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Drowningwaters

PostPosted: Wed Sep 24, 2008 8:54 am


Something in this drawing really bugs me, I just can't figure out what.
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PostPosted: Wed Sep 24, 2008 11:20 pm


I feel like he's leaning forward too much. Especially since his head is perfectly horizontal, it makes the pose look a little unnatural and uncomfortable.

I would either: make his body more upright or tilt his head downwards, or both. But seeing as the picture is "staring off" I'm assuming you want to keep his head up.


There's also something bothering me about the arm furthest away from us. But I'm not quite sure how to fix it. It's a good start to the pic though~ Good luck with finishing it. ^^

Sorry for not being much help. @__@



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Drowningwaters

PostPosted: Sun Sep 28, 2008 9:47 pm


the legs are what bug me the most. can't figure out how to fix them.
PostPosted: Tue Jul 14, 2009 12:28 am


Drowningwaters
the legs are what bug me the most. can't figure out how to fix them.

Same. I don't know why.
I can't figure out how to fix them with a redline..
But the thigh looks too.. side on.
Which would be fine, but, from the knee to the foot of that leg, it looks a little.. crooked.
Or maybe its just the foot..

Sorry.. not very helpful, am I?
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PostPosted: Wed Jul 22, 2009 9:21 pm


hopefully you're able to make sense of my chicken scratch lines ^^;

Basically what I noticed was the legs and weight distribution. The legs needed to be the same length, although keeping perspective in mind, the leg furthest would seem a lil smaller, but not by much since your picture is side on and doesn't have too much depth. The weight would be mostly on the arm on the ground, and therefore the pic should show this. The angle his torso is on would be too forward for this and would require his other arm to be around his knee almost. However if you move his torso back a lil, he can easily be resting it on his knee ^^ also keep perspective in mind here (I've exaggerated it too much on the lines though so it looks a lil retarded *shot*

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But anyways, hope that helps a lil ^^ If all else fails, just try drawing through and getting everything to look right first, then erase the parts you don't want ^^
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