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miidasu

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Posted: Fri Nov 07, 2008 9:40 pm

Hello fellow Gaian writers!

I recently decided to create a series in this very guild, in fact in the Story Boards section! This is the response thread to that story. So please feel free to give me any advice, thoughts, criticisms.

If you'd also like advice, thoughts, or criticisms on your stories, feel free to ask me! I am a pretty thorough critic, though. Just a warning...

You can find the story here ----> Untitled So Far

To Forum Moderators: If this is sort of against the rules, please feel free to delete this thread. But also please let me know. I read the rules in the Story Board, and although it said on one of the later posts that Chapters can be either posted in one topic with comments in between, or in separate topics, it also said you can have it edited in the Muse Forum. Thus I put this here.

Okays, that's all I have to say.

Posted: Mon Nov 10, 2008 5:45 am

This is fine where it is dear.

I've read Chap. 1 and I must say, nicely begun. I look forward to more of the story. One grammatical correction to make in the 1st paragraph:

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Two years earlier, a person simply drove from one city to another, perhaps running into a scarce toll booths.

'booths' should be singular in this sentence and not plural. If you want it to be plural, then don't put the 'a' in front of scarce.

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miidasu

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Posted: Mon Nov 10, 2008 1:21 pm

Shanra the Dragon Bard

This is fine where it is dear.

I've read Chap. 1 and I must say, nicely begun. I look forward to more of the story. One grammatical correction to make in the 1st paragraph:

Quote:

Two years earlier, a person simply drove from one city to another, perhaps running into a scarce toll booths.

'booths' should be singular in this sentence and not plural. If you want it to be plural, then don't put the 'a' in front of scarce.

Aha! Thank you very much. Hopefully Chapter 2 will be up this weekend. Anywho, I will go change that right now.

Thanks again.

Edit: Is anyone else noticing that the code for quoting isn't working...

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