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 Posted: Fri Oct 03, 2008 8:59 pm
We walk on the beach
hands embraced
with the wet sand going between our toes
suddenly I'm pulled into hug
we cling to each other
our hearts beating as one
with the tide splashing
the gulls singing the requiem of our final meet
and the sound of the shaking leaves
as the trees dance with each other
For when I awake from this dream
I will not know you face
our memories
or the love we shared
all I'll know is when my eyes open
I'll regret waking from my blissful slumber
and for a reason I'll never know
I want to return to you my dream
for you are my perfect dream.
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Posted: Sat Oct 04, 2008 4:35 pm
I liked the romance aspect of it a lot. Its worded well but I think it could have been revised a bit, there were a few cliche lines (hand in hand). Other wise I liked it.
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Posted: Thu Nov 13, 2008 8:58 pm
I should have done this a while ago, but I edited this one. What do you think?
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Posted: Fri Nov 14, 2008 3:32 pm
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