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Taki_Hikarizuka

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Posted: Thu Jul 31, 2008 4:16 am

Ok so theres this guy that I really like... he's on my friend list here and I'm not telling who it is. He should know who he is because he recieved this poem in an e-mail:

Is it wrong?

Is it wrong for me to tell you that I love you,
Even though we have barely just met?

I can't help this overwhelming feeling.
I just have to tell you.

Feeling awkward
I'm not sure what to say

Thinking of the face you might make when you read these helpless words,
One of disgust;
One of shock;
One of confusion;
I feel afraid.

The thought of you,
It makes me so happy I could burst
It makes me crazy
It makes me sane

I get excited when I hear your name
I feel my pulse rush to my now colored cheeks

Is it wrong for me to love you,
Even though you’re not like me?

Is it wrong for me to love you,
Even though you might not care?

Is it wrong for me to love you,
Even though we cannot see each other?

These thoughts,
I can't seem stop them rushing in my pathetic mind.

I want you to tell me,
Is it wrong for me to love you?

(c)Taki_Hikarizuka

If anyone even reads this thing tell me if this poem sounds good, please?
I'm going to post this in a few other places to. {{IE. Journal, Forums, Guild.. etc.}}

Please be nice in telling me what you think,
<3 Taki

Posted: Thu Jul 31, 2008 10:07 am

Hey Taki! ^.^

I think this is a good, expressive poem. I like it doubly because it seems we're in the exact same situation right now x.x The latest poem I posted was written because of those feelings.

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Taki_Hikarizuka

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Posted: Thu Jul 31, 2008 11:10 pm

Thanks ^-^
I'm gonna go read yours and comment it and see how much of a similar situation we are in.

Posted: Fri Aug 01, 2008 12:24 am

ha XD
I think quite a few of us are in that situation, me included. I already posted two poems (three poems now) dedicated to the girl I like, and I'm still writing more. She doesn't even know that I am doing that yet. I'm still waiting for my chance to tell her in person.

I think you did a really good job in putting emotion in writing it. I hope things turn out well!

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Taki_Hikarizuka

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Posted: Mon Aug 04, 2008 11:42 pm

Kaito_7420

ha XD
I think quite a few of us are in that situation, me included. I already posted two poems (three poems now) dedicated to the girl I like, and I'm still writing more. She doesn't even know that I am doing that yet. I'm still waiting for my chance to tell her in person.

I think you did a really good job in putting emotion in writing it. I hope things turn out well!

Thanks! I really appriciate that Kaito-san.

I hope things turn out well for you also.

Posted: Wed Aug 06, 2008 9:04 am

Me likey. Way to put the awkward happiness/nervousness into it!

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Tseko the Living Shadow

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Posted: Sat Aug 23, 2008 1:06 am

my girl like my poetry even though i think it suck but none the less i still write... yours is a beautiful poem filled with emotion, joy, shyness, regret, happieness... i hope it turns out good for you...

Posted: Fri Sep 12, 2008 10:42 pm

jaffar8

my girl like my poetry even though i think it suck but none the less i still write... yours is a beautiful poem filled with emotion, joy, shyness, regret, happieness... i hope it turns out good for you...

thanks ^-^
And actually things did turn out ok, just not in the way I was expecting them to. ^^

Taki_Hikarizuka

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Tseko the Living Shadow

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Posted: Sat Sep 13, 2008 10:22 am

what? how so?

Posted: Sat Sep 20, 2008 3:20 pm

jaffar8

what? how so?

Well while I still deeply care about the person I wrote this poem too, I realized that there was someone else that I cared about more deeply.

I fell kinda bad about the whole situation, but it ended up working out in the end. And all is well. ^-^

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