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So yeah, my book is untitled, but I am leaning towards the Savior. It is going to have a twist to it. Here is my work so far. If anyone is seriously interested in criticising my work throughout its progress, Pm me and we can talk. I hate posting it in public, but my friends aren't very good critics... Sadly. We joke about that a lot, so don't get me wrong if you think I'm insulting them.

The Savior (Tell me if you have any better ideas)
By,
Unnamed. (DUN DUUUUN!!)

Prologue

My eyes slid open, gazing into the dark room. The usual cold chill of the early winter emitted from the cold air. I let out a faint yawn, and swung my feet over the bedside. I reached over to my nightstand, and grabbed a flashlight. I clicked it on. I walked slowly and faintly into the closet, to grab my uniform for school.

Hello, my name is Kai Windenston. I am in 9th grade, class 1, of shaft 4. I am 15 years of age. I was born in December of 1339. I am 5 foot 3, and my hobbies include reading and writing. I was always the boring kid, the class weirdo, the one no one would care to lose.

For years my types, humans, have lived in concrete shafts, which led throughout the valley, in protection of the beast. No one truly knows what the beast is, but we know that they are dangerous.

If you ever get close enough to set eyes on a beast, you will not be able to set eyes on anything else. Its gaze turns you to stone. It can fly at speeds faster than technology is suspected ever to allow us. Its fangs are drenched with poison, killing anything interesting.

It all happened when I became a little too unlucky, and stumbled across one of these. A dragon attacked one of our concrete shafts, and it trapped us in. It stared at me like I was going to kill it. Only one of my friends and I made it out alive. We decided to go see the creatures, but we have no idea why.

My name is Kai Windenston. This is my story.




