to the kill we go just a matter of time to the thrill we go It's all that shown It's all fast It's all gone by On the beat to the rythm there we go It's over and done This is how i end it In the rythm of life
<3 the black lined heart
Posted: Sat Nov 15, 2008 2:19 pm
It's very full of emotion and realism, and it flows quite nicely. Good job! I just have one quick issue, a pet peeve of mine that drives me to insanity:
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This is how i end it
This is how I end it. I. Please capitalize that 'I'.