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 Posted: Mon Nov 17, 2008 4:00 am
Come join the zombie party, and grab a big balloon,
If you’re not a zombie, you will be one soon,
Come join the zombie party, drink some undead champagne,
Let’s talk to the man over there, the one with the spinning cane.
Let’s socialize, let’s make some zombie friends,
Welcome to
The Zombie Party
All the undead have arrived looking positively dead,
But trust me, they’ve already been fed.
The undead girls look superb, the gents all dressed up,
If it weren’t for their faces, they wouldn’t be at all messed up,
The party is alive, even if the goers are dead,
Let’s hope they’ve already been fed!!
Come join the zombie party, and grab a big balloon,
If you’re not a zombie, you will be one soon,
Come join the zombie party, drink some undead champagne,
Let’s talk to the man over there, the one with the spinning cane.
Let’s socialize, let’s make some zombie friends,
Welcome to
The Zombie Party
This is a WIP-- Please tell me what you think thus far!!
(and please don't just say "omfg needz m0ar stuff lol :B" and leave. I am aware. It's not done.)
Thanks!!
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Posted: Thu Jan 08, 2009 1:57 pm
I heart it! But, I don't get the line about the man with te spinning cane. What's that mean?
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Posted: Sat Jan 10, 2009 6:10 pm
I liked it; I can't wait for the rest.
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Posted: Wed Feb 04, 2009 5:55 pm
Hodmandod I heart it! But, I don't get the line about the man with te spinning cane. What's that mean? uhm... not sure... i needed something that rhymed with "champagne" XDD
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Posted: Mon Feb 16, 2009 9:09 pm
This is freaking awesome. hehehe
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Posted: Fri Mar 20, 2009 11:58 pm
imapumpkinwhee Hodmandod I heart it! But, I don't get the line about the man with te spinning cane. What's that mean? uhm... not sure... i needed something that rhymed with "champagne" XDD It could mean he was spinning a cane. If by cane you mean those sticks ppl use to help them walk, then yes, a cane being spun by a zombie. xD By the way, this can so become lyrcis for an alternative or electric song! Kind of like "Creepshow" by Kerli. (listen and you'll see.) or "Ricochet" by Shiny Toy Guns. Edit: Oh and I can also imagine zombies dancing in the background, just like the Thriller music video by Michael Jackson. (You know the one. ~_o)
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Posted: Sat Mar 21, 2009 10:41 pm
While I'm usually an advocate for poetry that doesn't rhyme, the beat of what you've written gives a really festive tone to the piece. It's like that demonic music that you hear while near a merry-go-round. rofl
It's an interesting and imaginative concept, but I'm wondering what the ending will be. Did you have a general idea of what you wanted to say, or were you just writing to express what you were feeling?
-Da Scribe
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Posted: Wed Apr 22, 2009 5:52 pm
Hehe that's so cool. Is this a private party or can anyone join?? Lol. I wanna be a zombie too!
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Posted: Wed Apr 22, 2009 7:34 pm
imapumpkinwhee Hodmandod I heart it! But, I don't get the line about the man with te spinning cane. What's that mean? uhm... not sure... i needed something that rhymed with "champagne" XDD
"you have now entered the party, welcome to our domain"
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Posted: Wed May 06, 2009 1:15 pm
Well...
the man with the spinning cane could be taken as the impersonation of Thanatos/Death( though it would be a bit jaded)...
Just thinking.
Good job.
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Posted: Sat May 09, 2009 9:33 pm
ooh! it was amazing ^^ ...............
u should check out a few of my poems in my Journal =P.....
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