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 Posted: Thu Sep 18, 2008 10:23 pm
Memories of you linger like smoke in the air
Though I've tried to forget you
They chase me down these empty hallways
In this house we used to call a home
Now it's just four walls
Closing in on me
Now it's just me
And your ghost that haunts it
And my heart cries
As I realize you'll never come back to me
And my heart hurts
As the loss of you tears through me again
And my heart cries
I try to air your memory out
I open all the windows
But the wind just blows your pictures around
As I chase to capture them
Now I'm sitting on the floor
Too tired to cry anymore
Too tired to try anymore
Still each day I miss you even more
And my heart cries
Knowing you're with someone new
And my heart hurts
Knowing you don't even think of of me
And my heart cries
There are some days
I'd awake
Thinking I'll see your face
But when I turn around
All I'd see is empty space
And my heart cries
Though my eyes are dry
And my heart hurts
Though I've learned to laugh to cover it
And my heart cries
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Posted: Fri Oct 10, 2008 3:24 pm
i think your poem might flow better if you add punctuation, like periods and commas, ect... but other than that, it's not bad.
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Posted: Fri Dec 05, 2008 7:29 pm
Thanks, but I guess I've been writing my poems this way for far too long to change my old habit... lol...
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Posted: Fri Dec 05, 2008 7:37 pm
oh, yea, n the way I intend the poem to be read is to pause after each line
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