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 Posted: Sun Sep 07, 2008 1:12 pm
Shadows
A rays of celestrial light grace the darkness
These angelic beams protect the black wonders of the night
These wonders cling to anybeing living or the other
They are mere reflections of them
Wishing for life they follow loyally
only revealing themselves to the light
The light of which there living reflections fear.
These dark reflections what are they
The answer they whisper in the wind
We are shadows
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Posted: Wed Nov 12, 2008 6:24 pm
I'm not going to waste your time with proofreading, I'm sure you've already fixed it smile This is really complex and I like how I have to really focus to wrap my head around the meaning. I'm sure the shadow acts as a metaphor for something else, I'm having a little trouble figuring it out, but that's your call for how important that is. Some punctuation would help me with understanding the pace.
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Posted: Sun Feb 08, 2009 4:09 pm
I appricate the comment.
Thanks for the suggestion I'll see what I can do about the punctuation
By the way don't be afraid to be blunt many people want to hear i straight out but that a really great trait to have in the real world just don't be hesitatant about critiqe.
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