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Grima Robin

PostPosted: Thu Sep 18, 2008 6:31 pm


Below is a 3 Page Essay for Critical Reading & Response. It's due tomorrow. Any thoughts?




Older Soren 9/18/08
Monster Mania Assignment #1


If I could be any monster for a day, I would be a vampire. I wouldn’t sparkle in the sun, but I would be a fierce hunter. I’d be stunning and fast, and I’d drink blood to survive. Vampires are the perfect beings, perhaps a bit tainted by the media, but a lesser known monster makes for less material. A Sphinx or a Gorgon were two ideas I entertained, but I only have so much I can say about them before I run out of ideas. With vampires, I have more than enough to say. I’ll be writing about vampires as I see them, not by any specific depiction.

Vampires are depicted in many variations throughout literature and cinema. Some say that vamps turn to dust in the sunlight, others that they sparkle, and still others that the sun affects them in no way at all. Personally, I don’t believe that the sun is of any consequence to a vampire. Perhaps it may be a minor annoyance, but nothing more. I think that as a vampire, I’d just be more susceptible to sunburn. Vampires are all very strong and beautiful creatures, lithe and muscular. Their reflexes are perfect, as their muscles are so powerful and their joints so flexible, that they can move their bodies much quicker than a human thanks to their immense strength. This of course leads to a vampire’s overall speed. They would be much faster sprinters than humans, though long distance may be hard due to breathing problems. These well developed muscles would be able to withstand a lot of outside pressure, and would even prolong a vampire’s healthy lifespan, creating the illusion of immortality. A pureblood, natural born vampire, known as Laemya, has the ability to stop the aging process at the physical state of their choosing. They may resume the aging process at will, but their body will quickly catch up to their true age and deteriorate, resulting in a hastened death. Their hearing is much more keen than that of a human. A vampire can hear noises clearly before a human can. Footsteps or heartbeats are much louder to a vampire’s ears, and even frequencies outside of the human range can be heard by a vampire. Impeccable eyesight is a given. Distances would be sharp and clear, objects viewed close up would be much more detailed, darkness, or poor light wouldn’t hinder a vampire’s sight in the least. The mind is much more developed, along with the muscles, and so more often than not, a vampire will have some form of psychic ability. Telepathy, telekinesis, precognition, empathic abilities, and more are all possibilities for an average vampire. If I were one of them, I would most likely possess an empathic power. With such a power, I would be able to perceive the moods of those around me, get some gist of what they’re thinking, see auras, and more.

There are downsides to everything. Even vampires have their weaknesses. The dependence on blood, for one thing, would be a bit of a nuisance. In this case, blood isn’t food or drink, though it is a form of nourishment. Drinking blood is necessary for a vampire because their blood lacks hemoglobin required to carry oxygen. They don’t feel hunger or thirst so much as suffocation. Because of this, many vampires suffer lung-related illnesses such as asthma. The only unavoidable outside factor that may bother a vampire would be a very bright light, such as the sun. Still only irritating to a vampire, it may bother their eyes and perhaps lead to a bad burn. There is also wood to consider. Most types of wood, or other plant related materials, carry toxins that are poisonous to a vampire. Being stabbed with a wooden stake would certainly harm a vamp, and even a minor nuisance such as a splinter could lead to a serious infection thanks to these toxins. Fire can burn a vampire, and loss of blood, in excess, can cause death, as can suffocation or drowning. Vampires are not immortal, even given the gift of a long life. They can still die.

A day as a vampire would not be enough for me. I would want to remain that perfect being. I suppose it’s only natural that a person would want to be perfect like that, but I can’t imagine getting such a small taste and having to give it up. In one day, the most I could do is stun people with my incredible powers. But a taste is better than nothing at all. I would run that day. I would run so fast that it would feel like I was flying. I would use my powers as an empath to understand just how my friends feel and what they think about me. More than anything, I would probably use my powers for revenge. I would be so stealthy, so subtle, that no one would ever know I had done it. I would truly become a monster if I had that much power.

