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 Posted: Tue Nov 11, 2008 1:06 pm
Part One:
They tell us to go
On with the flow
With this world that turns
Against our spirits that burn
The earth trembles with rage
As it gazes at the moon just out of range
Simmering silver moon light basking us
Ungrateful eyes ignore it's trust
Lunar crested night sky
A perfect jewel just placed too high
For the reach of greedy human hands
Walking around with their brands
With the flow the human cattle roam
Following some kind of tome
A confused soul feeling out of place
Refusing to take part in this race
Part Two:
With rusty emerald eyes
He fallows the swan that flies
It move with such grace
The confusion leaves without a trace
The target of past sins
Like a doll filled with pins
Hoping for redemption to be granted
A requiem is being chanted
By the ghost of his past singing
Their haunting voices ringing
Through the the night's foggy air
Long awaited Justice is drawn from her lair
In it's Zenith the moon sits
The swan glides along the night sky it lit
Those rusty emerald eyes watch the army
Justice and the ghostly chorus march in harmony
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Posted: Tue Nov 11, 2008 3:35 pm
very odd waffles... good but odd... oh and you might want to change hight to high...
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Posted: Tue Nov 11, 2008 3:57 pm
@$#%! spelling errors! scream
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Posted: Tue Nov 11, 2008 8:14 pm
Don't worry bout spelling errors, if you truly enjoy poetry: spelling errors are nothing to worry about. Another great poem, cant wait for #2!
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Posted: Thu Nov 13, 2008 8:40 pm
Ladies and gentalmen may I present part two!
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Posted: Fri Nov 14, 2008 3:34 pm
good... not my style, but still good...
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Posted: Sat Nov 15, 2008 10:33 pm
I enjoyed it quite well! One of my faves by you!
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