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 Posted: Sun Oct 26, 2008 10:09 pm
I believe that the wheels are turning
But the driver is dead and rotting
The pulse of the heart a thousand flies
The gazing eyes are mocking me
A cog long forgotten but it still insists on spinning
Claustrophobia rocks the soul but the flames they keep on burning
I'm sinking in an ocean of calamity
Its will to be what it used to be
It's not difficult what's plain for eyes to see
The shadow bent on killing me
And I know the wind is blowing
But the leaves they keep from rolling
What's the racket my brain is makin
When the levees breakin who can say
And if the prize is love eternal
Then infernal fire's what i'm in rowing
I'm sinking in an ocean of calamity
Its will to be what it used to be
It's not difficult what's plain for eyes to see
The shadow bent on killing me
And I listen anyway..
Growing up is hard sometimes
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Posted: Fri Dec 19, 2008 7:46 am
I've come in and read this three or four times now, never making it to the end (gotta love having a two year old), but I finally got through it today!! Yaaaaay!!
I like the imagery you used, very vivid. I got a little lost half way through it, my brain kind of forgot what it was doing, so I had to backtrack a lot, but I do really like the style.
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Posted: Wed Dec 24, 2008 12:14 pm
hehe thanks; I guess the sorta lost feeling is kinda what I was going for xd
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Posted: Fri Mar 20, 2009 10:09 pm
Amazing man!
I didn't know you were such a poet!
I kinda got lost in the middle too... had to backtrack a little bit!
Very good imagery!
It's amazing!
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Posted: Tue Jul 21, 2009 1:31 pm
evilkillermonkeyman5000 Amazing man! I didn't know you were such a poet! I kinda got lost in the middle too... had to backtrack a little bit! Very good imagery! It's amazing! Yeah man.. you should post some of your pimp stories in here lol.
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Posted: Thu Jul 23, 2009 8:55 pm
Heh. Deep and well written. Congrats.
Extra points for the Monty Python reference!
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