes him want to keep on doing it... that kind of thing ^_^ Without a troupe of players, he'd be limited to monologues and one man shows... what can I say? XD I'm intrigued.

~ As a hunter, he would indeed spend more time in the woods than most... but most village jivvins don't go into the woods at all unless they're members of patrolling units. In fact, only certain jivvins have permission to be in the woods for extended periods of time, and if they don't come back within the time limit, then the Uuthli patrols go and get them. But they wouldn't need to be in the woods really... the village is very self sustaining, and has plenty of places in it where a jivvin can be alone should they need that. ^-^

~ Why doesn't he have a house?

~ His greatest fear is growing to love someone, but his major goal is to have a girlfriend? That seems contradictory. And I don't mind the 'fear of rejection' but is there something in his past that caused that? That would be really interesting backstory if there was and would really help build the character.

~ Again, a major goal is to become a performer. I have to say that if he's good at it then it's an easy and sure thing... but maybe... maybe he's not really good! That would explain a lot XD ...

~ So his dad left... that's a problem actually, because he couldn't leave the village... he could have died, or he could be living on the other side of the village, but even though the village is large, over the years there'd be a good chance that he'd have to see his father every once in a while. Jivvins are not allowed to leave the village, for any reason.

~ Ellesa and Etz were very close, he loved her dearly. She died. Why didn't he get her house?

~ You wrote 'no siblings, at least none that he knows of.' Actually that sets my plot brain rolling and I feel like I should mention why XD ... It tells me that there MIGHT be siblings of his out there that he doesn't know about... even better if his dad isn't dead and is in the village somewhere... it opens up some really cool personal plottings where he might be able to find said brother or sister. ^_^ Just thinking here.

~ Just curious, how old was he when his father left? I know you say kid, but for a wild jivvin that could be anything from 3 to 40 XD ... I wonder if he remembers what his father looks like? Maybe his father is still in the village and he has no idea what he looks like and wouldn't know him if he saw him.

~ How does he THINK his family felt about him?

~ Aww, his Mum is his hero... that's so sweet XD It makes me happy... but it also makes him a Mama's boy heart . XDDD You know, I like him. He's got a nice sweet homey feel that appeals to me. He needs some tweaking still, but I think he's worth a try XD ...
PostPosted: Sun Feb 22, 2009 9:42 pm


I like the image of him you've got going; I can really picture him in my head. Both behavioral and physical. Except for the height. I agree with Keppit... 6'8'' is really, really tall... so unless you have a solid reason for it, I'd suggest lowering it. I can't imagine it diminishing the character too much. (Aha! pun!)...but in the end it's you're choice, since we can't really -object- to extreme height...

I feel like you've got an interesting character in the works, but like not everything is being said. I'd like to hear more about his history. He seems to have a lot of unique little quirks; I'd like to know where they come from, why you chose to make him that way, etc. There are many things yet unexplained.

Other than that I'd just say listen to Kep, because she was so very thorough, and is most mindful of Village customs. There's not much I can add xD;

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PostPosted: Mon Feb 23, 2009 2:34 pm


Thanks for all the suggestions, you two! ^^ I'll get to fixing up things, but here's some little explanations that I can offer.

-He does have a house, but it's really not too much to speak of. It is his mother's house, but even then, it was barely enough for both of them. He likes it anyway, though it leaks a bit.

-Etz remembers very little about his father, the central thing being that he had copper colored ears. Very obscure, but the one thing that stuck in his mind was the copper. Etz may not know who he is, but Autren definitely remembers him.

-Ellesa and Autren were just starting to get involved, when Etz came along. The full explanation behind Autren leaving is that he wasn't ready for being a father, as he wasn't more than 30 at the time (he looked older than he actually was.). He got terrified of being 'trapped' by fatherhood, and so he left.

-Ellesa ran off on her human bond, yep. He committed something that fully went beyond the Uuthli's moral code. (What this was will be explained later, but it has something to do with fire and a house. I think you get it.) What's more is, not only did Ellesa catch him do it, it was to a friend of hers. She confronted him about it, and he insisted that he was in the right. When Ellesa presented the facts to her bond's superiors, he was furious. He struck out at her by going after the same friend again, this time killing her. She couldn't bear to see him any more after that, so she ran as far as she could, hoping to get away. Later on, he found her again, half dead on the side of the road. He had mulled over what had happened, and he released her from their bond. After that, he brought her to one of her old friend's house, where she was nursed back to health. Then, she wandered for a while, happening upon rumors of the Wild by chance. Ellesa was intrigued, and she then started to pursue the rumors, eventually coming up with where the path was through a series of trial-and-error attempts.

