I want advice from fellow poets on a poem of mine......Ill give you my work first then tell you what I need an opinion on..
Harper's Life
And death will come on wings of song,
a song of long and winding guile.
And in the end, your end I wend,
And in the end, a harp will smile.
As darkness falls, sun sets down,
He strikes against the bloody crown.
The last you hear, is voice of rhyme,
As you draw your breath, one last time.
With mission done, and target dead,
With quick due haste, the Harper fled.
Back to guild, and out of harm,
Lived he did, to spread his charm.
(end)
Does anyone think I may have taken it in the wrong direction? Because the description of a Harper is kinda different than what is imagined in the peom....any ideas or opinions?
