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Isianya

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PostPosted: Wed Feb 11, 2009 12:15 pm


Okay so I've been recently inspired by my upcoming trip to New Orleans. It is my firm belief there is something magical in that city. The city has a life of its own...living and breathing. So this is my "Ode to New Orleans," you could say. Thanks!

"Dance With Me"

Dance with me
under a rhythm and blues moon,
beneath a bourbon-blanketed sky.
We’ll sway in the heat of June
to the sounds of a familiar zydeco tune.
Just you and I,
me and you,
not a care.
Nothing to do.
But to dance.
Together.
Tonight.
In our beloved New Orleans
What a sight!

Hold me close.
Dance to the beat;
the sounds of jazz swelling beneath our feet.
We’ll dance ‘til the Saints Come Marchin’ In,
‘til the crickets stop singin’
‘til they call us home
'til there’s nowhere left to roam.
Just you and I,
me and you,
not a care.
Nothing to do.
But to dance.
Together.
Tonight.
In our beloved New Orleans
What a sight!

Never let me go.
We'll circle Jackson Square.
With the scent of jambalaya thinning the air,
we'll watch the sun rise over the Mississippi.
See the sparkling water so pretty,
hear the saxes fade
as we wished we had stayed,
uninhibited and unafraid.
Here.
Together.
Tonight.
Dancing.
Beneath a New Orleans street light.

.:~o*'Isianya'*o~:.
PostPosted: Sun Feb 22, 2009 7:52 pm


Well this certainly made me feel like I was dancing in the heat of June in the heavy (yet light) air of New Orleans.

You imagery was fitting, along with all the right allusions to what exactly makes up the culture of New Orleans.

The flow worked for me, along with the repetitions.

Tak-Jak
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Isianya

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PostPosted: Mon Feb 23, 2009 11:50 am


Thank you very much!

I think anyone who lives in Southwest Louisiana (like me) can describe New Orleans with appropriate scenery and descriptions. Of course, my love for Anne Rice helps, too. Haha.
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