-Etz actually isn't so good at being a performer....in someone else's plays, that is. When it comes to the ones that he makes or those rare few that he adores by other people, he can fill those roles in almost perfectly. He hates playing the villain though, even when he's better at it than playing the hero.

-Well, his greatest fear is rejection, actually. So he goes after girls sometimes, but only so far as to keep from getting hurt. He may seem to go after nearly all the skirts in existence from time to time, but in all actuality, it's only an act.

-Etz's quirks have some very interesting stories behind them. For example, the washing the food obsession? That came from one time when he took a bite out of a large root he had scavenged for lunch of sorts, and he discovered that there was something wrong with it later....as he was sick for about four days. Now, he washes any roots or vegetables until the skin comes off, because it was later found (through some very unusual means) that there was a sort of fungus on the skin. Basically, all his quirks are little tokens and memories of the past that he's accumulated over the years. He's actually rather proud of them, as each one has a reason, a story, a memory, and a tale behind them.

-As for Etz's scripts, he often makes up the plays he does by himself as he goes along. Though they may be spontaneous and really without much of a point, he works out a few things first, and then the ideas start flooding in. Sometimes he messes a great idea up simply because he's got too many ideas for what he could do next.

-When Autren left, Etz was about two. Not old enough to remember absolutely everything, but old enough to keep some fragmented memories of his father.
PostPosted: Fri Feb 27, 2009 6:08 pm


Most of my concerns are not major, but there are several of them that should be taken into account, and some are simply questions.

To begin, you've said he renamed himself after a dream regarding his father. All well and good, and that's perfectly in your rights, but people don't just go around changing their names. What was so compelling about this dream that he felt obligated to? How did his mother react to him spontaneously changing his name?

He is still ridiculously tall for his weight, not to mention that he should weigh more than average because he's an Uuthli and has massive wings. I would recommend cutting off a few more inches, because his wings will make him look really tall anyway, and just taking off the actual number of pounds. A description for his body type tends to illustrate weight better anyway, and it'll make you feel more comfortable than upping his literal weight value.

This is more of a side note, because, again, I can't force you to change it, but...a male wearing mid-thigh-high boots. The image just gives me the giggles, though perhaps that was what you were going for. Might I recommend knee-high?

His occupation, as I've just explained to Anubis as well, is far too vague and would not be feasible for the Village. Uuthli are expected and encouraged to participate in the patrols, yes, but it would not be a primary occupation for any save a few highly qualified individuals. Also, Jivvins do not freely hunt for prey, except for sport, just as humans now do. They raise livestock just as humans do, but it would be animals like deer and ducks rather than cattle and chickens, and the paddocks would be broad and widespread, and carefully designed. Basically, they don't just go out and hunt.

Also on that subject, you say that he is a happy-go-lucky actor, who loves socializing but has no friends, and is prone to laziness yet makes a job of hunting and running patrols. I'm sorry, but these are contradictions left and right. Pick a primary occupation to suit what he likes. Also, if he spends that much time performing and around people, he's going to have made some friends. I don't need specific names, but maybe talk about what kind of people he gets along with, or if he has a group of buddies who he meets at a tavern twice a week, or something like that.

And lastly, the Belief question is in regards to spiritual beliefs, or personal values that he lives by. Working hard, doing the right thing, floss six times a day, something like that. I don't understand what you mean about the woods, because it's common knowledge, as Kep said, that there are Ssan and Valz'hin and all sorts of other creatures.

You're getting there, Zact, but the concept still needs some work.

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PostPosted: Sun Mar 01, 2009 9:02 pm


Well Zact...I think that does it. I'm pleased to say that he fits the bill. I do have one minor note for you, that you still refer to him as a 'hunter' in his Views on Rank Responsibilities, but I'm going to assume that was just an oversight on your part, so it's really no big deal <3

So, with that said, approved!
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