|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Tue Jul 29, 2008 3:18 pm
Inspired partly by "The Wind Cries Mary". GO JIMI.
~
The mourning wind sighs as it Journeys across the earth; cradling Dead leaves and lone feathers In its insubstantial embrace, The adopter of the lonely and still. It cannot handle lack of motion; It heaves the sea and sways the trees And carries sweet scents through the air As it stirs the locks of a far-off lover.
Around and around it stirs the world Like a multicolored stew; a mix of Peoples carried ‘cross the sea Their sales filled with the wind That cannot afford to stop. The earth must be a blur to it; It passes quickly, fickle and light, Flitting past too fast to stop and see the Beauty and destruction it creates. The movement of a grain of sand Can topple mountains, trap waters, And end a world; but the wind, As it snatches the sand, Can’t ever stop to watch.
Stand on a cliff top; gaze out At the heaving sea, the scurrying clouds, And the roaring, screaming wind. What can you hear? You know it carries the stories of the ages Across the land, the seas, the ice, the desert sands Carries them in baskets, by the armful, Only too willing to free itself Dump them in other’s hands, Lighten the burden so it can Zoom free once more; move faster than light And escape the earth in a rush.
Wind, what stories do you tell As you drift and rush, driven by the past? Tell me of the storms you unleashed The clouds you danced among The towers you toppled The sailors you brought home. Tell me of lovers that entrusted their Embraces, their kisses to your care To deliver to soldiers, to sailors, to adventurers Thousands of miles away. Tell me of seeds planted, hills eroded, Sands blown across silent deserts To end up in a stranger’s hourglass. Tell me of birds, of leaves, of butterflies. Tell me your stories; tonight, We are all alone ‘neath the moon. Why do you moan? Why do you whisper? Tell me your secrets, wind.
Why do the pleasures of your stories escape you? Do you laugh in a stranger’s ear as you remember Times from centuries ago? Do you moan with longing as you travel across valleys And stir the skirts and curls of the girl Who blows you the kiss for another? Do you sigh when you hurl the rain Into the face of a man who holds a child -As none could ever hold you- And won’t let you tear them apart?
The poetic thoughts of a race who Was never as powerful as you; Do they make you stronger? Do they make you faster? Do they tear you apart? Or do they only make you wish As you travel endlessly around the earth, The perpetual explorer, That you were not wind, that you were not Forced to always move, keep pushing, keep rushing, Knowing that by stopping you forfeit existence But still wishing to be naught but motionless air So you could stop And see And listen To the stories that you never understood?
|
 |
 |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Tue Jul 29, 2008 10:06 pm
... You have grown extraordinarly as a writer. At least since the last time I was able to read your work.
Well I must say this reminded me a little of Remy. In both style and ideal. You see, she may have mentioned (or claimed) how the wind 'whispers' her stories. But you took that power of the wind... that myth and tale of the world and turned it against the very power of the wind itself.
Now.. reading back that seemingly makes no sense what so ever.. stare Let's clarify. You described how generations upon generations have used the wind as an uncanny messenger. And those almost insignificant acts or longing, of care, of devotion to another, tore the power (dare I say the heart) out of the very wind itself.
To feel alone, outcasted, and demoralized can shatter the being of any human on this earth.... and if the Wind is personified in this such manner, it too can be shattered.
|
 |
 |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Wed Jul 30, 2008 12:49 am
You have been Tak-esque lately. This is no less than any of your previous works, meaning it was good.
For some reason, this made me think of Pochahontas, you know, the Disney movie? Didn't they sing some kind of crazy song about the wind?
|
 |
 |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Wed Jul 30, 2008 12:54 am
Yes Voxx, it was called Colors of the Wind. I believe.
|
 |
 |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Wed Jul 30, 2008 1:05 am
Yes! Ha, I remember now! *off-key warbling*
|
 |
 |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Wed Jul 30, 2008 9:41 am
My ancestors knew their s**t. I can canoe as well as her now 3nodding
Thanks, lil bro! sweatdrop You make me all shy. And yeah, my writing style changed a while back...for the better, I'd like to think. Remy inspired this poem called Disconnected Thoughts, which is a lot like hers >< just not as good...and then from there I wrote a bunch more that are somewhere between Remy's and my old ones. I guess I talk to her too much sweatdrop sweatdrop sweatdrop
I love that you got the message so clearly, 'course I didn't expect any less from my triplet wink The wind doesn't always seem sad to me, but it's always personified as screaming, howling, roaring, etc.; and I suppose to windier places it is. BUt I think it has to do more with the climate; in the north the wind would be a nuisance, but down here it's very welcome, so we don't think so badly of it. Our wind is happy....
|
 |
 |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Wed Jul 30, 2008 6:45 pm
OH GOD WALL OF TEXT. Anyways, read and enjoyed, but I'm gonna have to ask that you do another narrative soon, as I miss the Kirby narrative. Please?
|
 |
 |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Thu Jul 31, 2008 7:21 pm
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Thu Jul 31, 2008 7:49 pm
This is lovely.
Only nitpick: 'sales' should be 'sails'.
|
 |
 |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Thu Jul 31, 2008 8:02 pm
First off, I must thank you for making this poem - its been a dream of mine to have written a poem of the wind since last year. Everytime I go outside it seems a breeze follows me and this is something I really do enjoy more than most anything in the world. This poem is one of your best kirbs, partly because it covers one of my favorite topics. I've always felt so comfortable in the wind because its all around me and it almost feels like someone is there you know? (Oh and a personal aside - I've always wished I could be carried off by the wind forever because it feels so nice)
|
 |
 |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
 |
|
|
|
|
|