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 Posted: Thu Nov 06, 2008 8:58 pm
The sun rises to greet a new day
Welcoming earths creatures to a new adventure
Great and small they arise
To greet the beaming sun
Today the storm clouds gather
Bringing misery to the creatures
Rain strikes the earth's surface
Showing no mercy
A creature basking
In the sun's angry tears
Watches his life complicate
An enigma indeed
A friend show their true colors
Insulting him in spite
Numb to this he is
But effected all the same
Childhood seems like a dead memory
As if it belonged to someone else
Feeling his life, or his spirit, pouring out
An eager soul slows to a stop
Happy memories from a box
An excape from his past grief
The family is dying
He struggles to revive it before it's too late
Worried for himself
Trying to keep himself
Not giving in
The fight to stay alive
Confusian sets in
Leading to panic
Sadness grips his heart
He just stares to the heavens
Not for an answer
Although it would be nice
But to dream of a life long past
Of a life greeted by the warm elated sun.
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Posted: Fri Nov 07, 2008 3:54 am
very good waffles... i wouldnt expect something like this from you...
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Posted: Sat Nov 08, 2008 10:29 pm
That's me, doing the unexpected.
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Posted: Sat Nov 08, 2008 10:43 pm
Wow it was amazing. I loved the scenic wording... at least for me it painted images in my head while I read it. I think you are one of those people who's poetry plays music while someone is reading it. That sounds funny but it always feels like there's some type of tribal/nature music playing while I read your work.
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Posted: Sat Nov 08, 2008 11:00 pm
@Lunar
I love that kind of music, thank you!
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