Chapter 1
The Thing

Kai’s eyes slid open, gazing into the dark room. The usual cold chill of the early winter emitted. He let out a faint yawn, and swung his feet over the bedside. He reached for my nightstand, and grabbed a flashlight. Kai clicked it on. As his heel popped, he walked slowly and faintly into the closet, to grab his uniform for school.
Kai sighed as he brushed his hands against the cold wood, and strolled into the kitchen, where no one was there. As usual, he ate my bowl of oatmeal, lots of honey, pinch of cinnamon. He was usually gone before anyone came outside, due to his harsh school.
Out of boredom, Kai started to enjoy the quaint view of the living room. He did this as he did every morning, mainly out of pure boredom. And again, as usual, he would question himself as ‘was that cupboard there before?’ and ‘Since when did we have a TV?’
Kai popped his knuckles, one by one, and did not dare to turn on the lights. It was morning, and if he woke his parents, they would throw a fit. Kai grabbed his iPod and pressed the ‘play’ button, as one of the classic music pieces started to play, as few as there were.
Kai pulled open the door, shut it, which lead to a mini-hallway. At the end of the hallway was a completely concrete doorway with a submarine-typed latch to open. He turned it as it squeaked, stressing his mouth as he dragged it open, and shutting it behind him and turning the latch tightly. He approached the small group that greeted him every morning, waiting for the trolley to take them to school.
“I’m sure that you will some day.” Kai overheard Jessica, a friend from his class say as he approached them. “Hey, Kai,” She greeted, her sweet voice filling his mind. Before Kai could greet her back, the hanging trolley pulled up.
It was decorated with a yellow base color and blue stripes across the middle, and Kai let the usual rush of cold air blow his slightly long hair. Kai allowed Jessica to climb in first, then him second, and the other three people last. He plopped down next to her towards the middle of the trolley.
“Hey, do you think I can have a look at the Algebra homework? I couldn’t get the last questions.” He asked. Kai loved the fact that she was too fidgety to ask why he didn’t do it.
“I can’t keep letting you look off my work forever, you know.”
“I know. You think that I don’t even try. Of course I do.” Of course he didn’t. He had no particular interest in Algebra. The only time he would need to know anything with numbers in his career would be with how much money he would sell his books for. Jessica gave in easily. She unzipped her binder as the trolley slowed to another stop.
Kai mumbled the answers silently, which helped him focus. He found it a little hard to figure out what day today is, and he wondered why Jessica was so tense. She was fidgety for an unknown reason, more than usual. He handed back the homework to her. Finally, the trolley slid to a final stop as everyone shot up from their seats. He sat up, let Jessica out, and let the traffic pull him to his class.
The usual neat room, wooden floor, and tiled ceiling greeted him into the hallway. “I wonder what Mr. Ballenger will teach us today. I have to admit, World Studies is my favorite class. He keeps it interesting enough.” He sighed. He knew he still only started school a few weeks ago, and was just now starting to judge everything. Kai headed to the classroom, the door open. The warmth let him to ease, he liked it warm.
He picked his seat, leaving a spot open for Jessica, and Sophie already waiting for them. She was staring at one of the pictures that Mr. Ballenger had put up, a new one. She was admiring the golden notes flying above an angle playing the piano on a cloud. It was one of the best pictures he has seen. Every day Mr. Ballenger puts up a new picture, and they are always his favorite.
His second favorite was one of a mythical creature called a phoenix. It was a bird with the best qualities you can think of.
“Class, take your seats, the day has begun.” Mr. Ballenger stated as he set down his bag next to his desk in the corner. He had straight hair pointing forward towards his forehead and his face always reminded Kai of someone he would see in the military movies. “Today we will review our previous section, technology. Who created the very first working electric current and when, Ace?” A small and skinny boy stood up, shortest of the class. He hesitated.
“Um… Was it Plist Interidge in the 1330’s?” Ballenger nodded, as Ace sat down. “Now, I suggest that all your studying has paid off about Plist? I shall now start the day with, drum roll, a pop quiz!” Half the class moaned, and Jessica let a small gasp of happiness, ready to prove her wits. “Ace, please pass these out, thank you for volunteering.”
Ace sat up, not saying a word in protest of not volunteering at all, and gave out five papers per row. Kai grabbed it hastily, noticing that Jessica had already started. The questions were hard. Why didn’t he study last night? He could have easily made up his 60 pages from reading yesterday. How does he know, or care, about his five inventions of the decade? He doesn’t care.
Sophie had obviously seen his struggling, because she gave a small chuckle, only loud enough for him to hear. Kai bubbled in the answers, not having a clue what he was doing. He stood up, handed in his paper, ignoring Mr. Ballenger’s disapproval face, and sat down, shame filling his mind. He hated doing that, especially when he was the first one in the class to turn in a paper for ten minutes.
When every paper was handed in, Mr. Ballenger turned out the lights, and readied a projector. “Now, let’s talk a little more about history. Who here has seen the sun before?” No one raised their hands.
“Does anyone know why?” Again, no one raised their hands. Then, Edward, three seats from here raised his hand. “Yes, Edward?”
“Are we prisoners?” He asked with no hesitation. He had the wildest mind, but Kai didn’t know whether to laugh or remain silent, and apparently, no one else did, because there was an awkward moment within the room.
“Well, it may seem this way. Who here has heard of any tales of why we are trapped down here?” No one raised their hands.
