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Lady Mist

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PostPosted: Fri Oct 31, 2008 10:55 pm


Is her occupation applicable?
Is her family appropriate for what she does?
What other things should I address?
Anything I can improve on?
Other tips/advice/critique/etc would be appreciated <3

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Name: Beri'ah
Family: Luminista
Gender: Female
Stage: Apprentice

Seller of: Magic fireflies. It is said that the life of a firefly is blessed with good light and cursed by midnight. Most die within just a few days of their birth, however a select few are found to have surprisingly long lives spanning several years. Beri'ah trains her eyes to see the magic that surrounds them, collecting them and selling or bartering them in ornate lamps to show them off. She feeds them a special nectar that she teaches her customers to make. The lamps are expensive due to the time it takes to collect the right fireflies, but they are reliable as the insects shine every night for up to ten years given the right care.

Eyes: Golden, inquisitive in appearance.
Horns: Smooth, slightly angled back, with thin etchings near the tips.
Hairstyle: Beri'ah's hair is a light, pale strawberry blonde, looking pink in the right light. She has long hair that she usually lets down, though she pulls the sides back using ornate clips that sometimes has a tassle or other dangling bits.

Personality: Beri'ah varies in attitude depending on the circumstances. She may be cheerful and energetic, laid back, opinionated, or serene and philosophical. The remaining constant, however, is that she is optimistic and honest. She loves life itself and loves what she does, though some may interpret her straight forward attitude as being pushy. While Beri'ah works with fireflies because she feels entranced by the creatures, she also is a bit of an obsessive penny pincher. She would be the kind to lock herself in a closet and laugh out loud over a pile of goods. While it is due to greed on some level, for the most part it acts as evidence to her work. She wants her fireflies to spread light to others, and her mind connects money earned as proof of her success in that goal. Despite her eccentric personality, Beri'ah is loyal to those she befriends given the right amount of time.

Due to the overlying fued with Veduni, however, Beri'ah has adopted a more defensive attitude when meeting new people. If she feels she is under attack or scrutiny, she tends to either clamp up or have an outburst of opinions depending on the situation. While she may act irrational at times, Beri'ah isn't one for holding grudges so it often passes over quickly.

Position/Expression: A hand slightly up towards a few floating lights, a small (but not shy) smile. Or take artistic license with it.

Outfit: Although Beri'ah's hair is pale and her skin less sun kissed due to working at night, she prefers wearing richer colors to act as a contrast. She enjoys intricate details, as well as trying to keep up with the fashion of the time.

Items?: As Beri'ah works with fireflies, she would likely be seen with them or at least with a lamp or case in which to catch them in. You never know when you might come across one, so she figures better safe than sorry.

Etc: While selling lamps themselves creates a lot of profit, the number she sells often varies and has a lot of time between each sale. Essentially, this means that Beri'ah is wealthy all at once, but lives "paycheck by paycheck" and hopes that it will hold over until the next sale.

References: If applicable. Can find some on request, but for the most part I like to trust in the artist's judgement <3
PostPosted: Sat Nov 01, 2008 1:05 am


While there is nothing wrong with her concept, I'm going to caution you against using that vocation as its reallyyy close to twilla (who is my girl, the one with the lantern?) i havent released any info on the ones taken and I really should have, so thats completely my fault.

So far, we have:

Mizenya, Corporeal Dreams
Twilla, Arcane Witchlight (which i had described as being colourful, ever burning lights)
Kiaran, heady scents
Alix, seller of histories
and rajas, who i cant remember the name of, who tell stories with smoke and incense

(and just a second little thing, she's really pretty and something that i would totally love to draw so please don't feel discouraged; i mean, you chose something i already chose for myself so you're definitely on the right track)

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Lady Mist

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PostPosted: Sun Nov 02, 2008 4:52 pm


Ho'kay, round two!

I don't know if her occupation will work as they may use magic or some other means of long distance communication/gift sending/etc, but thought it'd be interesting to give it a try.

Again, any and all critiques welcome.


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Name: Beri'ah
Family: Thetana
Gender: Female
Stage: Apprentice

Seller of: Mail delivery. Beri'ah is training to work at the 'post office' of the caravan, working with unique birds to deliver letters. A message is written on a scroll and placed in a tube which is loosely tied to one ankle, though the bird would grip it with both feet unless landing. Using light weight stones, Beri'ah is able to train the birds to 'read' a rock to find its land of origin. In the bird's mouth she would set the rock of the bird's destination, while on the other ankle would be a small pouch for the stone of where the bird is coming from so that whoever receives the bird can send it back to her.

She always keeps the multitude of stones organized in neat containers, constantly updating a myriad of maps as they travel and training birds to read the rocks. The birds can fly for days without rest, though they require special attention by means of food when they do land. For delivery within the caravan itself, Beri'ah uses either regular birds with a charm to specific carts or she runs it herself if it's close enough.

Eyes: Sharp blue eyes, serious in nature.
Horns: A little closer to the side of the head than the top, the horns arch slightly back, but then bend more downwards with etchings near the tips.
Hairstyle: With a natural part down the middle, Beri'ah keeps her long hair in two long wraps that usually hang down the front with her bangs framing her face. She may tie little ornaments at the end of the wraps to help tie them off.

Personality: Beri'ah doesn't joke around when it comes to what she does, leading some to believe she is a bit temperamental. Despite her sometimes sharp demeanor, Beri'ah is almost always neutral when it comes to arguments or decisions. Due to respecting the privacy of letters she deals with, Beri'ah has taken to a "mind your own business" view of relationships. That isn't to say that she's unfriendly or bitter, but many may find getting to know her feels a bit tense at first.

Position/Expression: One arm up, releasing a messenger bird. Her manner is calm and composed, and her face is serious.
Outfit: Beri'ah tries to keep a professional appearance, so her clothes tend to look like a more subdued version of whatever is fashionable.
Items?: A gauntlet on just her left arm, which she uses to let birds perch on while her right hand is free to work with any other intricacies.

Etc: The physical appearance of the birds is unique in that their wings are akin to that of a butterfly's. While it's still of feather, it looks like there are four wings with the back two wings being smaller than the front. The tail isn't as prominent, being rather narrow, but it is long. Most of them are white, but there are some browns and greys.

References: http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v244/lady_mist/bermailref.jpg Again, artistic freedom with clothes or even with a hairstyle change. I couldn't decide what hair color would suit her o.o;
PostPosted: Mon Nov 03, 2008 12:06 pm


I hadn't even thought about how they communicated but it sounds good to me!

Concept is go!

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