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KiraKiraDeath

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PostPosted: Thu Jul 31, 2008 10:03 pm


[Would acting as if [[nothings changed]]
Be painful enough to murder my last wishes?]





"Yes."




In reality, coming to terms with one's dreams would find me suicidal. But also, in reality, I could dream all day and still wish for your nightmares. Am I insane?




"Yes."



Will I ever stop thinking of what never happened?



"Yes,
Eventually you'll draw yourself
into the state of
{{Dreaming}}
Only to wake up in your
{{Nightmares}} Once again."


If for a some unknown reason I had been given the power to grant dreams.
I'd still like to wake up in my {{Nightmares}}

And if for that same unknown reason I could be granted the ablity to never feel pain, It would hurt to never feel the love that dwelled before that, I would surely suffer but whoes to say I'd feel that. Hmm?

And in these insane dreams I'd stand there staring at you and realize I'm just losing another memory I try to reach for you and I fall.




If I said I loved you
would you keep me silent?
If I showed you I loved you
would you push me away?
If I fixed your cold heart
would you break mine?


Even so,
Would you take my hand
and straighten me up
Like I was the soldier
You almost loved?
PostPosted: Sat Aug 02, 2008 8:48 pm


It's not whoes, it's who's.

Minor error aside, that was brilliant. The mental debate, all the different voices, and the logic of it blew my mind. I couldn't really understand what had happened, but that's good--if not for the reader, for you, the writer. I've been experimenting lately and I know how liberating it is to get something like this off your chest without directly explaining it. It also adds a certain mystery to the beauty of it.

All in all, I loved it. It was beautiful. WRITE MORE.

KirbyVictorious


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PostPosted: Sat Aug 02, 2008 9:00 pm


"And if for that same unknown reason I could be granted the ablity to never feel pain, It would hurt to never feel the love that dwelled before that, I would surely suffer but whoes to say I'd feel that. Hmm? "

That line struck me so hard and I know exactly why. That was like, me in a nutshell.
PostPosted: Sat Aug 02, 2008 9:26 pm


Impressive. I'm too tired for it to have sunk in all the way but I know that if I wasn't tired I would be EXTREMELY impressed. So I'll read it again later and write more why I liked it...

Gomenroia


KiraKiraDeath

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PostPosted: Mon Aug 04, 2008 8:58 am


Kirby : Thanks I always get those two mixed up sweatdrop

@Serenity: Thanks alot, I was actually skeptical about putting the little "Hmm?" in. (Wow i know i did something wrong their. Sorry i suck with grammar sweatdrop ) But now that I look at it, it makes me giggle ^^.

@ Gomen- Your name reminds me of Domo-kun for some reason and it makes me smile. :]
And thanks, you shouldn't push yourself so hard, go catch a few Zs
PostPosted: Mon Aug 04, 2008 10:59 am


Was at work on an overnight shift. Over time yes, short staffed also a yes though so not a lot of choice in my mind.

Gomenroia

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