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xrysos

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PostPosted: Tue Aug 19, 2008 7:03 am


((For all those not on FF.net, R&R is 'Read and Review.' :3 Please Do. Now then, this isn't my actual book...this is more from the POV of a character in it...I had originally made this as an entry into the Writing Arena, but it didn't submit. [And I'm glad I saved it in Word. D:]))

TORES Report
Report 1
Date: Sept. 22, 7832, 0832hr
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However long it takes.

That what they said. Those were the orders.

However long it takes.

It occurs to me, now, that they did not realize how long it would take. One more level in which the human race is inferior.

The first level was creating beings more powerful and in some cases more intelligent than themselves.

If you could see the world in which I was brought into, then you would understand. I was the first response to the loss of equilibrium the human race was so dependent on, along with my unit. I am an android. My designation is TORES-1-XII. Tactical Operations, Reconnaissance, Extraction, and Surveillance. Unit 1, number 12. I was created in the year 3143, 23rd day in June at 0943.

The world's ecosystem has been destroyed within thirty-two years of the advent of a certain brand of gene-splicing technology that allows the end result to be displayed, and all life functions to be automatically applied. Because of this, people were able to create new forms of life, life that only existed in ancient mythology. Dragons, nagas, cockatrice, fauns, Ra, Horus, and other Egyptian deities, Coatls, Ahuizotl, Stymphalian birds, Symurgh, sea serpents, 'God', 'Satan'...the list goes on. Most of the creatures of ancient legend, from Abarimon to Zorigami, were brought to life. As a result, there was a large rise in mortality rates. Infants were more susceptible to the more ethereal beings, and the children were taken by the sentient, trickster-type beings. All were on the menu for larger, more base creatures. A special gene that was labeled the 'Holy Gene' was applied to all the 'Religious Figures,' which gave them incredible capabilities that far surpassed anything else in existence.

And that is how the TORES units came into play. There were forty-two units, all consisting of eighteen individuals. Twenty, if you included the two humans included to monitor our performance, and wound up dying quickly. We were expected to babysit, but our creators could never understand the conditions we were flung into. We were scattered over the earth with the asinine task of eradicating the new creatures.

It proved a fool's errand, as about 200 years after the creation of the TORES units, we were abandoned. The upper-class humans launched themselves off to the new moon colonies while the middle- and lower-class was left on earth to fend for themselves. In a last-ditch effort, nuclear warheads were scattered across the surface of the planet. They killed more humans than creatures, ironically. They were meant to hit major populations of the biologically engineered monstrosities, but many of those were close to large human populaces, as well. The resulting electromagnetic pulses destroyed all technology in their wake. Nearly every TORES unit was annihilated. Except me. I had fallen off a cliff into a deep crevasse, apparently made of a dense material similar to lead. Due to the fall, most of my functions were destroyed, along with my material identification scan. I shall--as humans say--"go out on a limb" and say that is was galena.

I was in that gorge for nigh on 4000 years.

I was saved, by someone that my programming dictated that I destroy, but the primary core processor that held that programming had fallen been annihilated, leaving behind the basic core processor, devoid of any of the previous military orders. I followed this man around, curious. How had he fixed me? Being without touch or pain sensitivity, I was intrigued. This man could do anything. He could make fire out of seemingly thin air, and conjure lightning from the heavens.

At least, that is what it seemed like. He had minute control over atoms and molecules, and could create friction enough to cause ignition or static discharge, or anything. I have concluded that this man, designated as 'Aergan', has extreme psychic abilities. ESP, psychokinesis, teleportation, transformation.

I shall have to study further. I am ignoring all other previous commands in favor of the curiosity that had been installed in me. However, I do believe that I shall have to investigate my own curiosity, as well. We were created to be emotionless, yet I believe that, being of the first generation, my curiosity may be a bug in my system. After the report, I shall run diagnostics.

More reports shall come.
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PostPosted: Tue Aug 19, 2008 9:48 am


Very interesting concept you have there Gallifrey. I think you may have a winner on your hands.

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PostPosted: Tue Aug 19, 2008 10:32 am


:3 <3

I know where I want to go with it, but I'm not sure it's the right direction. I have an idea of how to progress past chapter three, but...D,:< There's this great big battle sequence coming up in the real book and I don't think I can write it! I know what it looks like in my mind, but...I can't write it. Damned action-packedness. Why dost thou hate me so?

I think that after I move into the dorm and I get my computer again, I'll put up the book. I may want to re-write some of it, though. (Again.) >.< Just sitting and writing isn't always the best way to do so.
PostPosted: Tue Aug 19, 2008 2:12 pm


My daughter finished the first draft of her book and is now rewriting the first 4 chapters because they were written so long ago that the writing style doesn't match the rest of the book, so I understand about rewriting.

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