Vampires are often seen as grotesque, evil creatures. They suck blood and steal the life-forces of others. In this sense, I suppose they may be considered pathetic by some standards. The fact is, vampires do not have to kill to survive. A bite alone will not change a victim. Hypnosis can make a victim forget. Vampires that are cautious and in control of themselves are harmless. They are beautiful and far from pathetic, and I would give nearly anything to be something so flawless, even for only a day.
PostPosted: Thu Sep 18, 2008 9:30 pm


*forces internal editor to not shoot you for using 'I' and 'me.'*

Um . . . you are allowed to use those words, right? >.>;;

An introductory paragraph is supposed to be like a small preview of what you are going to discuss in an essay. If you put something in the introduction, it ought to be elaborated upon later on in the essay. I would not mention sphinxes or gorgons since they are irrelevant to your essay, in addition to the fact that you never mention them again.

Also, I don't know if you're allowed to use them or not, but generally, one should avoid using contractions at all cost in an essay. Unless of course, you are allowed to use them without penalty.

As for actual content, I find it very interesting to read your take on the answer to the question. I do like that you included the downsides to being a vampire, which shows to me that if you really did have the chance to become a vampire for a day, you would do so with the knowledge of both the good and the bad, and the acceptance of both.

Apologies if this is too picky. I am an English major, if that's any consolation. I wish you luck with the grading of this, at least.

Suisho Tomoe
Crew

Noble Guildswoman


Grima Robin

PostPosted: Thu Sep 18, 2008 11:16 pm


All of it is allowed, thankfully. I certainly would have written it differently if I were required to do so. We were told to make it personal and write informally. As for the Sphinxes and Gorgons, I just know my Professor would get a kick out of my considering them. The only thing I worry about with my writing is grammar and...Well, grammar not so much...I'm usally fine there. I just worry about it unecessarily. Spelling is an occasional problem, but not so much for myself as others, so I shouldn't complain. My real problem is that I tend to ramble. I'll lose sight of the topic, and sometimes I get pretty damn repetative. I really do try to work on that, however. I'm getting there, or so I like to think. Thanks for your critisism. I actually really appreciate the positive type. Anything that may lead to improvement is a good thing.

I'm a Liberal Studies Major, myself.
PostPosted: Fri Sep 19, 2008 12:03 pm


You didn't mention anywhere that as a Vampire, your hobbies include sneaking into girls' rooms and sucking their blood in their sleep sad

Saturnos


Aran34

PostPosted: Fri Sep 19, 2008 12:27 pm


If I were a monster then I'd be a Zombie.. If they count. Centaurs might not since there more creatures..
PostPosted: Fri Sep 19, 2008 6:51 pm


Dude. Interview With the Vampire and The Vampire Lestat. I'd definately be a vampire after reading those books.

BreezeLouise


Grima Robin

PostPosted: Fri Sep 19, 2008 7:01 pm


First off, I already have a girl who's blood I can suck when she's awake. [She'd let me, I mean] And I don't have to sneak.

As for Zombies, go for it! But seeing as I consider Gorgons and Sphinxes monsters, it's safe to assume that I,
at least, also consider centaurs as such.

Lastly, I hate Anne Rice. I think she's a stuck up b**** and her writing style is awful. It improved over time, but when she wrote those she had no clue. The ideas are all right, though. I liked the movie. [Note that I only liked Interview.]

PostPosted: Fri Sep 19, 2008 7:03 pm


Branded Tactician
First off, I already have a girl who's blood I can suck when she's awake. [She'd let me, I mean] And I don't have to sneak.

As for Zombies, go for it! But seeing as I consider Gorgons and Sphinxes monsters, it's safe to assume that I,
at least, also consider centaurs as such.

Lastly, I hate Anne Rice. I think she's a stuck up b**** and her writing style is awful. It improved over time, but when she wrote those she had no clue. The ideas are all right, though. I liked the movie. [Note that I only liked Interview.]


Yeah, well, YOUR MOM

Edit: It's my favorite movie of all time. I didn't know that there was more than one movie. I don't want to see the others. And I think The first two books were AMAZING (the ones I named), but they got worse and worse as she kept making new ones. I still enjoyed them, however.

