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Posted: Sat Nov 08, 2008 9:31 am

This drawing is kind of old, but I really like how it turned out and I wanted to see if there was anyway to improve on it. o3o

http://onehappystar.deviantart.com/art/Happy-Halloween-Witch-8D-102310578

What I already know of is that the right hand doesn't look like it's holding onto the broom, and the left hand kind of looks too small XD;; Or something, it still looks odd 8D;;

I like everything else, though. Not sure if it's correct. P:

Critique pleaassee!<3

Posted: Sat Nov 08, 2008 9:30 pm

More favs than my DA.. >.<'

Anyways, the hands/fingers.
Left hand: Doesn't looks right. Here are some thoughts when i looked at it.
1. Spaced out.
2. The thumb should not be a finger... move it down and more L like.
3. the broom.... is it her fingers only holding it? If so.. change the position of the hand... maybe having the broom sit on her palm. (like blowing a kiss).

The broom. .... due to point of view.. seems like she is receiving the broom from someone.

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Posted: Sun Nov 09, 2008 11:52 am

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More favs than my DA.. >.<'

Anyways, the hands/fingers.
Left hand: Doesn't looks right. Here are some thoughts when i looked at it.
1. Spaced out.
2. The thumb should not be a finger... move it down and more L like.
3. the broom.... is it her fingers only holding it? If so.. change the position of the hand... maybe having the broom sit on her palm. (like blowing a kiss).

The broom. .... due to point of view.. seems like she is receiving the broom from someone.

Ahh~ Thank you for your wondeful critique! ^^

Pfftt, it's probably because I draw fanart XD;; Don't worry, you'll get there someday!<3 C: I started out with like 2 faves, too XD~

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