“Ever since the beginning of humanity, we have been terrorized by a creature. A creature so vile, that we have no way of fighting it back. We do not know anything about this creature, but there are rumors. There are rumors that it has demon horns on its head. Rumors that its claws are sharpened with diamond, rumors that allow it to fly, rumors that gives it six limbs, rumors that it is taller than an elephant.
“There are no true rumors, they are rumors. We may not know anything for sure about it, just that it exists. We have been living in fear, most of you not even knowing it. Earlier colonies hid in caves, surrounding them with rocks. Religions gave it sacrifices of humans. They gave it jewelry. Many claim to have seen it, but it is unlikely. An artist who has claimed to see it before in the first millennium painted this.”
He put down a picture with a beast with a long neck, gigantic wings, extremely long claws that shined like diamond, and a necklace of skulls. The whole animal was covered in a shiny texture that seemed like a snake, but in some way, not. Kai guessed the artist tried to exaggerate a bit. No one flinched or moved.
Then Edward said, “So that’s it? If this thing is real, why don’t we attack it? It’s like we are prisoners after all. Why does this thing attack us anyway?”
“Well, this thing is more than it seems. No one knows the details. We just know how to avoid it.”
“Then why not fight?”
“No details.”
“Why not get details?”
“No one will survive if they approach it.”
“I thought you said you had no details?”
“We know we have to avoid it. Any more questions, Mr. Edward?” He asked sternly, which practically meant to shut up.
“No.” He sat down. Kai didn’t notice he stood up in a protestant argument. He didn’t know why, but he just had to raise his hand for a question, as he felt the class’ eyes lay on him, which seemed to burn through his body. “Yes, Kai?”
“How come we have never heard of this monster before? I mean, I have heard people saying ‘It’s coming’, and I never bothered to ask.” He asked, and once he said it, it sounded foolish.
“Because you were just children when you were younger than you are now. No one wants children to know that we are constantly being terrorized by an unknown beast. It’s unanimous.” Mr. Ballenger scratched the back of his head.
“How do we even know that there is a beast, then? I’ve never seen any terrorization. How do we know that you aren’t lying?” Sophie asked, after raising her hand.
“You have to decide for yourself if I’m lying or not. Can you think of any other explanation for not smelling fresh air? Technology can keep us alive, even if we have a major power outage for more than six years. We have no need to go outside anyways. Everything we need is in these shafts we live in. Our protection is almost invincible. There is no way anything can penetrate us.”
“If that’s the case,” Sophie went on, “Why don’t we fight back?”
“Technology is not great enough. There was a party sent outside to attack the beast, but one came back, minutes from death, saying that their bullets simply bounced off the creature. There is peace this way, no death.”
“Then what is the point of living?” It seemed like the whole class was picking an argument with Mr. Ballenger. Kai somehow just wanted it to end. He wanted to go home. To absorb that it was just some… some thing that has been terrorizing them. He found it hard to believe that they couldn’t kill it.
“To live, of course.”
“I meant to its full extent.”
“Come on now, Sophie. Is nothing enough for you?”
Kai tuned out the class argument, occasionally hearing “kill it” or “it can’t be that bad” and “why is it such a big deal?” It, it, it. That was all he heard, and he was tired of it. Jessica had passed a note to him, and she was nudging him about it. He hardly realized that there was a note at all.
Grabbing it and unfolding it, with her impatience sending shivers down his spine, he read the words, ‘You can’t be serious. I mean, do you actually believe all of this? I think he is lying.’ I quickly wrote back, ‘What did you do this weekend?’ He didn’t want to talk about this. He folded the note sloppily and tossed it back to her, Ace now raising his hand to ask another debating question.
Jessica looked at him like he was some sort of idiot. She quickly wrote back, ‘Stay on topic.’
‘I’m bored of this subject.’
‘Why?’
‘Why do I care that we are down here? We are here now, that’s all that matters.’
It took a minute for Jessica to absorb what he was saying. ‘What if we find a way to defeat this thing? We would be honored!’ Kai couldn’t help but let out a chuckle as Ace raised his voice to the teacher as Mr. Ballenger threatened for a detention.
‘And we would find a way to kill it, how?’
‘What if?’
‘What if what?’
‘What if we came out with a way to kill it?’
‘Then we would find a way to kill it.’
‘I’m serious.’
‘I’m not.’
Jessica sighed, giving up, as the bell rang. Kai concluded that Mr. Ballenger had given out two detentions, one to Ace, and another to Samantha, from raising their voices at the teacher. Kai grabbed his things quickly, hoping that Jessica wouldn’t catch up to talk to him. She did, of course. “Why won’t you think about this logically?” She interrogated.
“What do you mean? Besides, why does this even matter? We are perfectly fine here. No deaths. Mr. Ballenger is right. We don’t need the outside world. If you feel like you need to save the world, go ahead. Good luck in the process too.”
He suspected his voice was too stern, as her face went red in anger. Kai never understood that feature in her.
“Well, you won’t get any of the shares of my money when I defeat it.”
“What money? You think you will become leader of the world or something? I don’t understand you sometimes. Your 15. What do you expect to get out of this? Who cares, anyways? It’s not like the beast is going to come in and trap us in these concrete shafts, trapping us like rodents in holes.” He was surprised how detailed he went.


If you don't know what the beast is, thats good. I do not plan to tell anyone throughout the book. Only the people who decide to dedicate themselves to criticizing get to figure it out!!! xD I will not post any more than this, for copyright reasons and for the fear of them.

:'D And I'm going to go back and edit it later, so maybe finish it first. I keep trying to write lately, but my friend is depressed, and thats making me depressed. :'( So I can't write much.