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 Posted: Mon Jul 28, 2008 5:11 am
Man, you better let me back it up and start at the beginning.
Me and Tommy were brothers, although we had nothin' in common and sure as hell didn't look alike; well one day back in '76 Tommy comes up to me and says "Hey Paul, I got few extra bucks to spare, how's about you and me go to the nude bar and see if we can get in?" Tommy and I was just sixteen back then, so the prospect of a female in the nude proved to be a bit tempting, and off we went. The bouncer was a big guy named Jack, and Jack wasn't too keen on us tryin' to bribe him, but after we upped his spare pay to ten, he let us in after making sure we knew not to drink.
Man, it was there that I met Sheila, but I'll get back to her later (she ain't important now) as someone else caught my eye that evening too; the guys name was Albert Fitz, and he was a Ginni loan shark who actually preferred to have his debts owed be paid by blood. You know, a real nutjob, but this guy knew how to lose at pool real well, and me and Tommy whooped him somethin' fierce in a game of nine-ball.
Well Fitz decides he don't like that, and drags me and Tommy out into the alley where he proceeds to beat the tar out of both of us 'til we can't even cry 'cuz of the pain. So me and him know not to fight back, and as we're sittin' there I hear this sound; turned out Mr. Fitz had decided to pull his gun on me and was screamin' some s**t about makin' a fool out of him.
The entire time I just hear Tommy over there crying out and bawling and s**t, and I tells him, "Tommy, man we're gonna be okay".
Fitz never stood a chance, 'cuz that's the first time Tommy did what he became known to do best.
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Posted: Mon Jul 28, 2008 9:48 am
A superhero, written Zahmen-style? This will be interesting XD
But nice writing, as always! Was this inspired by The Dark Knight at all? After seeing that movie, I really want to write a story about a villain as creepy as the Joker...
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Posted: Mon Jul 28, 2008 11:14 am
Wooow. 3nodding More pliz?
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Posted: Mon Jul 28, 2008 1:01 pm
O.o dude. Write more. PLease?
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Posted: Mon Jul 28, 2008 7:17 pm
Hmm... This is going to be interesting. I need to go watch that movie too... So much to do cry
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Posted: Mon Jul 28, 2008 9:11 pm
Today, we had a German arrested off our beach because he had stripped down.
But like Hawk, I am very surprised to see a story of a super hero written in your style. It shall be interesting to say the least. A deffiniate sense of realism will add great depth to a superhero story in my mind.
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