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Unaru

Destitute Gawker

PostPosted: Wed Dec 03, 2008 8:08 pm


Art hiatuses suck for anatomy XD

Red line help would be lovely <3

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PostPosted: Fri Jun 26, 2009 3:55 pm


Okay.

Let me start by saying that anatomy isn't my strong suit, especially male anatomy. BUT! The thing that will really help this drawing is a pose that is both more natural and more dynamic.

In this case, you've got a guy in a pretty neutral stance, with his shoulders and head more or less straight, but one arm stuck straight up in the air. This kinda works for the keener in the classroom begging for teacher to call on him, but it doesn't really work for a Jedi knight who is channeling the FORCE into his hand. smile

So I tried to find a pose that showed how much effort was going into the hand. Sorry about his right arm, I know it's a little screwy. I was unsure of what to do with it since he had the lightsaber in turned-on-glowy mode... I also made one of his legs a lil longer than the other ^^; but mostly I just wanted you to get a pose idea.

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I hope this helps!

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Peppermint Coco


Shoroie

Shadowy Explorer

PostPosted: Fri Jun 26, 2009 4:53 pm


-: Unaru, you have good pose which keeps the viewer interested. Good job!

I tried the best that I could to get male anatomy right. I really don't what I did. Peppermint has more interesting information than I do. ^^'

Anyway, to the clothing! The image makes it a little hard for me find the clothing on him so I chose the ones that stood out more. The way you drew it, the pants look like they're are about to fall down so I brought them up a bit. (I don't know if the jacket has sleeves or not.)

I have no idea where's the wind is coming from. The cloth around his waist suggests no where but the jacket suggests from below and pretty powerful. I decided to remove the wind altogether.

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Of course, these are suggestions and you are free to follow them or not. If you can't understand something I said or just want to ask something, please feel free to let me know. Also, welcome to the guild! I hope you have fun while you're here. c: :-
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