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Posted: Tue Sep 16, 2008 3:36 pm
So here is a story plot line i came up with today. Looking for comments, ideas. I'm still working on details, and little things. But here is what I've got. Most likely character sheet will be coming next, and they might explain more.
There is our world, and there is another, parallel world. No one is sure weather it is our future, or if it is just another universe all together. Agamon, the other world, has advanced technology, in the form of humanic robots. Robots that look like humans, but are emotionless, the perfect fighter. They also have advance magic. This world is ruled by two major Kings. One king is King Luis (need better name) the other is ruled by King Julius (need better name). King Luis rules the kingdom of (insert name here) King Julius rules (insert name here). King Luis has the technologic advantage of the assassin droids. They are robotic humans that are great for assassination, and all around fighting. They can be mass produced, but their magic use is greatly limited. Both assassin drones, and guardians, can be actual humans too. The humans are always more powerful and smarter, but are not expendable like the robots. King Julius has Guardians. The guardians are harder to make, mostly because of their great ability to use magic. Both Kings have only one son. King Luis’s son Greg (need better name) is 15 and does not want anything to do with his father or his country. He doesn’t want the responsibility of ruling the country, nor the does he want to put the effort into ruling the country. He is a good fighter, mostly to impress girls. His father, wanting him to grow character sends him off with the other foot soldiers to fight. He runs away, in the woods he finds a younger boy, about 14 years of age, a sleep under a tree. Soon the two of them strike up a friendship. They live in the woods for about two months, when the Guardians show up to find the other boy, name; Milt (need a much better name!). Mitch is King Julius’s son. The two boys, who don’t’ want to return to their kingdoms, run away, Greg fighting off the guardians. Milt isn’t much of a fighter, like his father wants him to be. He’s more of a range type user, and a magic user, who supports from the back lines. The two make a good team. The world of Agamon knows about the world of Earth. They mostly regard it as a place where outlaws escape too. This is exactly where Greg and Milt go. Two years later, and they have been on the run in earth for this who time. At the moment the two of them are living in a trailer home. One night the park at a rest stop, for once it’s a peaceful night with nothing chasing them. In the morning, Milt is looking underneath one of the beds, and to his extreme surprise, he finds a sleeping girl. Waking her up, Milt and Greg, force her to tell them why she is there. Explaining she says that she is running away from home, unfortunately, that is something that both Milt and Greg can easily believe. Her name is Kayla (the only name I have figured out and actually like). Kayla, through very much discussion, convinces the two boys to let her stay with them, for at least a little while anyway. About a week later, two assassin drones show up. Getting into battle positions the two boys easily take care of the two low class drones. Greg comments, “Seems like their getting lazy.” Kayla is completely shocked and, and at the same time, very very impressed. The princes explain their story to her, and tell her it would be best if she left. She agrees and goes on her way. A few nights later A entire, squadron of guardians come. The two boys are hard pressed. Suddenly someone comes out and saves them. When the battle is over, it turns out that this is Kayla. She explains that she had no idea they were also from Agamon, and that they were the princes, to say, she was very, very shocked. She herself was an exile from Agamon. During the battle she had shown amazing skill with both magic, and her GIGANTIC, sword.
Basic plot of rest of story, haven’t worked on it as much: Greg and Milt begin to trust Kayla, she is a good fighter, and obviously on their side. Soon the three are a perfect battle force. Kayla who is more powerful than both boys together, is giving them fighting and magic lessons. More and more assassin drones and guardians are coming after them. Soon humans, who are more powerful start coming as well. As harder opponents come, the boys get stronger and stronger. In one fight, people who Kayla recognizes show up. She is distressed and asks them why they are fighting for the ‘awful king’, referring to King Luis. They shake their heads, and the battle begins. Barely able to make it away, the three are on the run again. Turns out that these people were in the same training group as Kayla, but they were trained by the queen not the king. Now in truth (though Greg and milt don’t know this) Kayla is under orders from the queen. She purposely got herself exiled many years ago, under those same orders and is working in our world under the queen. The ‘friends’ of hers traded sides, and are now working for kind Luis, instead of keeping their true loyalty to the queen, king Luis’s wife, like Kayla.
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Posted: Tue Sep 16, 2008 11:06 pm
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petitefromage Vice Captain
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Posted: Sat Sep 27, 2008 6:08 pm
NEVER EVER type in a HUGE LONG PARAGRAPH, it give people headaches. Some people are very susceptible to them too. (hemm hemm, me!) I went and edited a little (just minor spelling mistakes, honest!) and made it a little bit more spaced...so now you know, NEVER TYPE A HUGE PARAGRAPH AND EXPECT TO GET GOOD COMMENTS, because people will get really bored halfway through...They'll have a hard time getting through the whole thing because of improper spacing (which can help build up suspense) It's harder on the eyes, because you can't skip to the next line as well as you could, so just remember your space! also, don't always go with the boring font, change it up!
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Posted: Sat Oct 04, 2008 2:07 pm
Thanks for the imput. Unfortunatly I ALWAYS forget to edit, and it come back to bite me. I also have the tendence to wirte long paragraphs.... I'll try to remeber to press the enter key some more. xd
i'm acctually thinking of changing what i have for an ending... if it can even be called an ending xp anyway.. i'll update when i find the time.
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Posted: Sun Nov 23, 2008 10:28 am
It is very interesting. You mentioned that you need better names for the two kings... I might be able to help with one of the names, if you are willing to listen that is.
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