BreezeLouise


Grima Robin

PostPosted: Fri Sep 19, 2008 7:16 pm


Master Yngwie
Branded Tactician
First off, I already have a girl who's blood I can suck when she's awake. [She'd let me, I mean] And I don't have to sneak.

As for Zombies, go for it! But seeing as I consider Gorgons and Sphinxes monsters, it's safe to assume that I,
at least, also consider centaurs as such.

Lastly, I hate Anne Rice. I think she's a stuck up b**** and her writing style is awful. It improved over time, but when she wrote those she had no clue. The ideas are all right, though. I liked the movie. [Note that I only liked Interview.]


Yeah, well, YOUR MOM

Edit: It's my favorite movie of all time. I didn't know that there was more than one movie. I don't want to see the others. And I think The first two books were AMAZING (the ones I named), but they got worse and worse as she kept making new ones. I still enjoyed them, however.


I haven't, and do not intend to read them. But I know some pretty well informed people who have told me what they thought. As I have been told, her technique improved as it went on, but I don't know about the story itself. The movie was excellent, but they came out with a second with Aaliya[sp?] as the Queen of Vamps. One word: LAME.
PostPosted: Fri Sep 19, 2008 7:19 pm


Branded Tactician
Master Yngwie
Branded Tactician
First off, I already have a girl who's blood I can suck when she's awake. [She'd let me, I mean] And I don't have to sneak.

As for Zombies, go for it! But seeing as I consider Gorgons and Sphinxes monsters, it's safe to assume that I,
at least, also consider centaurs as such.

Lastly, I hate Anne Rice. I think she's a stuck up b**** and her writing style is awful. It improved over time, but when she wrote those she had no clue. The ideas are all right, though. I liked the movie. [Note that I only liked Interview.]


Yeah, well, YOUR MOM

Edit: It's my favorite movie of all time. I didn't know that there was more than one movie. I don't want to see the others. And I think The first two books were AMAZING (the ones I named), but they got worse and worse as she kept making new ones. I still enjoyed them, however.


I haven't, and do not intend to read them. But I know some pretty well informed people who have told me what they thought. As I have been told, her technique improved as it went on, but I don't know about the story itself. The movie was excellent, but they came out with a second with Aaliya[sp?] as the Queen of Vamps. One word: LAME.

...You have to read it, THEN decide if you like it or not...
And yes. Queen of the Damned wasn't a great book either.

BreezeLouise


Grima Robin

PostPosted: Fri Sep 19, 2008 7:25 pm


I don't want to read her books. Period. I understand that I'm just being stubborn, but I can't stand her.
PostPosted: Fri Sep 19, 2008 7:37 pm


Branded Tactician
I don't want to read her books. Period. I understand that I'm just being stubborn, but I can't stand her.

Why not? As in, why can't you stand her?

BreezeLouise


Grima Robin

PostPosted: Fri Sep 19, 2008 7:45 pm


My real reason is rather petty. I just think she's stuck up and unapproachable. Why? ...because she doen't allow Fanfiction to be posted of her work. I wouldn't write any myself, but I'm quite certain many people would like to do so. Why would you tell Fanfiction.net not to allow it? Many series get more popular from fanfiction. It's...idiotic and...Ugh!
PostPosted: Fri Sep 19, 2008 7:53 pm


Branded Tactician
My real reason is rather petty. I just think she's stuck up and unapproachable. Why? ...because she doen't allow Fanfiction to be posted of her work. I wouldn't write any myself, but I'm quite certain many people would like to do so. Why would you tell Fanfiction.net not to allow it? Many series get more popular from fanfiction. It's...idiotic and...Ugh!

I see. I like a lot of cocky people. Take my namesake, Yngwie Malmsteen, for example. (I'm not trying to force you to read her stuff... Just a strong reccomendation)

BreezeLouise


Grima Robin

PostPosted: Fri Sep 19, 2008 8:30 pm


I could barely stand reading Twilight, and that was for my girlfriend. Thanks for the suggestion. I hope you don't take me as an arse for mot following it.
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