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 Posted: Mon Aug 11, 2008 2:53 pm
I made this song about an old girlfriend who always had some drama in her life she didn't deserve. I loved her but she gave up on her own life before any of my promises came through. enjoy and give me feed back and any ideas of how i could make music to go with it. all i know is i want the pre chorus to be sang sticato with some pinch harmonics or palm mutes. I know it needs work so please give me advice on it. For Her.
You fianlly hear that ringtone
For the third time today
You talk for Six hours
And never an akward pause
You only stop cause your mom screams up
And Your Step-dad kicks down the door
Their only angery cause he loves you
And they could never offer more
And He Says
Hey
I'll take you away
Hey
To a place we both will love
Hey
We'll only return in dreams
Hey
It's not to far off, you'll see
Their words mean nothing
You know eack letters a lie
She yells and he hits you
And it all makes you cry
Theres one man who gets you
His words help you by
You know it wont be much longer
So just listen to him and sigh
And He Says
Hey
I'll take you away
Hey
To a place we both will love
Hey
We'll only return in dreams
Hey
It's not to far off, you'll see
(Bridge)
It's going to get better
Can't get any worse
Hold on
It's almost time to leave
Your bags are packed
They'll see
Hey
I'll take you away
Hey
To a place we both will love
Hey
We'll only return in dreams
Hey
It's not to far off, you'll see
By Austin Cox
July 8 2008
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Posted: Mon Aug 11, 2008 6:59 pm
wow man, what can I say? Sure it's deppressing as ******** very well written. I think in some way or another people can relate to this song, and I think that's one of the things that make it so great, plus it's very well written, like I said.
sorry I can't give any advice for changes, I would leave it the way it is really. btw, chorus rocks.
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Posted: Thu Sep 11, 2008 6:55 pm
I'll be completely honest - I didn't like it. The subject matter has been done a thousand times before and a lot of the lines don't seem to be vital to getting the point across. Work on vocabulary. A lot.
I'll be interested to hear the finished song though, as it can transform the everyday into pure gold.
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